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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby mdemaz » Jun 2nd, '14, 02:16

This is clearly an improvement, which is what I like to see.
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Jaba » Jun 2nd, '14, 15:42

Thanks mcgooch and dgaf! Appreciate is highly!
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby gutawafang » Jun 9th, '14, 09:23

Very good man. The voice suits the beat. Good job. Lyrics pretty good too.
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Atone » Jun 10th, '14, 04:55

Kinda slowish, doesn't feel like hip hop, more like R&B, you seem nervous to, i like the hook tho

good story you got, but, it sounds very odd, like, at some parts it can sound really good, but other times you just sound like your talking and afraid to rap, like your shy
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Pixel » Jun 11th, '14, 16:42

Hey man, nice song, I like the subject matter, more specifically how you kept focus, lots of rappers have trouble with that, also i love the tune that you had for the hook, super catchy, but yeah, biggest issue is probably the inconsistency of your flow just keep working on it and you will get better no doubt, keep it up! :D
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby TripleNineThree » Jun 15th, '14, 01:57

Hey man, listening now...
Chorus - I'm not a fan of the effect you put on the chorus. It made it hard to understand - it would maybe work if you had a higher quality microphone. It is good that you tried to stick with the beat on the chorus to make it flow but it sounded a little too forced for me.

Verses - The verses seem good for the most part. Obviously the quality and mixing needs some work. There are a lot of times when I can hear your doubles over the actual verse. Make sure you zoom in on the sound waves and line all of them up so its not too distracting when people are listening.

I heard a couple of times when you flow was off as well, it seemed like you fell off the beat but you got back on it after a short time.

Overall, work on spending more time on mixing the song so that everything lines up and it is nice and smooth. Experiment with EQing your voice to increase the quality. I hope that helps!
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby MistaVijilantee » Jun 15th, '14, 06:58

How long have you been rapping for Brainless?
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Jaba » Jun 15th, '14, 15:17

MistaVijilantee wrote:How long have you been rapping for Brainless?
just started
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Atone » Jul 30th, '14, 06:22

i listened to this again, and decided to create a couple covers for you, let me know if you like
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Jaba » Jul 30th, '14, 21:22

Atone wrote:i listened to this again, and decided to create a couple covers for you, let me know if you like

Very cool! Only problem is I call myself Jaba now. And The album this is gonna be on is now called something else.
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby yung rom » Jul 30th, '14, 21:36

Jaba wrote:Very cool! Only problem is everything.
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Jaba » Jul 31st, '14, 03:20

_ROM_ wrote:
Jaba wrote:Very cool! Only problem is everything.

Hope you're talking about the covers.. :coffee:
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Jaba » Aug 6th, '14, 23:54

Chika wrote:good job, keep it up man :y:

Thanks. Glad people actually like this song. IMO it hasnt really grown on me and I was gonna take it off my album... But since tons of ppl are loving it. I am gonna keep it :)
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Alone - Brainless - My Story

Postby Josh » Aug 18th, '14, 11:21

:y:
keep going brah :b:
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