Eedee - "Death Row" [Week 7]

[Eedee]

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Week 7 of 8

*So, this is a concept story-telling track. Hope you enjoy!

I'm facing these bars I got scars on my face,
Long are the days thinking hard as I pace.
Around this room, these walls are closing in fast,
My time on this earth is dwindling and knowing this fact
Eats at me, itches me, I'm scratching for a way out
I'm twitching, flipping out, it happens every day now.
I can hear the keys jingling, I need to ease into it,
"He's fidgeting" of course I am, I'm seeing the end of it.
I bend a bit, stretching my back
With every pop that I hear, I pause, letting it last.
I'm betting the fact that I'm in this prison cell
I'm hitting Hell with every breath, it isn't sitting well.
I stare at the wall thinking it'll open up
But it only opens to my brain and lingers on the broken stuff.
This golden touch of mine has faded with the time I've spent
In this cell with muscle loss, fucking toss up - I'm a mess.

I'm having a row with death, sitting on death row,
I'm lost in this life and I'm wishing for less hope.
Feeling for something there...
Sitting on death row, just end it while I fucking care. (x2)

It's tightening, it's frightening, the lightning right outside my room
I'm a quiet screw, sighting in my scopes, nope, I am too
much of a loser, a fucking abuser,
Looking death in the eye like I was punching a cougar.
But I tigress, nah, that's just my deadly sense of humor,
The guy I used to be is gone, I'm barely getting used to
all this commotion around me is like a calm before the storm,
Emotions surround these days long and door is closed.
With a slam... can you picture man,
Livin' out his days in comfort but the sickest plan
Is already in action, the passion has burnt out
Slippin' on ice with no traction, it worked out.
I awake from this cat nap to find a knapsack,
Food and bottled water was tucked inside the backpack.
That's sad that they wanna call to raise time,
I've said sorry for this hate crime but I think I've all but paid mine...

They open up the cell and they tell me to come,
I wear this evil grin over-selling the rush.
Inside I'm screaming "help" but nobody even cares
There's reasons that I'm almost dead, cuz freedom's fair.
I arrive upon the chair, I sit down, they strap me in
I couldn't eat my last meal, and then they ask me this:
"Would you please say your last words", you bastards...
"Life is too short for this disaster"
With that they swabbed my arm, I felt a prick, they laid me back
I shake this fact I'm about to die, and then it fades to black...

[Mr.DGAF]

I think this is one of your best songs. Biggest notable improvement here is the flow. It slips a few times but for the most part it's smooth. The overall feel of this one is cool too; the dark undertones and the storm really help. This is a solid track, hope to hear more stuff of this quality from you.

[Ticalrecords]

it was pretty good, the knapsack line felt out of place, i thought you were gonna say that was how you got caught or something but...nvm loll. but foreal the flow was was nice, one or two times it was off but i liked the concept. the first verse was cool.

i got a new track up, if u cud check it out tht helpful

[Eedee]

it was pretty good, the knapsack line felt out of place, i thought you were gonna say that was how you got caught or something but...nvm loll. but foreal the flow was was nice, one or two times it was off but i liked the concept. the first verse was cool.

i got a new track up, if u cud check it out tht helpful

Thanks! As for the knapsack line, later on in the third verse, he couldn't eat his last meal, which those faggots gave to him in a fucking knapsack. Thus the following bars sort've saying like "hey, come on now. I've paid my time. At least give me a proper meal".

As for your track, I'll check it out, no worries.

[Ticalrecords]

ahh word. i didn't know you were allowed backpacks in prison...but since thats an experience i want no part of, ignorance is bliss. lol. i also liked the background effects with the rain and whatnot. it gave it a good atmosphere.

[Eedee]

ahh word. i didn't know you were allowed backpacks in prison...but since thats an experience i want no part of, ignorance is bliss. lol. i also liked the background effects with the rain and whatnot. it gave it a good atmosphere.

Thanks. I love sound effects.

[TripleNineThree]

Beat - I love how the beat starts out. The thunder sound adds to it perfectly, I love the deep feeling of it. These are my favorite kinds of beats.

Flow - Your flow is really good, you stay on beat throughout the entire song. All the songs you have released week from week all have really good flow and you have really been improving, I'm feeling it.

Delivery - This is also really good as usual. I can hear your emotion behind the words and that sounds good.

Mixing - The mixing sounds good, the chorus could maybe use something to sound more full but the way you did it works on this beat. I also like the slight reverb you threw in there, it makes it sound really good. Your mixing has REALLY improved over the weeks.

Solid track, keep it up man!

[Eedee]

Beat - I love how the beat starts out. The thunder sound adds to it perfectly, I love the deep feeling of it. These are my favorite kinds of beats.

Flow - Your flow is really good, you stay on beat throughout the entire song. All the songs you have released week from week all have really good flow and you have really been improving, I'm feeling it.

Delivery - This is also really good as usual. I can hear your emotion behind the words and that sounds good.

Mixing - The mixing sounds good, the chorus could maybe use something to sound more full but the way you did it works on this beat. I also like the slight reverb you threw in there, it makes it sound really good. Your mixing has REALLY improved over the weeks.

Solid track, keep it up man!

I love this beat too, I picked out rain, thunder, lightning, footsteps, door clangs and whatnot to add to the general feel of the story as it progressed. Love sound effects.

And awesome, glad you liked the mixing. As for the making it sound more full, why? The dude isn't full. He's about to die. That echoey reverb exemplified this, I think, to the biggest extent. I didn't wanna make this your typically mixed song. The mixing goes with the concept.

But all in all, glad you love it and thanks for the feed!!