Ya'll Don't Even Know Rock/Rap

by **DelinQuent** » Feb 15th, '09, 20:49

took the beat Wayne used for "Prom Queen" and did a completely different song.

http://www.myspace.com/iamdelinquent

http://www.zshare.net/audio/55674846494d60b1/

feedback :y:

LYRICS:
Verse One:and i'm under no control, tell me do you wanna roll?
wanna see the other side? of a motherfucker like/
me? you'll like me not likely, only like me when i'm writing/
love songs... fuck ya'll/
like, ya'll dont even know, the pain that i own/
and ya'll dont even know, the anger i hold/
and ya'll could never see, the other side of me/
cause whats inside of me, stays hiding underneath/

Bridge:and they love me when i'm on the song, hate me when i'm on/
my own, but i fuckin walk alone, i dont need no one/
and they love me when i'm on the song, hate me when i'm on/
my own, but i fuckin walk alone, ya'll dont even know

Chorus:and i'm fiiiiine on my own/
and i knowww it's so cold/
but that's life, in my shoesss/
got love i got none/

Second Bridge:i hate the way you love me, hate the way you hate me/
hate the way you make me, so motherfuckin angry/

Verse Two:when i cried out for help, no one would help/
best advice i got was motherfucker help yourself/
so i fuckin helped myself, let me tell you it was hell/
not a love song, but fuck ya'll/
cause ya'll dont even know, how my heart goes cold/
and ya'll dont even know, how ya shit gets old/
ya'll could never see, the anger in me/
but the anger in me, is about to be released/

Bridge

Chorus

End

by **B.A.D.** » Feb 15th, '09, 20:54

never hurd wayne's track

damnz, the mixing is diferent here, voice is hard to understand, you should post the lyrics, I love the swagg you got here man, the flow is really good, from what I understand its really good, this is something I could dance, hmm but I highly recomend that you ask tash or sajjad to help you with new mixings, either way a very enjoyable track, DQ's back!!! :y:

by **DelinQuent** » Feb 15th, '09, 20:56

my bad, totally forgot lyrics lol

posted now in original post

and thanks for the quick feed ax :y:

by **B.A.D.** » Feb 15th, '09, 20:57

DelinQuent wrote:my bad, totally forgot lyrics lol

posted now in original post

and thanks for the quick feed ax

word, I can enjoy it better with the lyrics, downloaded to my mp3 :y:

by **DelinQuent** » Feb 15th, '09, 21:02

thanks maybe, i been working on my vocals for a good while now. i'm actually considering taking some professional lessons to extend my vocal capabilities.

by **DelinQuent** » Feb 15th, '09, 21:14

thanks chet, and no offense taken lol

by **gutawafang** » Feb 16th, '09, 01:43

LOL. Delinquent, your style of rapping is consistent I guess. The way you rapped this is sorta like how you sang in Ring around the Rosie, Pockets full of posey.

by **DelinQuent** » Feb 16th, '09, 03:08

whats funny?

but yes, i like to keep things consistent, i've found a style that i like. i plan to stick with it

by **<Stiiccy>** » Feb 16th, '09, 03:28

yeh this sucked dick dude...sorry...

mixing was ok i guess...the beat was bad quality tho

rhymes sucked...so simple dude...the topic was meh generic as hell

you need work dude...major work..

by **Tash8** » Feb 16th, '09, 03:31

i liked it, not a great song but for some reason i enjoyed listening to it.

can't really go more indepth because i don't understand what you were trying to do with the track.

by **neversnooze** » Feb 16th, '09, 03:55

i like that rock and rap feel. it was pretty good but i guess the mixing around your chorus could get a little touch up. flow and delivery fairly well. work on your chorus and thats the only negative side i noticed :wave:

7/10

by **DelinQuent** » Feb 16th, '09, 04:16

sticcy, if you havent noticed, i dont go for complexity in my raps. i dont find complexity to be a skill. i find making an enjoyable song to be a skill. but again, i respect your opinion and i thank you for taking the time to listen. :y:

tash- thanks for taking time to listen, the aim of this track is like me saying how people i know in person have never been friendly until i started making moves with the music, then all of a sudden they're all friendly. so it's like, in high school you hated me, why all of a sudden are you trying to be friends now? lol.

neversnooze-thanks for taking time to listen, just trying different things while also remaining myself.

i appreciate everyone's feed :y:

by **<Stiiccy>** » Feb 16th, '09, 05:04

i didnt mean complexity wise...i just meant iver all goodness wise..the lyrics sucked

by **°[~CHR!$~]°** » Feb 16th, '09, 13:03

did you use autotune on a ROCK beat?!...
actually i love rockish beats but that one was meh...your singin is annoying after the 3rd time....sorry man...not a fan of this track...thought it would be more decent since i thought rockish beats cant be unenjoyable...but you proved me wrong..lyrics were simple to wack...flow was meh too much expanding in my opinion
no hate man... :sweating: