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New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 07:46

http://www.zshare.net/audio/55696541a291c9dc/

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this song is based on a soldier from the veitnam war ...PROPS TO TASH FOR THE MIXING

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as every single day pass, i lose a little hope,
if jesus dont come, man im aimin for my throat,
cuzz this is war now, veitcong in my sights,
been here for five months, seen blood day and night,
this war i dont suport, but they say i gotta fight,
at the age of 19, nation sendin me to die,
freedom aint free, goverment lies and lies,
i like to see that mutha fucka, come here and fight,
i lost my best freind, my captin and my sqaud,
every battle that i fought, charlie get the last shot,
that flag on my shoulder, is the only hope i got,
am i fightin my rights, or just goverment ally ties,
but if im not mistakin, what happened in 45,
i guess savin the world, still comes with a price,
i got 50 men, and a hundred about to die,
when there family gets the note, ill just say its from you guys


i write my family daily, desribin all the hell,
i cant keep em worried, for the mission i wont fail,
defendin my home, my life and my station,
i salute no man, this hole is ever gappin,
for we got no support, from our home nation,
spittin at my feet, god they must be mistakin,
am i the enemy, i got all this false hatin,
aint never killed a baby, i aint never been a rapist,
this war aint my choice, and niether was it theres,
impearlistic communism, goverment mentally impared
millions have done died, have you got any care,
all my freinds are dead, so you can relax in that chair,
i aint no official, im just a citizin,
doin what im told, just like the other million men,
guess you couldnt handle, all this hell that we are in,
dont need no support, from a traitor ..i wish that he was here,

machine guns whatchin, snipers in the trees,
i whatched 10 go down, beggin on they knees,
they say we gotta pray, hope hes whatchin over me,
dont know my path, but i never will retreat,
got a m-16 laced with oxycottin,
either battlin on the hill, or smugglin drugs for proft,
i got greece on my face, and the enemy is still whatchin,
one wrong move, thousand rounds will be poppin,
sittin in the rain, my back against my homie,
heads aint in the mud, and its a lil less lonly,
i think hes got maleria, it just hasnt dawned on him
hes gotta a wife and 2 kids,
this presure weighed on him,
2 days later, the desiease stayed on him,
asleep at night, and charlie, did an ambush on him,
when will this stop, man god only knows,
no time soon, just whatch the jets go,


(hook)

in the time of the wars, i see danger (danger),
fightin for whats right and for my savior (savior)
cant you see the light in the mangor (mangor)
lord watch us now, and please save us (save us)


feed is appriciated
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby gutawafang » Feb 16th, '09, 07:53

Your voice is GREAT!!! :y:

I feel the emotion man! You do flow QUITE well. Cut down on your "breathings".
Otherwise, :y:
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 07:56

gutawafang wrote:Your voice is GREAT!!! :y:

I feel the emotion man! You do flow QUITE well. Cut down on your "breathings".
Otherwise, :y:

thanks man...and yeh i just noticed how hard i was breathing...damn didnt even notice after i recorded it
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby gutawafang » Feb 16th, '09, 07:58

LOL. You know... though i ain't not really a pro, my advice is for you to mute the beat after you record over it. Only then will you realize you breathe alot. And you can CUT the breathings by selecting the correct wavelengths. Feel me? :)
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 08:00

gutawafang wrote:LOL. You know... though i ain't not really a pro, my advice is for you to mute the beat after you record over it. Only then will you realize you breathe alot. And you can CUT the breathings by selecting the correct wavelengths. Feel me? :)

i got you homie...usually my breathing isnt that bad...
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby gutawafang » Feb 16th, '09, 08:05

I love My Demon My Angel the most yo! Reminds me of Blink 182's song I Miss You. I love this is the end too! I think you're a good rapper man. Good voice!

Yeah, I love demon angel the most! Cool man! :happy:
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 08:10

gutawafang wrote:I love My Demon My Angel the most yo! Reminds me of Blink 182's song I Miss You. I love this is the end too! I think you're a good rapper man. Good voice!

Yeah, I love demon angel the most! Cool man! :happy:

thanks home skillet :flower: ...
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby Solace » Feb 16th, '09, 08:14

Really liking this shit man, tbh your voice isnt annoying as i usually hear it as lol. Like the beat you chose, fits perfectly. And i love that hook dude. Keep it up, 9/10 :y:

EDIT: Tommorow this will be up on TRShadyMusic :y:
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 08:15

Epiphany wrote:Really liking this shit man, tbh your voice isnt annoying as i usually hear it as lol. Like the beat you chose, fits perfectly. And i love that hook dude. Keep it up, 9/10 :y:

thanks man!!
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 08:25

Sarah wrote:Sounds sick :y: you've improved

thanks woman!!! :flower:
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967 [prod. by Tash8]

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 11:27

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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967 [prod. by Tash8]

Postby mcZu » Feb 16th, '09, 12:52

Pretty dope, loved the lyrics and the story you were telling. Just some lines seemed a bit rushed, which resulted in your flow being off at some points. The breathing part was actually good, it added to the dark aura this story had, but you could have controlled it abit better at some points. Your delivery was good, especially in the third verse, damnn.. Loved how you flowed the first couple lines of the third verse.
Your singing voice is not bad, though it needs improvement, chorus was good though. Mixing and beat were great, so probs to Tash for that. Overall a nice song you got there.
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967 [prod. by Tash8]

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 16th, '09, 13:00

thanks homie...!
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967 [prod. by Tash8]

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Feb 16th, '09, 13:08

1st of all...lol@prod by tash8 when the beat is from KA :p
but damn hook is bonkers :y: good mixing by tash there...your delievery is decent too
what i noticed is that you rush the word "goverment"...hehe...some words are rushed...
rhymes were creative and you played well with your pronouncation..8.3/10
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Re: New: Sticcy Z - Nam 1967 [prod. by Tash8]

Postby Jay-19 » Feb 16th, '09, 13:48

Great emotions on this track bro! Really good!
Lyrics are really good, I love these kind of songs. But it seems like you doesn't pronounce some of the words in it completely, like you just cut it off when there's like 2 letters of the word left you know?

The heavy breathing is something you might want to cut down on, you know just mute the breathings or whatever. I did it too on some tracks, but now I use to mute the breathings, so that's not a big problem actually.

The hook is really nice, something different from you than I've heard before, which is cool.

Your flow stays on point throughout the whole song.

Overall, really good job bro! :y:
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