"coming back"

[Block]

First verse of an unfinished story song. I know the beat is tagged, I'm in the process of leasing it to put this on a later project (with a hook and second verse, obviously).. I just wanted to get a little more material out before our EP drops.


http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10945993





it's just another day, another soldier with a suitcase,
a briefing with a new face breathing down my neck..
I thought that they would let me in, (since I already went to war),
test score's aver-age and I don't get a check..
I'm working for the burger-man and I don't get a rest..
(I'm working to reserve a hand and try to pay the rent),
They had said that my injury was something of traumatic..
something never asked for, but something that had happened
on my last tour, (I wonder what that stands for),
I only hit my head when our convoy was getting rushed,
flanked from the sides, (I had no problem sitting up, thanks)..
Now I cannot read, and now I'm learning how to write again
I'm learning how to live my life
(without a rifle gripping solely to my shoulder)
like, we were something meant to be..
Holding to my shoulder like, I was thrusting wrecklessly,
ecstacy and all of that nonsense, (god bless America),
Marry her, she's got tits ((got tits))..
suckle all you can until she scuttles you to pay rent..
warships rust and I was just another vagrant on the deck..
(they're naming me a veteran)
(their favor-ite assessment of the wreckages)
a pessemistic sedative, a 'thank you' with a letter missing
(kill me if you must)..
think you might better sift and pillage through the dust...

[Block]

Oh. I fed Kez's new song.

[Solace]

This is much better than the diss, I really enjoyed this. It's quite late here, 2am, so I cba to give you some full details on what I think of this. Waiting on the ep.

[Block]

This is much better than the diss, I really enjoyed this. It's quite late here, 2am, so I cba to give you some full details on what I think of this. Waiting on the ep.

Haha, thanks man. And yeah, disses are kind of out of my element.. I really didn't know what kind of emotion to go for with that (the diss) or anything, lol..

Anyway, thanks again. The EP will be a few weeks. Maybe is cooking up a thread here soon.

[Eedee]

You have some sick multi's in there man. I like the lyrics a lot!!

[classthe_king]

Lyrically it was pretty nice, the spoonfull influence was huge here. I still thing that there's something wrong with the mixing...maybe it's just the quality but your vocals sound weird.

[Block]

i'm pretty sure the mixing is as close to perfect as it can get.

[EyeSpick]

I agree about the Spoonful influence being very noticeable here. It's a good verse and the flow/mixing was nice. My only complaint was at the beginning it sounds a bit rushed, it's on beat, but the pitch of your voice coupled with how quickly you say it makes it sound awkward. Imo, still nice though. Just trying to be constructive.

[Phantom]

i'm pretty sure the mixing is as close to perfect as it can get.

lol @ that statement

[Block]

i'm pretty sure the mixing is as close to perfect as it can get.

lol @ that statement

Are you really trying to start something? For the equipment used, this is as close to perfect that it can get.

Lol @ trying to be condescending and failing. Good job, you succeeded at being illiterate.

[AbramIsaac]

I wasn't sure how to approach this at first.

I was wondering about your voice. It's different, maybe even a little odd--which doesn't necessarily translate to "bad". I just listened to this one again, and I think I've found a reference point for it.

You sound like some of the Northern California rappers I used to listen to back in the day. Not lyrically, as you've got them bested in that department, but vocally. Don't get me wrong, you're more refined, but the similarity is there. It's a hip hop culture in it's infancy, up there in the Emerald Triangle. Secluded and small.

But some of the groups, white guys mostly, have vocalists that have a similar delivery. Their stuff was weird at first, because it was so different, but I grew to like it. I would guess that the same holds true for you, and probably more so because of the fact that you have a more polished and refined style than they did.

As far as this verse itself, I think your lyrics have a poetic quality. Your delivery isn't bad, but it is sort of unique for me. I don't have a strong reference point to compare it to, but it doesn't seem wrong.

You have a unique sound. I don't think it's for everyone, but that's okay. You don't seem to do the personal relation type of song. This is more of a snapshot in time, not really a confessional. Again, a stylistic choice, not something that was done incorrectly.

Interesting beat choice. Bluesy is good for this type of thing.

[Tash8]

You sound like some of the Northern California rappers I used to listen to back in the day..

Those echo'd overlays almost make him sound like a bay area rapper..Almosts sounds hyphy, expect lyrical (never thought i'd put those two words together)

[Block]

Thanks, man. I appreciate the detailed and thoughtful critique / feed.

And yeah, I agree that it's not for everyone. In the long run that may work to my advantage, because I'll stick out more with a unique sound. (thinking of Grives, Aesop, Sage Francis, etc.) Then again, it may not.. But it's cool. I always change deliveries to suite the song type.

As for the personal relation / introspective type of songs.. I actually have a TON of those written, they're just unrecorded at the moment. I think you'll be surprised by the EP, if you think I don't do those but I do love storytelling songs.

Again, thanks for the feed.

I wasn't sure how to approach this at first.

I was wondering about your voice. It's different, maybe even a little odd--which doesn't necessarily translate to "bad". I just listened to this one again, and I think I've found a reference point for it.

You sound like some of the Northern California rappers I used to listen to back in the day. Not lyrically, as you've got them bested in that department, but vocally. Don't get me wrong, you're more refined, but the similarity is there. It's a hip hop culture in it's infancy, up there in the Emerald Triangle. Secluded and small.

But some of the groups, white guys mostly, have vocalists that have a similar delivery. Their stuff was weird at first, because it was so different, but I grew to like it. I would guess that the same holds true for you, and probably more so because of the fact that you have a more polished and refined style than they did.

As far as this verse itself, I think your lyrics have a poetic quality. Your delivery isn't bad, but it is sort of unique for me. I don't have a strong reference point to compare it to, but it doesn't seem wrong.

You have a unique sound. I don't think it's for everyone, but that's okay. You don't seem to do the personal relation type of song. This is more of a snapshot in time, not really a confessional. Again, a stylistic choice, not something that was done incorrectly.

Interesting beat choice. Bluesy is good for this type of thing.

[Mr. Chambers]

no offense, but i'm tired of yall blowing smoke up our asses (pause). there's people who have been waiting for this EP longer then i've been waiting for mine and maybe's collab. just saying......

[Maybe]

no offense, but i'm tired of yall blowing smoke up our asses (pause). there's people who have been waiting for this EP longer then i've been waiting for mine and maybe's collab. just saying......

I know man, but it ain't smoke. Personal life problems nobody here gives a shit about, hence why I don't bother explaining. Both our feature and the EP are coming sooner than you think though, and I'm working with a few other members on stuff as of last week.