Eedee - "Our Time" (feat GP & Andrea Broz)

[Eedee]

Link of Feed: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=135653

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_A0uf0gPoHw

*The 2nd single from my upcoming debut work "The Eedee EP Fire In My Eyes" due to drop late 2011*
GP and Andrea Broz are on the hook. Produced by Thomas Swanson.


[Chorus]
(GP) Riding through the city with my music up high,
Press so clean, you know I stay fly...
(Andrea Broz) Whatever you do will cause me to quit the fight,
Now we've made it here and this is our time...

[Verse 1: Eedee]
A fall from grace, is it all a waste?
What if my EP flops when it drops?
Can I make it to the top?
I'ma give it all I got,
I can't shake it, call it lost.
My blood, sweat and tears
is what I put into this shit,
Should I stuff it all and bet my fears
Won't come back to haunt me?
what do you want me to do? piss off and quit?
I'll throw a fit, get hit with shit
'fore I sit down and give up,
pick up the mic and spit.
appreciate this, let it all soak in,
hear my voice, does I sound like I'm joking?
you smoking crack? I'll choke you back,
here's me hoping I won't resort to that.
These ups and downs are the hard times,
But when the rhymes start, it's our time.

[Chorus]

[Verse 2: Eedee]
Shadows are cast in the darkness...
Patches of black in the heartless...
See, you can't part this...
you're as stupid as armpits to the armless.
And on top of that, if you doubt my shit,
the loudest bit is your trowser's kicked.
Crescent nightlight of the moon...
Treasure my mind while it brews...
Man am I one with the land and sky?
suckerpunch me once kiss your hand good bye.
This is a track by Eric, der...
Don't attack my character!
Thomas has the beats that inspire...
Teeterin' on the wire, please take me higher.
to the tallest cloud so I can scream aloud,
i'm on top of the world, let my dreams abound.

[Chorus]

[Verse 3: Eedee]
I see the ladder, i plan climb up it,
To the throne... you'll get your comeuppance.
Great white hope, like the Pope and his business,
Can't cope with the fact that hope has been lifted.
Don't get it twisted, choke you with both fists,
Bloke gonna diss this? piss off you're hopeless.
Kiss of death? nah, I won't flinch,
two shits, this bitch is next, I don't give,
anyone a free pass, don't expect one neither,
but don't sleep on us like you took some ether.
Jacob bro, I just want you to be proud,
Wake up though, my thoughts are in the clouds.
Mom and Dad don't approve of this art,
But it keeps me true as it moves my heart.
I'ma novice lil MC, but Thomas and Eedee,
will be around for a while, and I promise that we'll be...

[Solace]

The mixing on this was pretty cool. Andrea Broz's parts should've had different mixing though, because you and GP were very cohesive and the way her vocals sounded didn't fit, but the chorus was still pretty cool. I haven't heard you in a while Eedee, this track shows definite improvement. Even if you have to make pauses or stretch out words, you definitely got the hang of flowing. Now you just have to perfect it (work on less syllable cramming and less pauses; I have the pause problem too). Avoid corny lines like "you're as stupid as armpits to the armless.", it's kind of stupid (but I figure the cheesiness in that part you were going for). "This is a track by Eric, der, don't attack my charac-ter!" That was funny haha. Keep working on it dude you're getting much better.

[Eedee]

The mixing on this was pretty cool. Andrea Broz's parts should've had different mixing though, because you and GP were very cohesive and the way her vocals sounded didn't fit, but the chorus was still pretty cool. I haven't heard you in a while Eedee, this track shows definite improvement. Even if you have to make pauses or stretch out words, you definitely got the hang of flowing. Now you just have to perfect it (work on less syllable cramming and less pauses; I have the pause problem too). Avoid corny lines like "you're as stupid as armpits to the armless.", it's kind of stupid (but I figure the cheesiness in that part you were going for). "This is a track by Eric, der, don't attack my charac-ter!" That was funny haha. Keep working on it dude you're getting much better.

Thanks man! Glad to know I'm improving! Sorry for the layoff on droppin' shit, my producer and I were working and debating which track to make our second single, finally decided on this one.

Appreciate the feed, dude.

[mdemaz]

Cool chorus effect on the vocals.
Chorus is great.

One thing I think is really handicapping your performance is the way you stretch your words..
Maybe cram more syllables in.

[Eedee]

Solace says to NOT cram syllables.
Mat says to work on cramming more in...

Haha, well, the next poster can be the decider!

Thanks you two for the feed.

[mdemaz]

Wait wut?
Nooooooooooooo! That's not what I meant lol...

[Eedee]

Wait wut?
Nooooooooooooo! That's not what I meant lol...

Then what did you mean dude?

[mdemaz]

Wait wut?
Nooooooooooooo! That's not what I meant lol...

Then what did you mean dude?

Doesn't matter..

I'm too tired to think right.

[Solace]

He was saying exactly what I was saying. If anyone were to tell you that you're supposed to cram syllables, that's just stupid. It's like hey Eedee, you've got to start having a choppy flow and whisper into the mic.

[Eedee]

He was saying exactly what I was saying. If anyone were to tell you that you're supposed to cram syllables, that's just stupid. It's like hey Eedee, you've got to start having a choppy flow and whisper into the mic.

Awww shit, you mean like Em on Throw It Up?

Anyway, yeah I just read Mat's post about 30 times and it finally hit me what he meant. Say my words faster... Yep. Sorry about that Mat haha.

Thanks you two, I'll work on my syllablic delivery when I'm writing AND recording, to better my flow.

[Solace]

He was saying exactly what I was saying. If anyone were to tell you that you're supposed to cram syllables, that's just stupid. It's like hey Eedee, you've got to start having a choppy flow and whisper into the mic.

Awww shit, you mean like Em on Throw It Up?

I didn't even realize that haha yeah.

[mdemaz]

Not say 'em faster, put more words in so you don't need to stretch..

[Eedee]

Not say 'em faster, put more words in so you don't need to stretch..

Hmm, okay. I'll fiddle with tweaks like this on my next track I record. Thanks!

[Eedee]

This is my shameless bump.

[Tranquil]

This was a pretty good song man. Wasn't really feeling the mixing though, thats the only thing bad I have to say about this song! Also your verses would've sounded more powerful if you put some ad-libs in there man, ad-libs are pretty important! Other than that not a bad song man, I'll be checking your shit when it drops