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Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Solace » Aug 20th, '11, 19:59

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Definitely not my best, but PK and Sentus drop some nice stuff on this guys. :b:

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[Verse 1: Solace]
Here I am, I sit and stare into her vacant eyes
Finally I get some clarity; a place and time,
I hold on tightly to every single grace I find,
All her beauty can intoxicate my state of mind,
Her perfect smile paints the deadliest choices,
Yet I kept walking as she fed me the poison,
She slit deep enough to scar me after death,
And shocked my heart until I went through cardiac arrest,
I was broken when she said her goodbye,
...And I was frozen without breath to reply,
I'm always feeling like I'm dead in the summer seasons,
'Cause that was when she had left me in crumbled pieces,
When we talk, her tongue salivates a spoken art,
I think of when we kissed with an aftertaste of broken heart,
And for now she's been lost inside my memories,
Her hands play the harp while her voice hums the melody.

[Verse 2: DerdyPK]
It's been forever since I kicked a verse,
But I don't want to talk about this shit, it hurts,
I might as well have had my heart broken many times,
And I talk about that shit in way too many rhymes,
But this might be the realest shit I ever wrote,
Could it be because I really wish I never wrote
This? But I did but I never wanna say your name,
Or watch American Dad but I do it anyway,
Why is that? I don't know I'm a real creep,
With split personalities, you feel me?
Every line, every verse, every word,
Please play this song when I'm riding in the hearse,
Don't cry though vibe to the flow,
Realize that I died for my home,
And the heartbroken kids who give two fucks,
About what you stupid bitches call true love.

[Verse 3: Sentus]
It feels like forever since I felt love,
Cause I fell in and I needed help up,
And I don’t know if I can fix the scars,
Where your claws sunk in and left it ripped apart,
But I can try…spread my wings and fly,
To the sky full of hope so I can float when I die,
And that’s why I rhyme; it helps me cope,
And I’m afraid what would happen if anything else would let me close,
I’m a broken flame,
Burning the flesh off to expose my pain,
You know my name,
And if I ever forget what you did to me I might go insane,
And that’s real…cause everything that I feel,
Is a product of the hate that you placed in my meal,
It’s sick, blood drips off my lip,
The cannibal with a bite mark across his wrist,
Damn…I lost my path,
And found things in me I never thought I had,
And now I hold my breath when I abandon ship,
And always make sure that I keep a candle lit when (They leave me in the dark).


Constructive criticism is appreciated guys, peace!
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby macdaddy019967 » Aug 20th, '11, 20:15

PK went in on this shit
nice shit
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby EyeSpick » Aug 20th, '11, 20:28

Holy shit. To be honest I think each one of you has had more consistent verses from what I've been exposed to on here but the production/mixing is fire and everyone's tone was perfect. The minor flaws in the mechanics don't even matter because this is good emotional music. D/L'in.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Tash8 » Aug 20th, '11, 22:21

good job to the three of you. Imo everyone came with different styles that worked well together. There's really not much to say other than keep practicing and these songs are only gonna get better. :y:

oh yea n start doing more than just emotional songs :worship:
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Trimss » Aug 20th, '11, 23:15

Damn Derdy has one sexy rap voice. :shifty:

Y'all went in on this one, the sample/chorus was great and the quality was just awesome. A pleasure to hear this.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby DƎRDYPK » Aug 20th, '11, 23:17

Trimss wrote:Damn Derdy has one sexy rap voice. :shifty:



putting that in my sig :shifty:

Solace & Sentus for XXL Freshmen 2012!
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby DƎRDYPK » Aug 20th, '11, 23:18

C.R.E.A.M wrote:
DƎRDYPK wrote:Solace & Sentus for XXL Freshmen 2012!


Nope. :shifty:


why in the fuck not?!
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Block » Aug 20th, '11, 23:28

DƎRDYPK wrote:
C.R.E.A.M wrote:
DƎRDYPK wrote:Solace & Sentus for XXL Freshmen 2012!


Nope. :shifty:


why in the fuck not?!


Because they're doing exactly what sadistik does, only half as well as he does it.

This was decent from all 3. Pk's flow was the shining star. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow. Class, I still hear words being elongated in order to hit. I know sadistik does it, but it hinders even his flow.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Solace » Aug 20th, '11, 23:39

Thanks guys, didn't really expect any positive comments on this for my part.

