"The Bullshit Letter' Freestyle

[J.R.]

Yes, it is actually a freestyle. I wanted to work on structure, started to spit and boom.

No, I'm not unaware of the fact I'm terrible.

Feed: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=163612&p=2340093#p2340093

Link: https://soundcloud.com/ac1d_raindrops/t ... -freestyle

Sorry for my voice, but at least I'm not the guy from sleeping with sirens. . and I'm 17 btw xD

Lyrics: (Listened to it and wrote em out.)
All of you that said we was bro's for life,
it's best you outta sight, or else you'd know a fright.
Found dead sleepin tight in the midst of night,
it just hit you right? Jack does not forget,
nor forgive your shit, go, and slit your wrists.
little attention-whorin bitch, this is a release of my anger?
Please- It's of the hatred you fueled to me, maybe you're too cool to see-
how fuckin' rude you be, you're a fuckin nuisance G, now take a seat while I dust you up,
it was impervious to me you never gave a fuck. . . Jack Frost



I know I'm VERY rough around the edges, and I'm not expecting much positive feed, (especially on the sign off or my voice) but I'd prefer to be taken seriously. Thanks.

[Eedee]

I'm not sure what type of feed you're looking for here?

There's no beat so I can't critique the flow, although it did seem rough around the edges, like you said.

Delivery was a bit eh, that comes with time though.

Your voice sounds like your typical 17 year old kid, ya know? Not that that's a bad thing, if you developed your rap voice I think it would sound awesome.

[J.R.]

Basically just delivery, wanted to make sure I was doing most stuff at least correctly (although as I said I'm aware I'm rough around the edges still)

just something simple for now.

[Eedee]

I see. Yeah, delivery isn't quite there yet. You're not projecting, you sound like you're not confident. It'll probably be better once you have a beat behind you and your flow is how you want it.

[Flamez]

Yeah, your delivery is just not there like Eedee said. You'll get it though and get through this.

[Glightning]

Itd be better if you had a beat to flow with. But based on the acapella the freestyle was nothing special. Dont take that the wrong way cause this is the only verse I've heard from you since im new here. Just keep at it and do your thing brother.