Wake Up

[Atone]

a new song i recently recorded, may or may not end up on an album, idk yet
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=taERE4el2UI

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[Scrubz]

dude you need to learn to form you rhyme schemes to the beat and make sure it hits were it suppose to hit. Your whole flow is off just because of were you chose to have the rhyme in the beat. You need to really practice riding the beat. Once you do this it will be much easier to listen to tbh. Get a real mic and a decent mixing program because you vocals sound like crap... no offense . You also need to form some sort of delivery because its very low and monotone, sounds like your trying not to wake you parents up lol. Get some energy and get loud. Lyrics weren't bad though from as far as i read.

Tbh I only listened to the first verse because frankly, its hard to listen to. Your flow is off, your delivery was weak and I could barley hear your monotone voice. I apologize if im coming off like a dick but im just giving you my honest opinion in hopes you can improve a pon this.

[Atone]

Thanx man

[classthe_king]

Yeah, you need a lot of work. First of all, like Scrubz said, you need to form your lyrics to the beat. Your vocals sound like they could have went on any beat and then you just threw them onto his one. You also need to work on your delivery. You're going to need a more powerful, energetic delivery to convey a message like this. You should probably do some research on mixing and your recording environment in order to get the most out of your delivery.

[Instant Legend]

you've got some room to polish your delivery, its not quite smooth just yet and ya get a little rushed on some bars.

the effect on your vocals is extremely weird too, tripped me out lol

beats dope though, and i can dig the message you're aiming for

hollar back folks, some newer shit!

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