Block wrote:
DƎRDYPK wrote:why in the fuck not?!

Because they're doing exactly what sadistik does, only half as well as he does it.

He was just kidding lol, and I wouldn't expect such a comment considering all your tracks so far have been doing exactly what Spoonfull does but half as well. Not trying to insult, but you know that's true. And half as well as Sadistik is a compliment to me. :sweating:

Block wrote:This was decent from all 3. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow.

Yeah I definitely do. I'm starting to learn to write for a better polished flow. I never really thought that even if it flows perfectly, no one will have those amazing lungs and never half to take a stop to breathe. I'm getting there.

Tash8 wrote:oh yea n start doing more than just emotional songs :worship:

I assume this is directed to me considering PK doesn't do them much and Sentus is known for his punchline tracks. Yeah, I'll try to expand but for now I need to work on the perfect song to get the shit off my chest.

Thanks for peeping this, everyone.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby classthe_king » Aug 20th, '11, 23:48

Block wrote:This was decent from all 3. Pk's flow was the shining star. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow. Class, I still hear words being elongated in order to hit. I know sadistik does it, but it hinders even his flow.


My flow was nothing at all like Sadistik's flow.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Block » Aug 21st, '11, 00:18

classthe_king wrote:
Block wrote:This was decent from all 3. Pk's flow was the shining star. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow. Class, I still hear words being elongated in order to hit. I know sadistik does it, but it hinders even his flow.


My flow was nothing at all like Sadistik's flow.


Is this a joke post?
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby classthe_king » Aug 21st, '11, 00:25

Block wrote:
classthe_king wrote:
Block wrote:This was decent from all 3. Pk's flow was the shining star. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow. Class, I still hear words being elongated in order to hit. I know sadistik does it, but it hinders even his flow.


My flow was nothing at all like Sadistik's flow.


Is this a joke post?


No this is a serious post. Have yours been troll posts? That seems more likely.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Block » Aug 21st, '11, 00:26

I've dropped one verse on here, apart from a diss. a verse where the only remote similarities between spoon and myself are the fact we're white and tell stories. Although, that aspect of my writing is taken mostly from Slug.

At any rate, I'm on par, talent-wise, with spoonful. I just enjoy his music.

Solace wrote:Thanks guys, didn't really expect any positive comments on this for my part.

Block wrote:
DƎRDYPK wrote:why in the fuck not?!

Because they're doing exactly what sadistik does, only half as well as he does it.

He was just kidding lol, and I wouldn't expect such a comment considering all your tracks so far have been doing exactly what Spoonfull does but half as well. Not trying to insult, but you know that's true. And half as well as Sadistik is a compliment to me. :sweating:

Block wrote:This was decent from all 3. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow.

Yeah I definitely do. I'm starting to learn to write for a better polished flow. I never really thought that even if it flows perfectly, no one will have those amazing lungs and never half to take a stop to breathe. I'm getting there.

Tash8 wrote:oh yea n start doing more than just emotional songs :worship:

I assume this is directed to me considering PK doesn't do them much and Sentus is known for his punchline tracks. Yeah, I'll try to expand but for now I need to work on the perfect song to get the shit off my chest.

Thanks for peeping this, everyone.
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby Block » Aug 21st, '11, 00:28

classthe_king wrote:[q]
classthe_king wrote:
Block wrote:This was decent from all 3. Pk's flow was the shining star. Solace and class, you both need to try and be more innovative with the flow. Class, I still hear words being elongated in order to hit. I know sadistik does it, but it hinders even his flow.


My flow was nothing at all like Sadistik's flow.


Is this a joke post?


No this is a serious post. Have yours been troll posts? That seems more likely.[/quote]

from your forced emotion (forced to sound like sadistik) to your flow patterns and rhyme schemes.. It's got sadistik written all over it....
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Re: Feels Like Forever (w/DerdyPK & Sentus)

Postby classthe_king » Aug 21st, '11, 00:36

When was the last time you listened to Sadistik? This was literally nothing like Sadistik. I know who's style. Used for this and I promise you it was not Sadistik. Now if you have any real feed I would love to hear it but if not then bye.
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