In the Morning - My first storytelling song

[Nick419]

Well I just finished this one a few days ago and for the most part I'm happy with it. I usually try to focus on complicated rhyme schemes but I wanted to change it up and strictly focus on telling a funny/entertaining fictional story. So on that note make sure you pay attention to the lyrics and I hope you get a good laugh out of it!

Link:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xu5HgThq3lU


Feedback:
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[Eedee]

Lol this was pretty good. I liked your diction/delivery on certain lines.

Good shit.

[Nick419]

Thanks man it means a lot! Out of all the songs I've made I probably had the most fun making this one (doing all the voices and what not)

[Tash8]

This is funny as fuck, well executed too. In the morning I am sorry but i got to go was hilarious and I liked the skits too.

[Nick419]

This is funny as fuck, well executed too. In the morning I am sorry but i got to go was hilarious and I liked the skits too.

Glad to hear you enjoyed it! It's much appreciated. I've been considering making my first music video to this. It'd probably turn out pretty funny if I pulled it off right.

[cityfan31]

Hey I like this a lot. It's a fun song, liking the delivery and the hook. Ad libs were legitimately funny, and also the mixing was quality. Elements remind me of Love Game (like the car crashing)

Good shit.

[MistaVijilantee]

Nice all round song, pretty decent flow, good storytelling with funny lyrics.
Definitely something I'd listen to more than once

[Nick419]

Thanks for all the support guys! It's cool to see everyone has enjoyed it for the most part -It means a lot because I work hard on my music. I'm currently working on a collab with a buddy of mine so be on the look out for it!

[last_player_alive]

i liked it keep it up man nice lyrics