Chambers Monday Freestyle (produced by 2deep)

[Mr. Chambers]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lR40H-QljJc

sorry its late been hella busy lately. did a story track to switch it up for yall.

i fed tash's song.

[Tash8]

ok, i liked the second verse the most, but I didn't like the hook. The idea is good of the hook, u just didn't execute.
Also, Id say work on your pronunciation, that's honestly your biggest weakness, cause technically ur fine. u just slur words a lot. Overall, I think this song was cool, dope beat, nice concept, ur flow was consistent like usual. technically your all there, u just need to now find new styles and expand as a rapper. keep it up bro.

I would appreciate ur feed on Collie California.

[Jay Tunes]

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great story telling damn

Flow - good, liked how you changed the volume on the ending of some bars.
Lyrics - like a said, great story telling type shit... nice shit, didnt get some lines but it wasnt necessary
Other - Hook was alrightttt, didnt really like it, but it was ok bc i enjoyed every verse equally.

[Mr. Chambers]

I got you tash when I get home.

Good looks jay. I got you too but when I went to leave feed hulkshare wasn't working. But I got you bro.

Thanks to everyone who is listening. Even if you ain't leaving comments I appreciate it.

[Scrubz]

Shit was amazing homie, only negative thing i can say is that i didnt like the 2nd half of the hook. First vere was my fav, i could relate to some of the things you said. Dope shit man, beat was sick aswell!

[Block]

My only problem is that you're trying to catch the snare a lot, which stems from a lack of syllables per line.

now little danny was a normal typical teen (you said teeeen) an alcohol pothead, a cynical fiend..

Would have been much better executed by saying:

Now little danny was a normal typical teen, an alcholic pothead, he's a cynical fiend

Adding those two syllables (and stressing different words) would greatly improve the flow.


Also, I know it's habit, (it was for me too) but try not to stress just the word that hits the snare. Stress the entire phrase (typical teen for example). It adds seemingly more emotion. Also, when and where you stress words will open more styles of flowing and rhyme schemes for u.

To fix slurring (again, I had to as well) just practice opening your mouth wider when you speak. Even in everyday life

edit: doing is meant to be "song" but my phone won't let me scroll down to edit.

That being said, I liked the doing and the story telling.

[Mr. Chambers]

Good looks on the feedback. I seem to have had the slurring issue for a while. I'll try that shit you suggested

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

delivery is nice on this....lyrics are great...breath control is awesome..
just the hook is mixed too loud...panned wrong i dont know..somthing went wrong there

[Mr. Chambers]

Yeah I'm still trying to master my hook mixing game. Lol. I think I mixed one of my layers wrong. Good looks on peeping it.

[B.A.D.]

lol, I thought you were going to use the cypher song, anyway, dont do that anymore, its outdated, we'll sort something else out.

ooough, when I got to the hook I heard all this distortion of frequencies. No no no, u have to fix that haha. I think I just realized what the problem of your quality is here, your microphone is picking up too much noise. so its very probable that your acapella might be peaking. or maybe is how you work the volumes. you have to use the gain to add volume, not the faders, cuz otherwise this is what happens.
hmm... I'm interested too see exactly what are you doing when mixing, cuz I think you are either doing something extra or missing something essential. so. we can discuss that on msn when u have time.

About the song itself, everything was perfect except the beat. This could've been a great great track but the beat choice is not good, it gets too mellow, something darker and more sinister would've done a better job. this one is a happy sad kind of. not feeling it.
the flow, lyrics, delivery, hook, emotion, style, technique. its top notch. numero uno. high title. although the hook has a couple un-tuned parts, its really nothing that bothers too much, and actually with a better beat it would've been un-noticeable.

yeah, greatness on your part. just extra work on the mixing and yeah.... lets make that album happen

[Mr. Chambers]

I just got it mixed the other night. I promised I was going to release something different 3 weeks ago lol

[B.A.D.]

I just got it mixed the other night. I promised I was going to release something different 3 weeks ago lol

was that replying to me or???

[Mr. Chambers]

Yeah mother fucker lol. I'm gonna be on msn tonight I might have a song from the album mixed tonight. Holler back young'n

[Atone]

i like this, do you have a tape? the flow is pretty dope, chorus is good to, the beat fits perfect for this story as well man, great song

[Mr. Chambers]

Yeah. I got 4 on datpiff. Search for Tom chambers. I can link you later. Good looks on listening bro