Brainless - My Story - From My Story Album

[Jaba]

This is one of my many songs. I am making a album called My Story. I am not amazing at rapping and in this song I express that. Not meant to be taking completely serious. I took 3 months on this (made in 1 week and then finished last park yesterday... haha, so took 3 months sorta). The song is about me. And what my emotions were at different times. The first verse is kinda me as a kid (7 to 12ish). 2nd verse is my struggle part/anger of my life. And last verse was just what I was feeling at the time and is sort of like the reality and maybe some of my humor. Let me know what you think!

song - https://soundcloud.com/suvivor/01-my-story-1

feed - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=169519&p=2638920#p2638920

[TheVipBro]

I can't hear either part good, why change your voice?
the beat is sick though

EDIT: finished listening third verse, i see why you changed them pitches

[Jaba]

I can't hear either part good, why change your voice?
the beat is sick though

EDIT: finished listening third verse, i see why you changed them pitches

LOL

Thanks though. Yeah idk, my voice just isn't too deep ):

Anyways, what you think of the VERSES?

[TheVipBro]

I can't hear either part good, why change your voice?
the beat is sick though

EDIT: finished listening third verse, i see why you changed them pitches

LOL

Thanks though. Yeah idk, my voice just isn't too deep ):

Anyways, what you think of the VERSES?

How come the first part says "I'm 16" , thought u said it was you at 7-12ish years old
I can't really understand your verses. What pitch did you use on the chorus though? it sounds dope, that chorus but with a normal emotional voice on the verse would've been goat if done right.
So you're 16? Also the eminem part, idk bout that.
P.S did you make the beat?

[Jaba]

I can't hear either part good, why change your voice?
the beat is sick though

EDIT: finished listening third verse, i see why you changed them pitches

LOL

Thanks though. Yeah idk, my voice just isn't too deep ):

Anyways, what you think of the VERSES?

How come the first part says "I'm 16" , thought u said it was you at 7-12ish years old
I can't really understand your verses. What pitch did you use on the chorus though? it sounds dope, that chorus but with a normal emotional voice on the verse would've been goat if done right.
So you're 16? Also the eminem part, idk bout that.
P.S did you make the beat?

I meant like. Its my viewpoint from when I was like 13ish. not 7 to 12, my bad. And what Eminem part? And can you explain by llike how to make the chorus better? And YES, I did make that beat. If you want I can upload the beat if you wanty to use it. I am in the mist of making another beat. To me it sounds dope.

[TheVipBro]

LOL

Thanks though. Yeah idk, my voice just isn't too deep ):

Anyways, what you think of the VERSES?

How come the first part says "I'm 16" , thought u said it was you at 7-12ish years old
I can't really understand your verses. What pitch did you use on the chorus though? it sounds dope, that chorus but with a normal emotional voice on the verse would've been goat if done right.
So you're 16? Also the eminem part, idk bout that.
P.S did you make the beat?

I meant like. Its my viewpoint from when I was like 13ish. not 7 to 12, my bad. And what Eminem part? And can you explain by llike how to make the chorus better? And YES, I did make that beat. If you want I can upload the beat if you wanty to use it. I am in the mist of making another beat. To me it sounds dope.

I didn't say the chorus needs to be better, i said that chorus is goat (the rhythm and voice) and if you had a normal voice on the verses it would've been so much better.
the eminem part where you say "like the great eminem said in a kiss..." don't lol, Yeaaah that beat is dope well, atleast to me.
I think if you let yourself go hard on them verses with a normal voice, it would be much better. cuz it sounds like you're whispering a bit, just let emotion flow and do a deeper tone (not forced though, but a tone you do when mad or inspired)

[Jaba]

How come the first part says "I'm 16" , thought u said it was you at 7-12ish years old
I can't really understand your verses. What pitch did you use on the chorus though? it sounds dope, that chorus but with a normal emotional voice on the verse would've been goat if done right.
So you're 16? Also the eminem part, idk bout that.
P.S did you make the beat?

I meant like. Its my viewpoint from when I was like 13ish. not 7 to 12, my bad. And what Eminem part? And can you explain by llike how to make the chorus better? And YES, I did make that beat. If you want I can upload the beat if you wanty to use it. I am in the mist of making another beat. To me it sounds dope.

I didn't say the chorus needs to be better, i said that chorus is goat (the rhythm and voice) and if you had a normal voice on the verses it would've been so much better.
the eminem part where you say "like the great eminem said in a kiss..." don't lol, Yeaaah that beat is dope well, atleast to me.
I think if you let yourself go hard on them verses with a normal voice, it would be much better. cuz it sounds like you're whispering a bit, just let emotion flow and do a deeper tone (not forced though, but a tone you do when mad or inspired)

Yah. I think I am going to go back and change that first verse to a normal voice. But I like the 2nd verse and how it sounds. I think it has the perfect combination of the evil/normal voice (normal barley heard) idk I like it. But I am gonna change the 1st verse. I re-listened to it and its annoying.

I recorded that last verse a lot. At first I did it in a weird way cus It sounded like Yelawolf then I changed it.

LOL and thanks about the chorus! Total truth that chorus was just me fucking around and I was like "holy shit! This sounds good!" so I kept it. That was recorded like when MMLP2 just released, thats why I mentioned the Brainless part.

Do you want the beat?

[TheVipBro]

not now, i probably will some day though, i like it alot, i'm trying to make one now too, it's been fucking around with me and it got stressfull so i stopped but i'm back on making it.

So you're 16 though?

[Jaba]

not now, i probably will some day though, i like it alot, i'm trying to make one now too, it's been fucking around with me and it got stressfull so i stopped but i'm back on making it.

So you're 16 though?

Ok. And I am in the process of another beat. But having a slump in it so probably going to end up stealing a beat from Youtube and record a song, then I'll work on this beat again. I changed the voice btw. Ill upload it in a sec.

And yes I am 16 why?

[TheVipBro]

not now, i probably will some day though, i like it alot, i'm trying to make one now too, it's been fucking around with me and it got stressfull so i stopped but i'm back on making it.

So you're 16 though?

Ok. And I am in the process of another beat. But having a slump in it so probably going to end up stealing a beat from Youtube and record a song, then I'll work on this beat again. I changed the voice btw. Ill upload it in a sec.

And yes I am 16 why?

just asking lol

[Jaba]

not now, i probably will some day though, i like it alot, i'm trying to make one now too, it's been fucking around with me and it got stressfull so i stopped but i'm back on making it.

So you're 16 though?

Ok. And I am in the process of another beat. But having a slump in it so probably going to end up stealing a beat from Youtube and record a song, then I'll work on this beat again. I changed the voice btw. Ill upload it in a sec.

And yes I am 16 why?

just asking lol

LOL ok. So do you make any beats?

[Jaba]

New version of song - https://soundcloud.com/suvivor/01-my-story-1

[TheVipBro]

Ok. And I am in the process of another beat. But having a slump in it so probably going to end up stealing a beat from Youtube and record a song, then I'll work on this beat again. I changed the voice btw. Ill upload it in a sec.

And yes I am 16 why?

just asking lol

LOL ok. So do you make any beats?

Been writing for a few years but never really took time for producing untill a few weeks back when i tried making one, it got stressing though cuz it wasn't a normal one, it was a remake of an indie rock song, but i was adding drums too, i couldn't get the guitar to sound right though so i ended up stopping, i'll try again sometime this week though, i need to nail it

[Eedee]

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[Jaba]

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