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I Was Happy

Postby gutawafang » Jun 20th, '14, 08:59

LOF:
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-KOdiFk95E4

Lyrics also in description:
Happiness; it's just a dream that I can't achieve
And if I die, would you fuckers dare to say you'll grieve?
Would you pray for the loser that you once deceived?
You told me you could stay; but you're first to leave

Lying on this empty bed, thinking why you didn't stay
I was happy. I was happy up until you walked away
I'm asking once again; I love you so, is that okay?
I'm dying to hear your voice, I only hear it when I pray
Now I can't sleep. I promised I won't let you go
I'm missing every single part of you from head to toe
To you I'm holding on; your heart is in my hands
And I want you to come by to be my romance
My every reason I'm alive, the pulse on my wrists
When you're gone, I'll be dying. I fall on my knees
I'm relying on your heart that I'm holding as a hostage
Locking my love in it; and the key; I lost it
So now I'm stuck in this fucking cage of madness
This crazy feeling made me sweat and leave me breathless
I can't chase you anymore even if you let me
Even if I'm labelled crazy, at least I was happy

Happiness; it's just a dream that I can't achieve
And if I die, would you fuckers dare to say you'll grieve?
Would you pray for the loser that you once deceived?
You told me you could stay; but you're first to leave

At least I saw the point to have my fancy fantasy
You took away my heart. I got blind and lost the chance to see
That's the organ that I need besides the veins that make me bleed
The vital part to even breathe like a human being
Get me out of here. Then show me where the fuck to go
I need an escapade. My dear bitch, I'm about to blow
You were here before. And till death I'll remember
You left me stranded in the coldest december
I think it's natural; I can never let you go
Time didn't change myself or maybe I'm yet to grow
You haven't said goodbye. I only care you said hello
Everytime you talk to me, I just will go like WHOA
You make me smile being alive; especially by side
But the more we confide, the more we divide
There's nothing in the future except the past that I dwell in
I was happy. I'll be happy and I mean it. Now I'm yelling

Happiness; it's just a dream that I can't achieve
And if I die, would you fuckers dare to say you'll grieve?
Would you pray for the loser that you once deceived?
You told me you could stay; but you're first to leave

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Beat produced by Life and Death Productions:
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oS-6kYXMDkc

I forgot to share it here. I shared it a while ago on facebook. I believe some on here have already heard it. I would appreciate feedback. :happy: :happy: :happy:
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby Ticalrecords » Jun 20th, '14, 14:55

loll ur accent threw me off and made me sckeptical but you flow kinda nice. every once in a while ur flow is a lil off and you used delay to make it work (but it didn't), so tighten it up just a tad and ull b fine.
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby MistaVijilantee » Jun 21st, '14, 04:38

You over some of the piano parts is wicked - like before the beat kicks in the second time around.
Vocals could be mixed a bit better but it isn't a major issue, it's quite catchy actually :y:
Flow could be worked on but I enjoyed it :b:
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby gutawafang » Jun 23rd, '14, 06:56

I humbly thank you for your time to take a listen. I appreciate your reviews. :y:
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby Jaba » Jun 23rd, '14, 23:09

this is fucking awesome! great job!
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby Eedee » Jun 23rd, '14, 23:36

That was actually really sick, dude. You have a nice grasp of flow and it shows. Emotion was there as well. Mixing was a bit weird, like the vocals weren't as present on the beat, at least to me? Idk lol

I liked it though overall. :y:
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby gutawafang » Jun 25th, '14, 01:07

Brainless wrote:this is fucking awesome! great job!

Hey bro thanks a lot!!!

Eedee wrote:That was actually really sick, dude. You have a nice grasp of flow and it shows. Emotion was there as well. Mixing was a bit weird, like the vocals weren't as present on the beat, at least to me? Idk lol

I liked it though overall. :y:

Thank you very much for the feedback dude. :wub:
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby gutawafang » Jul 1st, '14, 08:59

Bump because I need more negative feedback.
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby MistaVijilantee » Jul 1st, '14, 16:44

ur takey n I h8 u
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Re: I Was Happy

Postby Kingsare2 » Jul 1st, '14, 23:08

Wow this is pretty good dude. I like the beat too.
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