Sincere- Pick Yourself Up

[SINCERE-MUSIC]

http://hulkshare.com/u9iha9rbuzhx

Just recorded this two seconds ago >.<


I agree, thur's somethin that i need, before i leave this earth, somthin i gotta see
things that i never did, places iv never been, i wanna change the world, music will be the key
thats why i keep going, i really dont wanna leave, even i was locked up and couldnt even be free
during that time my dad died and didnt get to see, me, get out of the jail, somthing i cant belive
en didnt get to show him, wut i was gunna be, all over a bitch that wasnt loyal to me
dad told me to stay away, but i, wanted to be, wit a gurl that would soon destroy all of my dreams
lost my dad lost my life but still ima fuckin G, kicked out on the fuckin street's
for month's and fuckin weeks wit a dollar to my name man im feelin pain
im hungry all the time on welly but not ashamed


went to jail when that happened people fuckin my bitch
so called friends - doesnt fuckin exist
rare kinda shit, and im still makin a wish ta get tha.. fuk outta hear, i seriously wanna dip
depressed all the time im always feelin like shit, my friends lift me up, every time that they spitt
inspires me to get up, hit it and get a grip, livin limittless im so finished lettin it slip
the begining was pretty ruff but im
makin it worth the risk for the history that i permanantly put in this bitch
damn, never let it take you under my man, you need pull ur fuckin head, outta the sand
so you can breath mutha fucka, and see where i am, A new Generation of unstopable plans
to reach the goals that whur givin from the God that will stand
and judg you for sin's but I followed commands

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[B.A.D.]

hey, I think you forgot the feedback link you just gave to chambers, so I edited in it for you after approving your post, I hope you dont mind lol. but its better to have it to avoid confusion.

[SINCERE-MUSIC]

Thank you i noticed. i was going to but forgot since im a new member it takes a few minutes for my Commentys to upload, i was gonna search that and edit...i just do things diff haha it would go there though

[Scrubz]

I liked the nice chill beat, was dope.

The hook was baggin, perfect for the beat, perfect for the song. The layering was nice on this as well.
Verse one was pretty basic, the delivery was great but the flow was on and off IMO. I herd you stretch syllables to hit, also you add libs were off in some spots.
Verse two was much more fluid and complex, I thought it was muc better than the first. You had a nice message.

My only beef was the quality of your vocals. It seems like you have high "highs" with little to no bass. Only in the verses tho, the hook sounded great, due to the layers maybe? Also i think you should take your time before you release it, these minor errors can be fixed easly if you really take the tine to identify them. Other than that aNd the few hiccups I stated above it was an enjoyable track. Keep it up man

[gutawafang]

Wow. I loved it man. This is awesomeness.

[Mr. Chambers]

this was pretty dope tbh....

i liked the delivery and the lyrics/content and other then the quality i don't see too much wrong with this. i could hear little slips ups in the flow, but nothing that took away the enjoyment of the song...good shit bro

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

im not sure but your pronouncation sounds clear but also slurred in a way..but also could be the overlays who are out of place on some parts...
flow is nice...delivery is okay..not great but okay..
your voice in general sounds a little expired...then you also you used too much High EQ when mixing..
so is my impression..i think you can do better....

[mceddie]

really really good man, your flow kind of reminds me of asher roth, if he was a bit better :P

really nice relaxing beat, flows on point, and the lyrics are really good, deep shit man. keep it up!

10/10

[Instant Legend]

this is a pretty solid joint right here

im kinda diggin that hook, singing aint bad

your delivery is pretty dope, and your enunciation is nice and clean, somethin i listen for personally. theres some dope lines in here too actually.

i like this piece right here

keep it movin homie, and check me out