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Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

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Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

Postby Solace » Mar 1st, '12, 22:08

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A track recorded many months ago that I originally didn't want out there, but I recently found it, mixed it and put it out as a demo.

[Verse]
Day dreamin' I wake up,
Living through the motions, I notice the same stuff, I hate trust,
I chase suns and I shoot for the stars,
In the mindframe where I say the moon isn't far,
I been scarring and a part of me's injured,
The star of a sinner with the soul and heart of a winner,
I think I'm partially iller and it is making me rap this,
Crazy and active, I been radioactive,
With the rhymes and the lines that define the era,
That I'm rapping in, hazardous lines that scare ya,
I'm the rappin' saviour, spitting massive lasers into backs of haters,
Attract the major audiences with my active flavour,
The fabric of rap, I will take at the seam,
Chasing my dream, it's a fact you'll be facing defeat,
I'm more insane than you see, and I will be stopping the rest,
Ripping flesh as a test like a God among men.

[Chorus] x2
(Day dreamin' I wake up) The state of rap needs me now more than ever,
(Day dreamin' I wake up) I took hip-hop and then I changed all the sound for the better,
(Day dreamin' I wake up) With my talent you'd know not to stop me,
(Day dreamin' I wake up) A poet with potent dope shit, I flow kamikaze.
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Re: Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

Postby _Ironic_ » Mar 1st, '12, 22:30

listening, beat sounds pretty dope..

lyrics are well written, but your delivery needs work..it sounds like you've been working on it though, so I can't knock the elevation

keep working at it, it'll come easier


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Re: Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 1st, '12, 22:46

Not bad man, I like the lyrics and flow, I think the delivery could be a bit more chill though, just seems a bit forced, but it's still nice. The beat is sick, matches your style perfectly. Keep 'em coming man, let me know what you think of my newest tape when you got a min!
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Re: Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

Postby Xray » Mar 2nd, '12, 03:45

Love that beat, so I was expecting you kill it, you know what I mean. Not that you did bad on it, but the type of flow that you used for this beat doesn't really connect with this beat. Your lyrics were good, but your delivery felt choppy. Like you have a few empty spots for more syllables that you could of squeezed in for a much better and steady flow. And why do you chop your voice when you say your last ending words? It's like you say your last ending words the quickest of everything else. It ruines your delivery and stands out. Other than that, it was an okay track, but I can see why you didn't originally want to release it.
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Re: Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

Postby Solace » Mar 6th, '12, 01:19

Thanks guys. Sorry for not responding fast enough and not in enough detail, but I have read and am taking in consideration everything. Thank you Xray for bringing up the fact that it wasn't originally supposed to be released, and it's about a 4 month old verse anyway. RiseFromTheAshez, I'm definitely finishing it in the summer. Thanks again. If you could show this to anyone of your friends or whatever it'd be appreciated.
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Re: Solace - Day Dreamin' (Demo)

Postby Ticalrecords » Mar 6th, '12, 23:09

i liked it but like its been said a hundred times, your delivery could use some work. its almost there, and i can tell what you want it to sound like. the lyrics were cool and the flow was pretty much on point. good stuff man
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