by ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Dec 19th, '09, 14:19
chorus was, sorta weird, good idea but could have used a bit more pressence.
pronouncation is not good. its your accent i get that, i got the same problem, but it could be alot clearer. sorta sounds like your not expressing your words enough. a good trick is to rap your rap with a pen in your mouth, if you can spit it clear with a pen in your mouth when you spit it normal your pronouncation and definition of each word is alot better. alot fo your words blend together as if they are all the one word.
lyrics were ok, simple but you flowed across it nice.
the beat was different and i like different, it worked for the concept.