Eedee - "Broken Code"

[Eedee]

*Produced by RiseFromTheAshez
*Yo, sort of a "diss" track to someone in real life. Just got my new mic, I don't like it at all. But here's so you guys can critique vocal quality etc. Thanks.
LoF: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=147393

YouTube Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Qk_aM4nK ... e=youtu.be
Reverbnation Link: http://www.reverbnation.com/eedee

LYRICS:

Just checking for a sign that I still have a pulse,
But repping the north is useless, nothing to catapult
me to the big time, cuz up here no one cares,
About lyricism or rhyming at all, so what's fair?
The only one who cared hasn't spoken to me in months,
Tell me why it is that I kept opening up my trust?
To have her shut me down time and time again,
But all I fucking hear is "rhyming's nice my friend".
I ain't afraid to drop names, so Brittney WHAT THE FUCK?!
I'm an MC suck it up, your cold shoulder fucking sucks.
You've insisted, your persistence this instance,
Not talking? Maybe another surgery will fix this.
Don't get the wrong idea, I'm only disappointed,
I'm not mad for the fact that this damn shit's annoying.
I gave you my CD, you even listen to it yet?
I'm waiting patiently all while I'm sitting thru the mess.
You even said to me we should talk more...
That came outta your mouth but it seems like out the wrong hole,
Cuz it's bullshit... at times that's what you're full with,
I ain't a fucking puppet who's waiting for you to pull strings.
Now that school's over, it's like I don't even exist,
I've been scratching my head but no reason persists.
Why you would cut me off, I'm not Emma Watson's hair,
Now I'm choking on your dust, you left me awful air.
Haha... you got me there
You shot me square in the face, but I got coffee chairs.
To break straight on your face, you're tough enough to take it,
I'm sure we can find money to rustle up a face lift.
Buckle up or take shit, our friendship? You break this,
I wondering if take me once I'm fucking famous?
I can't believe I wasted bars on you in "Thank You"
If I said I fucking hated you I'd have to say that ain't true.
I'm truly disappointed you don't talk to me,
But you threw our friendship to the wind like an autumn breeze.
So Brittney, I'm here if you wanna say stuff,
But just know that since you started this, two can play rough.

[mdemaz]

What are you talking about?
The microphone sounds great.

Eh, your flow is all over the place here, this is really messy.

Rise comes through with another dope beat, like, wow, fucking deep classical shit.

Nice aggression in the lyrics, I'm guessing you rushed this, so it's no big deal.

Will this be on one of your new albums coming out?
This sounds more like a demo.

I noticed a lot of distortion in the vocals when I turned the volume down.

[Eedee]

Yeah this is a demo. I'll re-do the whole thing at a later date. And lol this is my same mic haha. I got a new cord. The other one didn't work, I'm returning it.

Glad to know my mic quality is good though! And this might go on an album; not sure.

[mdemaz]

Ah, ok then.

Lol, it's really hard finding a good microphone on a budget.

Sure, it's easy for rich people to get tube mics straight out of a anime dubbing studio, they got 1k to spare.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Loved the quality of the vocals on this man very nice! The beat was Dope, I like all of that guys beats lol. The lyrics were good as usual I liked the end the most!! The only complaint I have is very small, sometimes you have to say a word or two really fast to keep the flow and it kind of makes it sound a bit weird for me I guess, I do that sometimes but if its possible I usually try and edit it out!

Any ways, Nice job dude keep it up!

[Dlovetv]

Enjoyed this mann, I like listening to personal stuff.
The vocal quality was great so whatever mic you have is great.

I do think there were times you tried to stuff extra words into bars that took away from the smoothness.
But I did like the rhyming and story telling ability.

[Eedee]

Okay so here's what I got so far:

The mic has good quality vocals. Lyrics are good.

Only drawback is my flow. How about my delivery?

But yes, for the official release of this (more than likely going on a mixtape or something) I'll tighten up the flow so it sounds good. This was just a demo to test everything vocal quality wise.

Thanks you guys!