by eXceL » Apr 12th, '13, 01:55
wassup mang, while the lyrics sound very personal I don’t feel that your delivery matched them emotionally, your flow was pretty good and I did not have a bad time listening to the song. It is actually much better than a lot of things ive heard on the net. Also I feel that the song could be a lot better with a chorus instead of straight verses like you had on there. The second rapper that came on was too loud and not mixed right, he also sounds like he is new at rapping as he lacks presence and delivery. Sounds like he might be still looking for his own sound. Overall the song could really benefit from a chorus like I mentioned earlier and better quality equipment. Finally a better performance by the second rapper would make this a much better song. Hope that helped !