My New Song (Feedback Please?)

[MistaVijilantee]

Feedback on other song:

I don't really fuck with Christian rappers but you have an impressive perspective on it, that a lot of rappers can't tackle originally.
I've enjoyed a lot of your other songs, and this isn't too bad, but I know you love Christianity n stuff and you really believe - otherwise you wouldn't be making music about it lol - but I'd like to see you expand on your concepts, like whether you just become social conscious rapper who talks about problems in society or you become so gnarly, gritty, hardcore rapper with a message hidden in your punchlines and metaphors or whatever.

So, as some of you guys know I'm a rapper and I'd appreciate if you could give me some feedback on one of my more recent recordings.
This is an entry for a Cypher Contest I've entered so I hope you enjoy!
Any feedback would be great.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_eA-hD4i3xQ

[Strictt Ame]

not bad, I think you forced/rushed some bars, they just didnt come across natural to me

"This is a stoned out atmosphere, but I ain't closing the chapters here, cuz my prose is so magnificent"
^the syllables were pretty forced here

Overall the flow was good, couple vocal layers faded out on "stuck like fridge magnets"..but the content, delivery and all that was on point..keep it goin

[MistaVijilantee]

not bad, I think you forced/rushed some bars, they just didnt come across natural to me

"This is a stoned out atmosphere, but I ain't closing the chapters here, cuz my prose is so magnificent"
^the syllables were pretty forced here

Overall the flow was good, couple vocal layers faded out on "stuck like fridge magnets"..but the content, delivery and all that was on point..keep it goin

Yeah, I noticed that towards the end.
I think my mic might have been turned down and bit or I'd yelled and it overpowered it.
I'll take note of that next time, though. The recording process was a bit rushed but I did also do quite a few punch ins quickly.
Cheers, man, much appreciated!