Dudhudhduhdudhudhuashdaushda Daze pt 2

[Solace]

I feel like a cunt for dropping this off while being so ghost in this section but it's just a song I recorded for my Spring EP about a month ago. It's named after this because I use a part as the chorus. Oh and I know of the intro slurring, but there's no way I'm gonna get off my ass and rerecord this lol.

Solace - Daze Pt. II (Soundcloud Link)
Solace - Daze Pt. II (Download Link)
Link of Feedizzle

[Intro]
And now I'm entering the grey,
The tragedy of yesterday's a memory today,
I'm the enemy of fame,
Damned to be forgotten in the melodies of pain, under severing of veins.

[Chorus] x2
I been tossed in a daze for days (It doesn't matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (I'll never matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (You'll never matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (We'll never matter).

[Verse 1]
Anemic in my own skin,
A bleeding heathen without reason to be chosen,
I see the demons when they're schemin' and I know this,
You won't believe it, but I'm seeming to be frozen, I'm hopeless,
On every limb I view a dark blade mark,
And it only ever happens when my heart stays sharp,
It's alright, I understand too,
I'm human and the only one around you,
So whatever, I'll be fine, I could use a little solitude,
I hate it when I lie but I hate it when I'm honest too,
As I write this I'm back on my bed,
With a hole inside the center of the mass and it bled,
Forget about the beat, I feel better when it's silent,
'Cause I can hear the rage all embedded into my fist,
View my iris, I wish you could see,
The way I deform whenever you pull and you push me.

[Chorus] x2
I been tossed in a daze for days (It doesn't matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (I'll never matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (You'll never matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (We'll never matter).

[Verse 2]
I like to sit around and space out,
Fuck it, everyday now I been living underneath your raincloud,
What's the point of always taking the blame,
When everyday I view a God who's only making it rain,
Shaking the brain, and I'll be saying in vain,
Until I die a cold death and I can lay in a grave,
That's what I tell 'em, even if I'm stayin' deranged,
You will be leading me to death, think of Abel and Cain
You better view that I am true to my speech,
And I would die for every syllable to you that I teach,
You gotta listen...When I envision every rhyme set,
My mind lets a demon inside fly jets,
Controlling my breath, every movement of my chest,
And every emotion inside of me that I wreck,
Even if I try best, even when I'm mad too,
You don't really care you just listen 'cause I ask you.

[Chorus] x2
I been tossed in a daze for days (It doesn't matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (I'll never matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (You'll never matter),
I been tossed in a daze for days (We'll never matter).

[PAINKILLƎR]

That was sick, I really love the lyrics. Not downloadable? smh. Just playing. Link me to part I doe....

[Solace]

That was sick, I really love the lyrics. Not downloadable? smh. Just playing. Link me to part I doe....

Thanks man, part 1 is http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U4KnwRCXcbo

I can holla with a download link, just didn't think anyone would want one

[PAINKILLƎR]

That was sick, I really love the lyrics. Not downloadable? smh. Just playing. Link me to part I doe....

Thanks man, part 1 is http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U4KnwRCXcbo

I can holla with a download link, just didn't think anyone would want one

Yes mos def holla with a link, I really enjoyed it, I thought the beat suited the lyrics well. Dope track.

[Solace]

Updated OP with a dl link

[PAINKILLƎR]

your album cover is low quality m8, you should fix that

[Solace]

Dope man, I liked it. Anything you want critiqued specifically? The flow sounded a little off near the end of the 2nd verse, but overall it was solid.

I honestly want to know about my mixing and how my quality sounds. Basically, the mic I use is very harsh when it comes to the "s" sound, so whenever I record that it goes like "ssssss" really bad. In this case I had to use a de-esser compressor which helped with the s sound but degraded the general vocals quality. What are your thoughts on how it sounds, along with the volume levels? I'd like to hear about this from others too.

@PAIN, tbh I think the lack of contrast makes it look bad in comparison to those other ones, but the picture itself is fine.

[Solace]

I didn't even notice that thing about the "ssss" being slightly dragged out, but now I kinda hear it. It's not that bad though lol. It's fine.

Your voice is a little lower than it should be, but it's really not that big of a deal. I think it sounds fine. It's not like it's being drowned out or something, but it could be a little louder. Like I said, overall it's solid. Definitely well put together.

@The bolded, yeah it definitely springs out once you start looking for it. It was crazy horrible before.

I hope it sounds fine like you said, I'm really hoping one day I'll be able to get a song mastered. I have no idea how to do it and most sites say "how to master your music" and it's really just a mixing tutorial since no one seems to get the difference lol smh. But yeah, thank you for feeding Geno.

[Solace]

Years ago lol, he changed it to like $150 a track since he was getting more popular.

[Trimss]

I noticed the "S" thing because you posted about it. Solace there's not much I can do except dickride you and your songs so yeah. It was really cool.

THOUGH I noticed your hooks are kind of similar, like repeating them and stuff. Maybe you could work on that (it doesn't really bother me though) just so I can actually criticize something.

[DƎRDYPK]

cold stuff, nothing else I can say...that first verse was my favorite part of the track

"I hate it when I lie but I hate it when I'm honest too"
"Forget about the beat, I feel better when it's silent
'Cause I can hear the rage all embedded into my fist"

THOUGH I noticed your hooks are kind of similar, like repeating them and stuff. Maybe you could work on that (it doesn't really bother me though) just so I can actually criticize something.

this too, your backup vocals or whatever you wanna call em tight doe

[Solace]

I noticed the "S" thing because you posted about it. Solace there's not much I can do except dickride you and your songs so yeah. It was really cool.

THOUGH I noticed your hooks are kind of similar, like repeating them and stuff. Maybe you could work on that (it doesn't really bother me though) just so I can actually criticize something.

Yeah I fuckin' hate hooks so I just relax and do some typical shit each time, I'll try to even that out so it isn't a weakness of mine. Also, if there was anyone I wanted to dickride me, it'd be you.

cold stuff, nothing else I can say...that first verse was my favorite part of the track

"I hate it when I lie but I hate it when I'm honest too"
"Forget about the beat, I feel better when it's silent
'Cause I can hear the rage all embedded into my fist"

THOUGH I noticed your hooks are kind of similar, like repeating them and stuff. Maybe you could work on that (it doesn't really bother me though) just so I can actually criticize something.

this too, your backup vocals or whatever you wanna call em tight doe

Yo PK I thought your avy was a girl sniffin' panties at first. Thanks for peeping it brutha. Again, I'll keep the hook improvement in mind.

[Eedee]

This was pretty sick, yo. Great mixing, lyrics.

Flow was cool too, a few awkward pauses here and there but nothing that made me wanna shove knive blades in my ass.

[Solace]

Thanks brah

nothing that made me wanna shove knive blades in my ass.

Are there particularly any songs out there that make you do such things? Oh right, Bizarre tracks.

[Eedee]

Thanks brah

nothing that made me wanna shove knive blades in my ass.

Are there particularly any songs out there that make you do such things? Oh right, Bizarre tracks.