GO TO MY LAST POST![I CANT RAP]

[Darkblade44431]

lol, yes, my delivery is horrible. I still plan on working on that for this song. Thanks for the feedback DQ. Hmm...but idk, i think the flow is decent. Anyways, i'll re-record this, again. Also look forward to a good song...hopefully, i think it's coming along real nicely so far.

[DelinQuent]

well i said flow was off because it sounded like it was, idk. lol.

[Darkblade44431]

Maybe my delivery affected it. meehhhh...i need to work on my calm songs, as far as the way they sound. I might just re-record this in a completely different way.

[Darkblade44431]

Thanks Chet. Glad to know its an at least somewhat of an improvement. Yeah, i will work on the delivery and try not to completely change it, cuz i got better uses for what i'm thinking of. I can have emotion, its apparently just my problem having emotion in a calm song. And thanks for givin props for postin it here, i plan on doing that for a while, unless i decide not to rap anymore(hopefully not) or somethin.
edit:
i swear to you guys though, i WILL have a dope mixtape when it comes out, and still plan to call it "What is Positive?"

[Darkblade44431]

lol.
oohhhhh god, i need to stay up late to night to try to make up for the terrible day i've had.

[Darkblade44431]

lol, already have. I usually have a bad day anyway.

[Tornado]

Like the concept, but u need more of a ..um, attitude or something for your voice, some lines bit basic,,but keep going

[Darkblade44431]

Thanks. Here is a new recording of it.
This still isn't the finished version, cuz there are some problems with it. But other than stuff like mic problems and me going to fast on the first part, would someone mind telling me how it was? Am i still just talking over a beat? Did i do any better on the emotion...???....etc....ok, please comment and tell me if this is ok.
Here is the link:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/13479755c593a868/

[Speech]

didn check your older version but the lyrics are too emo for me....yeah you sound like you had some enrgy in there but still not good yet....flow was a case for it's own...you tried flowing i can see...many ppl who start just write shit and care jack for flow....but you tried, failed but tried so your going the right way if you keep workin
quality is not to be critizied, i mean, what can you do but buying a pop filter and a better mic and mix your shit....lol wow now there was criticism....oh well
if you have any role models in rap, listen to their shit more often....rhyme diff rhymes with their flow, soon your own flow will be created....well hopefully haha

peace

[Darkblade44431]

Alright, thanks man. Yeah, i still don't really know my style yet, i think it will develop after either a few songs or just when i finish this mixtape. But i got flow for another song i'm working on, its just i wanted somethin a little different for this. Oh well, i liked this. Thanks for the feedback.

[Darkblade44431]

BUMP! Need more feedback.

[Darkblade44431]

BUMP! AGAIN! Damnit somebody else give feedback on the re-re-recorded version!

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BUMP! AGAIN! Damnit somebody else give feedback on the re-re-recorded version!

i listened but for acting like your god and "deserve" feedback you can go to fuck no one owes you anything man

[Darkblade44431]

lol, i wasnt acting like god. I just want people to comment on it. And don't even look at this topic if you're just gonna come in here to just post something useless like that, prick.

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lol, i wasnt acting like god. I just want people to comment on it. And don't even look at this topic if you're just gonna come in here to just post something useless like that, prick.

i came in listened, went to the last page and saw your comment, ill post what i want were i want maybe you should stop acitng like poeple owe you feed