DLOVE - Deadly Weapon (ASAP Rocky's Peso Beat)

[Dlovetv]

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Youtube: http://youtu.be/u_X8DXCj09Q


This is "freestyle" over ASAP Rocky's "Peso".
I took his flow/rhyme scheme in the beginning and made it my own

It's written obviously, but it's just a free verse I did real quick.

Let me know what you think.

[Ticalrecords]

it was pretty good bruh, i liked the switches in flow you pulled it off real well. not much to complain about, only a minute and a half you should try ur hand at a full fledged song. keep doing ya thing man.

mind checking mine out?

its called , AhdduB - One Last PSA


EDIT: loll i didn't even see that you had given me feedback, i jsut randomly clicked on urs to see what was up. but thanks tho

[Dlovetv]

haha, yeah thanks im actually working on a project,an EP with 10 songs, its about 70% done, just been pretty busy lately

[Ticalrecords]

nice nice, well good luck bruh. this site is a pretty decent avenue to test drive ur stuffs. and since it IS a eminem fansite its a pretty damn good focus group if your all about the lyric game

[Tomer666]

It's actually good, awesome flow
May I ask you where are you from?

[Dlovetv]

I'm from new jersey

[313Relapse]

For a quick free verse this sounds really sick bro, Your delivery is easily the highlight of the freestyle and it blends very well with your flow. One thing that gets to me though is when you say "need i mention I'm a mother fucking beast" it sounds like you're saying "piece" Other than that i can't find anything else that bugs me, good job man keep it up

[Dlovetv]

Thanks, i appreciate the feedback