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Kez - Today

Postby Kez » Aug 11th, '11, 02:55

I'm not trying to distract from TMA2, cause i'm still waiting on a lot of peoples' feedback for that, but I thought I should post a track to indicate the kinda shit that i'm working on right now. I'm working on a tape with a certain producer from TR, it's coming along pretty good. I'm going for deeper shit mainly, that's just the kind of stuff that has been on my mind. Which leads into this song; it's a tagged Soundclick beat, so it's just really kinda an exercise to keep my name out here. Cause admittedly I do have a bit of a penchant for making projects and taking ages to post actual music. Everything else i'm working on is 100% original production. I just made this to give you lot something to listen to.

So check the track here http://hulkshare.com/1ttzbarfkpcu

As for feed links, the most recent one I can remember is Solace's latest track, but if that's too old now Ax feel free to lock the thread and i'll edit it.

Here's the lyrics:

Pull up a chair, why do you stare
At me like that, oh why do you care?
Cause I never cared, and still never will
Cause life doesn't bend to our every will
In fact it bends to none of them
My demons I summoned them
And my soulmates are just horcruxes
There's nothing I want with them
Why don't you see that this isn't for me?
Hatred is how we live and we breathe
And when our breath runs out, like our time did
You'll finally see what life is
But till that day, oh do not say
A word to me judging the way
That I live my life, this is my time
And when it runs out, you pricks might find
That you miss my rhymes, but probably not
At the end of the day, what have we got?
Cause we will rot, God laid out plans, and we'll all succumb to the plot
The scandals lies and sacrifice
Will mean nothing after I
Am dead in my grave, forever decayed, as my tombstone is vandalised

[Chorus]
You don't know,
You don't know,
You don't know
Why I no longer sing
But I know,
Yes I know
Asking "Why oh why?"
Will not change anything
So let's go,
Right back home,
To rebuild our lives from the start, cause I think
If we don't,
Then we won't
See tomorrow, today is all I can bring

I'm manic depressed, I have an excess
Of rage, but don't think it's anger in jest
It's filling me up, i'm gasping for breath
As my lungs fill with blackness and death
As we are left, to face what is waiting
In the afterlife, complacent
All our lives that we'll be fine
Trust me; we are all mistaken
The truth is blatant, if you were to search for it
Instead of putting your faith in absurd stories
Lies won't help in the end, it's helpful, oh yes
But all you'll have is fallacies left
I'm pally with death, but it's hard to accept it
That we'll never be resurrected
And a gaping hole in your life is what you're left with
Oh yes, and
If it strikes you at an early age
Fuck the worldwide murder rates
You'll become a boring, morbid, sordid kid with no way to conserve the rage
Yeah I miss my Dad but that's life
No way to avoid this landslide
Make mountains out of molehills, though you won't kill
Death'll do it for you, as the grains of sand die
If this is the last time, well that's fine
I know there's no way we can fight, that's why
I won't give in to fear, pretend to be Christian
And hear those hymns as i'm fucking baptised
In the end it won't even matter
When we cease to breathe, and patters
Of rain will fall on our grave, all you hear is a kind of grieving laughter

[Chorus]

My tale of woe is almost finished
God is so damn cruel, so wicked
I'm being played with, and the thing is life is a game but I know I won't win it
If i'm destined to lose, let it be truth
That seperates me and seperates you
You'll never pay dues, there isn't enough in the world
You'll stay in debt, and be used
I'll never be blue, as long as my blood boils
With the fear of freshly dug soil
As the plans that we set in motion in life will slowly all just unfoil
Darling, don't cry for me
Cause I won't hear it, why the grief?
You'll move on, everyone else does, that is one thing I believe
Till i'm just a passing mention
Drunken toasts and passing tension
As my story's used as a tale of caution, and a form of mass prevention
"Don't let death happen to you"
As though there's a way it won't catch up to you
But I have beat this dead horse so damn hard that now it's black and it's blue
We all die one day, there's a timer
So heed these words of the rhymer
My song is a primer, what a case of irony it is, there's nothing finer
Till your grave's no longer shining, covered in dirt and neglect
It's like when you die, even the things you despised
Don't seem to think that you're worth their respect

[Chorus]
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby B.A.D. » Aug 11th, '11, 07:48

man, this is too good.

the way you write is brilliant, the technique is un-believable and I like how you don't focus all your energy on it like everyone tries to these days. and the way you structure the rhymes and hide all the thousands of multis and inner multies and connectors and makes it sound like a poetic masterpiece, plus you add a serious content instead of self loathing. This types of songs are exactly why I think youre on of the best rappers alive. fuck it man.

The hook was great except for the singing. cuz the idea of it its very pro and sounds like you were actually influenced from radio friendly pop music but you actually blended it really nice. you should try to have a girl sing along with you on that, would sound sweet.

the beat, I didn't like, but it suited the track perfectly so I can't really complain.

no feedback, just praise in this. Very good song man :y: :y:

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EDIT: oh, about the feedback link, you were just in time, the deadline goes for 10 days so your just in. however, keep posting feedback to people when u have free time, its a good thing to do :y:
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Alex2012 » Aug 11th, '11, 15:40

I just checked it and you don't need it but my natural impulse made ​​me want to leave a comment.

