by Kez » Mar 3rd, '13, 03:45
The beat is pretty sweet. The concept of this song is exactly my kind of thing so that's a good start.
Geno I thought your vocals were a bit quiet but I could still hear them okay. Clearly you worked on the flow to make it fit the beat, but in the process it doesn't sound that natural, there's a couple bits where you stop and wait to start the next line rather than kind of joining them together. I dunno how long you been doing this this is just the impression I got when I listened to it.
Eedee you sounded a bit more confident and fit the track a bit better as a result, could feel a bit more resentment in what you were saying. Also thought you had slightly better rhymes, the lesbian porn rhyme was the standout for the song to me. You also had a bit of a stronger opinion in your lyrics, with the whole hypocrisy of church thing. Not that Geno didn't, I just felt yours more. Your flow's a bit better, you obviously tried to play with it a bit more, there's still a lot of pauses and it sounds a bit awkward at times when you pause and then continue your lyrics. There's no real reason to stop so much, at least not in my eyes.
Overall I didn't think it was too bad. Probably wouldn't re-listen though, being honest. Also, the attempt to cut out the Sinima tag was really choppy and obvious, it completely destroys the feel of the song; would have been easier to just admit you used a free download beat rather than try to pretend it doesn't exist. Minor point, just my opinion, but whatever.