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Re: Back to The Rhyme (Single off my upcoming EP)

Postby KoLyric » Nov 22nd, '14, 02:21

Hmmm. You need to work on flow, voice, possibly quality, and, from this song, lyrical content.
I understand it's one of those freewrite related conceptual songs, but, there needs to be SOME sort of coherency, or at least something more interesting to say. Even songs chock full of punchlines can suffice interestingly enough.



You seem to have an interest here (judging by how many songs you've released, etc) so I recommend you keep fanning that spark into a flame.

Looking forward to hearing the next one.
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Re: Back to The Rhyme (Single off my upcoming EP)

Postby Jaba » Nov 22nd, '14, 02:23

KoLyric wrote:Hmmm. You need to work on flow, voice, possibly quality, and, from this song, lyrical content.
I understand it's one of those freewrite related conceptual songs, but, there needs to be SOME sort of coherency, or at least something more interesting to say. Even songs chock full of punchlines can suffice interestingly enough.



You seem to have an interest here (judging by how many songs you've released, etc) so I recommend you keep fanning that spark into a flame.

Looking forward to hearing the next one.

This is off my EP "Redemption EP". YOu should listen to that man (its in this thread). I also just released a new song off an upcoming project im doing and thats called "Dont Kill Me". :y:
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Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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Re: Back to The Rhyme (Single off my upcoming EP)

Postby KoLyric » Nov 22nd, '14, 02:29

Jaba wrote:
KoLyric wrote:Hmmm. You need to work on flow, voice, possibly quality, and, from this song, lyrical content.
I understand it's one of those freewrite related conceptual songs, but, there needs to be SOME sort of coherency, or at least something more interesting to say. Even songs chock full of punchlines can suffice interestingly enough.



You seem to have an interest here (judging by how many songs you've released, etc) so I recommend you keep fanning that spark into a flame.

Looking forward to hearing the next one.

This is off my EP "Redemption EP". YOu should listen to that man (its in this thread). I also just released a new song off an upcoming project im doing and thats called "Dont Kill Me". :y:


Link me to both right quick, plz
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Re: Back to The Rhyme (Single off my upcoming EP)

Postby Jaba » Nov 22nd, '14, 02:31

KoLyric wrote:
Jaba wrote:
KoLyric wrote:Hmmm. You need to work on flow, voice, possibly quality, and, from this song, lyrical content.
I understand it's one of those freewrite related conceptual songs, but, there needs to be SOME sort of coherency, or at least something more interesting to say. Even songs chock full of punchlines can suffice interestingly enough.



You seem to have an interest here (judging by how many songs you've released, etc) so I recommend you keep fanning that spark into a flame.

Looking forward to hearing the next one.

This is off my EP "Redemption EP". YOu should listen to that man (its in this thread). I also just released a new song off an upcoming project im doing and thats called "Dont Kill Me". :y:


Link me to both right quick, plz


viewtopic.php?f=38&t=175124 - new song

viewtopic.php?f=38&t=174925 - redemption ep

thanks :y:
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Singin' "Bagpipes from Baghdad" again
In my dad's drag draggin' a faggot in a Glad bag
Won't be the last time I make a dramatic entrance like that again
You thought I was lyin' when I said I think that I'm crossin' the line again
I've lost my mind, caution oh God I think I've just thought of another fucking line
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But hip hop has left me brainwashed with a violent streak
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