Redzek - Mama [NEW]

[Le Tunisien]

another song off the upcomming " No Shame" tape

Lyrics on screen, feedbacks appreciated

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B3vQtYpKQDs










feedbacklink:http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=147653&p=1970187#p1970187

[Eedee]

First off, the beat is nice and your vocal quality is great.

Lyrics: rhymes were simple. Not much to say. They were deep but simple.
Flow: You seem to rush words a lot. You don't sound confident with your flow.
Chorus: Same as the flow, seemed too cluttery with words. Remove "very" from the "very mad" etc.
Emotion: you had this though. You really felt what you were saying, to me. Good job.

Not much else to say. Deep subject, just make sure you work on your flow and the way you structure your verse.

[Solace]

You got a new mic? Nice! You gotta work on not slurring, I know it isn't your native language but a lot of the parts are hard to understand without looking at the lyrics in the video. Maybe if you practice the verse on a really slow beat and tried to enunciate them perfectly. Other than your pronounciation, the delivery was pretty good. The chorus was pretty cool, try playing with panning is all I could advise you to do. You gotta redo this song in the future because it has major potential, really, and the chorus is tight as fuck if you pull it off even better next time around...Real catchy.

[Kez]

The beat is a bit simplistic and cheesy but it's alright.

Goddamn how many pictures you got of yourself on your videos man lol.

"Know I been acting up in the hood" oh god, just don't start saying stuff like this, it isn't you. I can't take it serious. I aint even trying to be a cunt i'm just being honest.

Your flow has improved a bit since the last song I heard by you. "If I hung with the bad guys when I aint one" that's a good lyric man. I liked that. The lyrics are pretty deep in this, cannot really fault them. You slur less than since I last heard you too which is great. But there is still a bit too much, still find it hard to understand. I know it's not your language so I can allow it. The pronunciation on the "pen and pad are not to be missed" was damn near unintelligble though man I can't lie lol.

Not a fan of the hook. Your voice on it is way too quiet, and that bit near the end where your vocals overlap sounds way too drawn out and messy.

I'll try to get time to download that tape when you release it man.

[Le Tunisien]

The beat is a bit simplistic and cheesy but it's alright.

Goddamn how many pictures you got of yourself on your videos man lol.

"Know I been acting up in the hood" oh god, just don't start saying stuff like this, it isn't you. I can't take it serious. I aint even trying to be a cunt i'm just being honest.

Your flow has improved a bit since the last song I heard by you. "If I hung with the bad guys when I aint one" that's a good lyric man. I liked that. The lyrics are pretty deep in this, cannot really fault them. You slur less than since I last heard you too which is great. But there is still a bit too much, still find it hard to understand. I know it's not your language so I can allow it. The pronunciation on the "pen and pad are not to be missed" was damn near unintelligble though man I can't lie lol.

Not a fan of the hook. Your voice on it is way too quiet, and that bit near the end where your vocals overlap sounds way too drawn out and messy.

I'll try to get time to download that tape when you release it man.

thank you very much for takin the time to feedback i really appreciate it, and thats fine i accept critics..cuz i like to improve so thanks !

and solace too thanks for listening ill take your advices , thats cool