So, I found the lyrics are really beautiful and powerful.
I'm starting to really enjoyed your voice, probably by dint of listening TMA2. :p
The chorus is great and this is not absolutly necessary but a girl voice on it with you as said Ax-D, I think it's a good idea. :whistle:
really great song. :y:
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Solace » Aug 11th, '11, 22:43

And my soulmates are just horcruxes

That's kind of stupid lmao, no offense.

The beat is way too poppy for me. The chorus was done very well, it's fine with just you on it. I love your flow, and how it's not the same through a verse. The 2nd verse and 3rd verses are great, the 1st was okay; didn't feel it much. It's overall a pretty good track, and has replay value. What do you record with exactly lol? Good track. :y:
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Block » Aug 11th, '11, 23:33

Listening to it as I type..

I love the drum breaks. The beat is real poppy, but still has a nice sound to it. Your voice is clear and really good. My only criticism on your delivery is how you seemingly spit from memory, but lack the emotion in some words, or don't accentuate some words that I (personally) feel should have been accentuated, to make the song / verse sound better.. (Not exactly monotone or emotionless, mind you).. What I mean is, for example, when you said "why don't you see this isn't for me", you accentuated the end of the verse, but seemingly rode right through the beginning. If the 'why' was to be accentuated, it would have sounded more like a real question and not just a filler line. Get what I mean?

The melody in your voice / flow is great, though. Your voice fits the beat ridiculously well.

The hook feels as if it should have been layered more. You don't necessarily need someone else on it, just more layers to separate it from the verses. A layer with a higher pitched singing that is maybe EQ'd differently than the main layer, would have suited this well. As it stands, it just feels to bland. The lyrics were good, though. To be honest, it reminds me a LOT of a Greenday hook, lol. ( :laughing: ).


The second verse doesn't seem to flow as well as the first. Your rhyme schemes are still nice, but you start to slur a little when you speed up your flow (the word 'christians', for example).

The third verse goes back to sounding more like the first did. The flow is great. I still feel like some things could be accentuated better. Maybe not necessarily 'better', just different words accentuated than the ones you did. This could just be personal preference, Idk.

Overall, this is a good song. It seems very radio-friendly, but still written well.

EDIT: After the 3rd verse there's a hook, then it goes to you repeating "You don't know".. That part would have sounded great with some sort of filter on it, and turned down.. Then go back to the hook. Just my thoughts.
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby J.R. » Aug 12th, '11, 00:49

No criticism. :worship:
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby mdemaz » Aug 13th, '11, 09:45

The guitars are good and the drum patterns give the track breakbeatish feel, your flow is a bit different than what I'm used too.

The hook needed a stronger chorus effect or more layers tbh...
....Eh...The rest of the song is sort of the same intensity.

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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Kez » Aug 13th, '11, 14:58

re: the talk about it being a bit poppy, really the words me and pop don't fit together that well lol. I had no intention for it to be poppy, though I know the beat is a bit pop (probably cause I took it off the Soundclick charts), so whatever.

As for the hook, yeah it aint perfect, but honestly I made this track really quick just because I never post anything here very often anymore and I got the urge to. It needs work, I know that haha. The stuff i'm working on has had much more time spent on it. Same goes to the comments about adding little things to switch it up, I agree, and if this was a track for a project that would have been done haha.

@Solace, I know what you mean, I honestly don't really know where that line came from lmao. But to be honest I just left it in because this is just a quick little track. As for what I record with, just a cheap mic and headphones.

Thanks everyone else for your comments! :worship: I know this track is pretty morbid, but that's just what I ended up creating with the beat. Some of the stuff i'm working on now is a bit more lively (though that aint to say the subject matter is completely different)

@Ax, yeah I know I should leave more feed, I do try haha i'm just busy a lot these days :p
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby l33chie » Aug 14th, '11, 20:00

dude this is so dope! The lyrics are up there man, it just seem to flow natural when you spit it. The hook was the shit, nice man 10/10
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby EyeSpick » Aug 15th, '11, 00:54

Your structure is beautiful, as well as your syllable count and your flow in general. There were times when I was reading a head wondering how you were going to deliver specific parts on beat but you delivered each time. I'm not one to shy away from accents and I like yours a lot. This is good quality music. No complaints, though I agree the horcruxe line being weak lol.
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Instant Legend » Aug 16th, '11, 02:11

im actually diggin this joint

wasnt sure how i'd feel about it once the beat started up, but your accent works dope, and you actually remind me of Streets.

some nice lines in this

that hook is pretty good too

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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Vettori » Aug 17th, '11, 19:21

"If it strikes you at an early age
Fuck the worldwide murder rates
You'll become a boring, morbid, sordid kid with no way to conserve the rage"

and theres actually alot of other lines that are just awsome.

this is Alot differant, took me a second to get into it.. your second verse and third are stronger.
Waitin on the next project :D
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby B.A.D. » Aug 21st, '11, 15:28

Bumpppp
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Maybe » Aug 23rd, '11, 03:50

Unique is the first thing that comes to mind. Honestly, it's much better than your album material, which I wholly loved (and praised). This is the type of music I would actually pay for, because it's not only "lyrically" sound, it's also generally a good song.

Like I've said before, I'll say again: You're my favorite overall rapper on here, and I see a future for you in the UK underground scene.
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Re: Kez - Today

Postby Willy » Aug 24th, '11, 23:19

Really really good man. Enjoyed it a lot, agree with Block's comment about the hook needing more layering, but overall this is a really smooth track that I can definitely vibe to.
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