AhdduB - I'm Ready (Hopefully lol)

[Solace]

Yeah the reverb was intense lololol, calm that down. I loved your scream at the beginning, actually didn't expect that and so many people wouldn't feel comfortable doing it. A lot of times you slur, I can barely understand you. I heard "KAJksjasdkjksdakjda, I gave a blowjob to a shoppin bill". And I think I'm listening to the fixed version too, so I kind of feel bad critiquing it with what Eedee already said about your older version. :s You've done better. You were more ready before lol.

[Kez]

Okay

First of all I like the atmosphere you put across with your voice. You already sound pretty confident and more importantly it sounds like you're having fun on the track. You have the kind of voice that makes you sound like you'd jump around the beat a lot. Which is a good thing in some way and bad in others. Eedee has a good point if this is the voice you use on all your tracks, though; it works pretty well here, but it's definately not what you want to become your voice you use in every track.

Don't really care about the amount of reverb you use on your talking intro. Although I think it was a bit long, you might be better not explaining to them about how you've waited two years to record a song.

You had this song waiting around for two years? Why would you leave something for so long? Lyrics become dated very quickly if they're unique. And if you focus so much on making a great "first impression" you will never get it to be as good as you want.

The lyrics aren't too bad at times, but at others they don't seem to make much sense to me. What's a stoner slouch? And some of them aren't really proper rhymes, and depend more on you having quite a "wacky" pronunciation. But they weren't bad, there was some alright stuff in there. There wasn't that much personality in the lyrics themselves though, hopefully that'll come with time.

Your flow and pronunciation both need work. It starts off pretty nice, but at times you just have to completely rush through your lines so it ruins the whole effect. Like how you had to miss out the "French kiss" in the shotgun barrel line. A couple of lines I flatout wouldn't have understood if I wasn't reading the lyrics at the same time.

You definately slur a lot of words as well which is never good. Knowing you record in your room I understand why it's hard to get good quality, but you have to work hard at it. Got to try not to move as little as you can, keep a good distance from the mic, keep your voice level so you don't get pops, mix it with the right effects. Just takes a lot of practice. And it will never sound "perfect", you just have to get it to a tolerable level to where it doesn't affect the actual song much.

And you shouldn't really waste your time "updating" songs to make them better. Look forward. If you already waited two years to record this song, the last thing you wanna do is stay on that same song. Move on and make your next song better, don't try to improve your old ones.

So yeah, not bad but you need to work on a fair bit of shit as well. I liked this more than I liked the last song I checked by you at any rate.

[Ticalrecords]

ay thanks for the feedback bruh, much appreciated. i will definitely utilize what you said.