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[Atone]

this mixtape no longer exist's

[B.A.D.]

lol, I dont recomend your "first single" is from a soundclick track lol. but well, at least its a good beat and hook is nice.

hmm.. I gotta be completely honest with you, you need to practice more bro. you are way off beat. seems like if you didn't wrote this to the beat... listen to more hip hop and try to emulate real rappers to practice more. and I know what is holding you back. You are focusing a lot on releasing a lot of albums, lot of collections, and you dont give enough time to actually perfect your shit. the flow needs to be smooth on the beat, youre just talking, there's no rythm man... keep at it, cuz you have passion, just need to work on the actually rapping.

[Block]

Why are you so scared that someone is going to hear you rapping? You're whispering without any emotion at all. IMO, that's worse than being off beat. At least if you're off beat you can digitally alter it, lol. You sound scared...

Then again, it took me close to two years in order to be comfortable behind a microphone. And even longer to perfect that comfort in to real emotion, and not forced bullshit.

[Mr. Chambers]

look in all honesty....some people just can't rap. i think you're one of them. just try DJing or producing if you have passion for music.

[mdemaz]

Tom is right dude...You should just keep practicing rapping though man..I think after a while you'd be able to stay on beat...
I mean, even for me, I still have problems staying on beat completely and preventing a monotonal voice..

I'm able to upload a tutorial for speed music production, I'll link you to it.

[AbramIsaac]

I think BAD said it best: you don't sound like you wrote this to the beat. If you did, you really need to work on your rhythm. Block said you're whispering; he's right, you are. It's almost as if you recorded this and didn't want the people in the other room to know you were doing so. You pumped up the volume, but your delivery is what's suffering.

I don't know if I'd say you can't rap, as Chambers did, but it's hard to tell from this track. You need to work more on delivery and mixing. Right now, this isn't something that anyone would listen to. You probably know it's got some flaws, but you're probably too close to it to understand just how fucked it is. If you completely changed the flow and structure of the song, and then re-recorded in a higher vocal volume, this could be listen-able, because you're writing isn't terrible.

Back to the drawing board, because right now, the song title seems like an exercise in irony. You can do it, but you need to go back and work on some things. Remember--quality over quantity.

[Atone]

I'm re-writing the entire song at the moment, gonna make a better version but it won't be on the mixtape, since i just startin making new songs in a darker style, the new mixtape is gonna be different now, the whole mixtape will be a lil darker than usual, i even have a song where i basicly flip out and talk about killing a few of my ex's, yeah, extreamly dark.