Life After You (Feat. Eedee & $VA)

[Solace]

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[Chorus] x2
What did I have to do,
To go on without a life right after you?
I miss your touch, I miss your skin,
I miss your love, I miss your lips.

[Verse 1: Solace]
You had me locked when we kissed,
Our last time you left a burning spot on my lips,
As you left, I held you in my vision,
Your memory was eventually a prison,
Look at me, I'm left as a mess,
We were happy, then you went and you left,
I cried as you salted every wound of mine,
I gave love but you threw mine up into the sky,
As you gripped your thorns around my neck,
I smiled as I let your hidden scorn surround the flesh,
Any part of you could break me,
Everywhere I go I see a martyr in my daydreams,
Due to your carelessness,
I died inside wishing that I would just tear the skin,
Then carve in; so broke apart,
You took my life then you stole my heart.

[Chorus] x2
What did I have to do,
To go on without a life right after you?
I miss your touch, I miss your skin,
I miss your love, I miss your lips.

[Verse 2: Eedee]
Tell me now what am I gonna do?
I gave you everything that I had to lose.
You talk me to not magnanimously,
You heard me like I was that lamb is set free.
You'll live to regret what the fuck you said,
I'd kill just to get knowledge of what's next.
You broke my heart, and that shit won't fly,
Like you were my angel and I tore off your wings (bye!)
Yes, I'm cynical, a sinister asshole,
A clinical headcase who'll stick your tongue to a flagpole.
But that doesn't mean you had to leave me here,
I'm seething, dear, while you feed me fear.
Why do you keep me here? Bout to unleash the beast,
You decieved me once, bout to relish the feast!
You selfish, bitch, sick of this hellish twist,
'Bout to replenish this - image, embellishment.

[Chorus] x2
What did I have to do,
To go on without a life right after you?
I miss your touch, I miss your skin,
I miss your love, I miss your lips.

[Verse 3: $VA]
*No lyrics as of yet*

[Chorus] x2
What did I have to do,
To go on without a life right after you?
I miss your touch, I miss your skin,
I miss your love, I miss your lips.

[Emadyville]

First off, I assume that was you on the hook? Either way, it was dope, so props for making a solid hook.

Flow: Overall it was very solid and on point. A few of the longer bars with more syllables sounded just slightly rushed cause of the # of syllables, but were by no means bad. Your flow stood out on these lines specifically:

As you left, I held you in my vision,
Your memory was eventually a prison,
Look at me, I'm left as a mess,
We were happy, then you went and you left

and

Any part of you could break me,
Everywhere I go I see a martyr in my daydreams

Delivery: Solid. I felt like nailed the lyrics on the head with how you sounded. The repeating of certain last words def helped, that def made the verse sound better and added a lot, so great job there.

Lyrics: Overall the lyrics sounded somewhat of a typical angry love song, just remember you always gotta try to stand out, so sounding typical can be a bad thing sometimes. With that said, I still really enjoyed your verse based on your delivery, flow, and sound.

Rhymes: There was nothing to this verse that stood out in a way that made me say "I wish I had thought of that rhyme". But obviously not every verse/song will contain such stand out rhymes. The rhymes that were best was the multiple multi (you know what I mean ) of: thorns around my neck/scorn surrounds my flesh...but due to the extra syllables in the second line, the rhyme itself then became slightly rushed, making only the sounds of around my neck/rounds my flesh to be picked up when listening. You did a great job of making break me/daydreams sound like perfect rhymes even tho they obv aren't, which stood out.

I didn't listen to the other verses cause I was obv only feeding yours, but this overall was well done man, you're def getting there homie

[Eedee]

Thanks for uploading this shit, man.

Do you make those single covers you use on YouTube or do you pay someone, cuz they're fucking awesome! Can't do that shit on MS Paint... which is all I have

[Solace]

@Emady, I'll get back to you after

Thanks for uploading this shit, man.

Do you make those single covers you use on YouTube or do you pay someone, cuz they're fucking awesome! Can't do that shit on MS Paint... which is all I have

Lol@paying just so I could upload a video on Youtube, fuck no. I do my own graphics. Thanks bruh, love you too. Get Photoshop and work on it

[mdemaz]

Nice hook Sol'..
You flowed nicely throughout your verse.
Eedee...You've came a long way since that joint we did on my shitty album.
I'm genuinely impressed with your performance.
$VA...I dunno who that is, but he fucking killed his verse.
That shit was cra'y.

[Eedee]

Nice hook Sol'..
You flowed nicely throughout your verse.
Eedee...You've came a long way since that joint we did on my shitty album.
I'm genuinely impressed with your performance.
$VA...I dunno who that is, but he fucking killed his verse.
That shit was cra'y.

Thanks! Glad to know I've gotten better

[B.A.D.]

I gotta tell you, its scary how good you get after each track. I think my favourite thing about your verse is how well it was structured, not a single flow slip. However, there's one thing I will recommend you, I think that you use a similar (if not the same) type of delivery in all your songs, maybe twist it up every now and then.
Other than that, magnific verse

Eedee was dope as fuck as well, been a long time since I've heard him, that was good, also well structured.

