Weather Patterns

[AbramIsaac]

Well ladies and Gentlemen, here it is.

I give you "Weather Patterns", off of Citizen of Dystopia. This is a more traditional rap song, for those of you not currently under the influence of drugs. Or for those of you on drugs that like more traditional rap songs. Whatever.

Weather Patterns

This is an introspective song that I wrote during a difficult time during the last year. I hope you like it, as it's one of two very personal songs on the EP. Like all of the songs on the album, it's produced by me.

LOF

[Instant Legend]

this is interesting cut

there are a few bars that ya rush a tad, but youve got a great foundation, and your voice reminds me of Grewsum a bit, which is def a big compliment

not a perfect track, but the promise is there no damn doubt

keep it movin homie

return the favor please:

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[classthe_king]

Damn this is great. I can't wait for your tape after hearing this. I don't have any constructive criticism other than get better quality but that's out of your control. Great job

[EyeSpick]

I agree with the occasional rush in the flow and the drums sound a bit cheap in the beginning. Other than that this is really great. This is the kind of music I like and you're getting good at it. I'll be anticipating this album.

[AbramIsaac]

this is interesting cut

there are a few bars that ya rush a tad, but youve got a great foundation, and your voice reminds me of Grewsum a bit, which is def a big compliment

not a perfect track, but the promise is there no damn doubt

keep it movin homie

return the favor please:

viewtopic.php?f=38&t=121587

I'll check your stuff out soon, I promise. Thanks man, I know some of my stuff is rough around the edges, but the idea of "promise" is good enough to keep me moving forward.

Damn this is great. I can't wait for your tape after hearing this. I don't have any constructive criticism other than get better quality but that's out of your control. Great job

Thanks class, a lot of the tape is introspective, and in many different ways. I'll be honest, this is probably the most directly confessional song, but I've been struggling with some pretty heavy shit over these last couple years, and a lot of that made it onto the tape.

I agree with the occasional rush in the flow and the drums sound a bit cheap in the beginning. Other than that this is really great. This is the kind of music I like and you're getting good at it. I'll be anticipating this album.

Thanks man, I'm glad you're looking forward to it. I'm looking forward to your reaction.

[Block]

I'm not sure why no one has any constructive criticism to give... I'll try to help the best that I can.

After two listens I can tell that you're suffering from the same type of setback that I myself used to suffer from. It's minor--in comparison to most others--but it has dramatic effects on how the song sounds as a whole. Your flow is suffering from trying to hit the snare. Not just trying to hit the snare, but your voice is inadvertently raising / speeding up when you do actually hit it. The snare should be a guideline, not a fence. It should keep you in time, but not hinder your flow. Your flow won't suffer if you don't end a line exactly on the snare, nor will it suffer if you do (correctly, without speeding up to do so).

I used to have this problem because I would either write too many or too few syllables per line. Doing so would cause me to have to either play catch-up with the beat or cram everything into it. This also can sometimes make words come out slurred when you cram them together. It's really only something that can be delt with through time, but it can't be delt with if it isn't pointed out. Over time you will eventually learn to predict when and where the snare / kick is going to hit, and you will be able to write / flow accordingly. This, as I said above, only comes through time and much practice (not to sound like Mr. Miagi).

Other than that, your voice is dope, as I've told you before. Your emotion could use some tuning but, again, that comes with practice. My only advice for getting your emotion / delivery better without it sounding forced is to completely memorize each verse before laying it down. There are obviously other ways to do it, but that is the easiest and most simple.

I won't comment on the mixing at the moment, as that isn't as important as the more technical aspects.

If you feel like it, hit me back on "Coming Home".

[AbramIsaac]

Thanks Block, I think I know what you're talking about. I can see how me focusing on hitting on the snare could hinder my delivery. On the next one I do, I'll memorize the verse completely too, and see what kind of difference it makes in my emotion.

I'll check the song too.

[Tash8]

i like beat but i dont like the drums very much, need better sounds.
second verse is a lot more smooth than the first verse...i agree with the ppl that you tended to try to speed up a lil bit, that's not a problem, you just gotta stay on beat when u do it though.