A short track I've been working on

[Nick419]

Here's a short song I've been working on the past couple of weeks. I'll admit, it could of came out a little better as far as mixing some punch ins/changing some lines but I'd say it came out decent enough. I'm ready to move on to a new project anyways ...can't dwell on all the details. But let me know what you think!

Song - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ozXsHfQ5l1U

Feedback - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=161433&start=15

[Nick419]

thanks for the feedback man, Yeah I was kind of iffy on my flow on the 1st verse. I just wanted to play around and try out diff. flows. I guess you can call that an attempt to put anger in my voice lol. But believe it or not thats actually my first time experimenting with a song format. Like with a hook and separate verses. Everything else I've recorded were just free verses

[Mr.DGAF]

This wasn't bad dude. The flow at some points is a little iffy, not that it doesn't flow it just sounds kinda awkward cause there's some slow bars followed by faster and all. Not really a bad thing I guess, just not my cup of tea. The delivery wasn't bad tbh, I liked it. Seemed maybe too aggressive just a bit. The hook was cool man, I actually really liked that. There were parts of this that really clicked, the parts where you mimicked the beat towards the end of the first verse sounded sick.

Not bad dude.

[Nick419]

Thanks for the feed back man. I'll keep all this in mind next time I record. Practice makes perfect

[FxTDilz]

The rhyming is defintely there. Your flow was alrightish but the delivery wasn't my thing, the voice put me off from the start. but liked your rhyme schemes