SVA, never heard of him, but he sounds extremely natural, very true and the rhythm is well noticed within his flowing, he also seems more experienced tho.

anyway, there are no flaws on this song, so I couldn't actually give much feedback haha, But I just want to encourage you to keep it up. all of you, this was dope

[Solace]

First off, I assume that was you on the hook? Either way, it was dope, so props for making a solid hook.

Fosho, thanks!

Flow: Overall it was very solid and on point. A few of the longer bars with more syllables sounded just slightly rushed cause of the # of syllables, but were by no means bad. Your flow stood out on these lines specifically:

As you left, I held you in my vision,
Your memory was eventually a prison,
Look at me, I'm left as a mess,
We were happy, then you went and you left

and

Any part of you could break me,
Everywhere I go I see a martyr in my daydreams

I'll keep that in mind.

Delivery: Solid. I felt like nailed the lyrics on the head with how you sounded. The repeating of certain last words def helped, that def made the verse sound better and added a lot, so great job there.

I tend to do that to fill in the empty spaces

Lyrics: Overall the lyrics sounded somewhat of a typical angry love song, just remember you always gotta try to stand out, so sounding typical can be a bad thing sometimes. With that said, I still really enjoyed your verse based on your delivery, flow, and sound.

I understand, you make a great point.

Rhymes: There was nothing to this verse that stood out in a way that made me say "I wish I had thought of that rhyme". But obviously not every verse/song will contain such stand out rhymes. The rhymes that were best was the multiple multi (you know what I mean ) of: thorns around my neck/scorn surrounds my flesh...but due to the extra syllables in the second line, the rhyme itself then became slightly rushed, making only the sounds of around my neck/rounds my flesh to be picked up when listening. You did a great job of making break me/daydreams sound like perfect rhymes even tho they obv aren't, which stood out.

True man. I can't comment much on this one haha, pretty self explanatory what you said there.

I didn't listen to the other verses cause I was obv only feeding yours, but this overall was well done man, you're def getting there homie

Thank you Emady, I'm happy you took real time out to separate technical aspects and explain your views on them. Thanks for the support and advice.

I gotta tell you, its scary how good you get after each track. I think my favourite thing about your verse is how well it was structured, not a single flow slip. However, there's one thing I will recommend you, I think that you use a similar (if not the same) type of delivery in all your songs, maybe twist it up every now and then.
Other than that, magnific verse

anyway, there are no flaws on this song, so I couldn't actually give much feedback haha, But I just want to encourage you to keep it up. all of you, this was dope

Thank you bro.

[Eedee]

Eedee was dope as fuck as well, been a long time since I've heard him, that was good, also well structured.

SVA, never heard of him, but he sounds extremely natural, very true and the rhythm is well noticed within his flowing, he also seems more experienced tho.

anyway, there are no flaws on this song, so I couldn't actually give much feedback haha, But I just want to encourage you to keep it up. all of you, this was dope

Thanks a bunch! Coming from you that means a lot!!

[Emadyville]

Eedee

your verse wasnt bad, it lacked a solid delivery tho. you sounded monotoned throughout, which isnt a good thing. but you had a solid flow, while slow and somewhat simple it worked. your rhymes werent bad and your vocab was kinda cool throughout so props on that. Just work on your delivery and put more emotion into your lyrics and you'll be putting yourself in the right direction

[Le Tunisien]

i liked this song, emotional and full of meanings..the hook was great
the only thing i would criticize is...the pauses between the lines here and there it would have been better without it in my opinion

[Eedee]

Eedee

your verse wasnt bad, it lacked a solid delivery tho. you sounded monotoned throughout, which isnt a good thing. but you had a solid flow, while slow and somewhat simple it worked. your rhymes werent bad and your vocab was kinda cool throughout so props on that. Just work on your delivery and put more emotion into your lyrics and you'll be putting yourself in the right direction

Thanks for the critiques, man!

And I think my voice sounded monotone is because of either my mic (which isn't a bad one, a $100 studio quality) or my vocal mastering I did. I may have undid some of the 'richness' of the tone or something, but I usually try my best NOT to be sound so dull. Shame it came out like that, though. Practice makes perfect though.

Thanks again!

[Solace]

i liked this song, emotional and full of meanings..the hook was great
the only thing i would criticize is...the pauses between the lines here and there it would have been better without it in my opinion

Thank you for listening Tuna

because of either my mic (which isn't a bad one, a $100 studio quality) or my vocal mastering I did.

Not gonna be an ass or anything but if I can get people to think my delivery is solid with a 20 dollar desktop mic you can do the same with a studio mic Never blame it on the mic or the mixing, 'cause the source of the problem will always be the one using it.

[Eedee]

because of either my mic (which isn't a bad one, a $100 studio quality) or my vocal mastering I did.

Not gonna be an ass or anything but if I can get people to think my delivery is solid with a 20 dollar desktop mic you can do the same with a studio mic Never blame it on the mic or the mixing, 'cause the source of the problem will always be the one using it.

I see what you're saying. I'll definitely work on that delivery, man

Thanks for the reality check too.