AhdduB - You Know

[Ticalrecords]

heres the second to last song off my Give A Fuck Less EP, its entitled You Know. tell me what yall think


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http://soundcloud.com/ahddub/you-know-p ... bravestarr

we here mufukas– we flood the whole building
smoke filling the damn room till we see no ceilings
I hate airplanes – ya can’t tell me nothing
so scared - I stow parachutes in my hand luggage
you think that I’m playing – till that engine blows out
and looks shady when every plane I mention goes down
fuck it man – you think I got the inside scoop?
well I got feds around the country that said I do/
I’m on a fucking run - Get ya shit straight man
Better than fiddy and weezy did the mixtape game
Better than nas and jayz - did the debut album
shady for the sophomore slump and this the new outcome
put some redman and outkast for longevity
and add some big L and big pun for complexity
mix some kanye west - for the relevance
and throw in some ASAP Rocky just for the hell of it/

Swear it – I Smoked my fucking Brain DEAD
got chronic leaves growing out my fucking brain stems
foreal If hell - is what the rest of us head for,
you can catch me playing - ding dong ditch at death’s door
look at it from my view – what did I see?
French kiss the devil –thats your tongue in my cheek
Sarcasm sarcasm sarcasm sarcasm
I used to be sane – then the acid bars happened
foreal what am I? - rap’s don Quixote
Is there even a such thing - as savants of cocaine?
im venting –I’ve hit every possible dead end,
staying strapped means I’m constrained to the hospital bed bitch!,
pissing blood – and when I fucking wetted my bed
nurse flipped out - thought I tried slitting my wrists
bitch please – I’m as sane as I Am self aware,
So if you in the same shit as me raise ya Hands in the air!/

[Scrubz]

Mixing is decent but you need this shit mastering. I like the your funkly flow but it didnt workin some places Like at this part "I’m on a fucking run - Get ya shit straight man
Better than fiddy and weezy did the mixtape game
Better than nas and jayz - did the debut album
shady for the sophomore slump and this the new outcome
put some redman and outkast for longevity
and add some big L and big pun for complexity
mix some kanye west - for the relevance"

The second verse meh. Some funny lines but the stop go flow really bugged it me. IT sucks cuz theres some spots were its dope but then the flow fucks up.
What is this song about lol? No real theme and you kinda go off on a tangent with different things. Try develope an idea before you write a song, i would know i had a lot of trouble with this early on.
Keep at it bro, you got talent and skill but u need to stay fluid.

[Ticalrecords]

thanks for the feedback man i'll try and fix that

[Steve Spag]

This is pretty sick man, never heard you before. I think you might sound a little better with a deeper voice tone but this tone seems to match the beat pretty nicely (which is pretty live by the way). Lyrics are funny, pretty basic but had me laughing out loud for real. Flow and delivery could be a bit better but you're getting there, how long you been doing this for? Keep dropping man!


P.S. I like the rap name, pronounced A DOOBIE, haha.

[Ticalrecords]

thanks man i appreciate the love. yea i been doing this for less than a year so im new to the whole flow and delivery thang. just tryna step my game up nah mean

[Steve Spag]

thanks man i appreciate the love. yea i been doing this for less than a year so im new to the whole flow and delivery thang. just tryna step my game up nah mean

For sure, practice makes perfect man, just remember that! Nothing comes overnight, but you're off to a good start! You sure flow a helluva lot better than a lot of other so called "underground rappers".