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Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby SarkingMajor » Nov 9th, '14, 12:31

Hey! I wrote some bars to Freaks and Geeks by Childish Gambino and recorded them a few weeks ago. I'd appreciate some feedback.

By the way, I know the production is pretty bad, I made it just as a quick demo. In future I'll have better production. :)

Feedback: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=174653&p=2831164#p2831164

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I'd work on your delivery a little though. Your flow was amazing in some parts man :y:

You could be the new Luna C in a few years


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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby DetroitSkills » Nov 9th, '14, 16:15

keep writing and work on that delivery
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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby SarkingMajor » Nov 9th, '14, 16:21

DetroitSkills wrote:keep writing and work on that delivery


thanks man, will do
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I'd work on your delivery a little though. Your flow was amazing in some parts man :y:

You could be the new Luna C in a few years


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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby Eedee » Nov 10th, '14, 02:32

Pros:

- Flow on point
- Rhymes/structure on point
- Coherency (you make sense most of the time)

Cons:

- Delivery/mixing (as you said, only a demo though)
- Confidence (I know you probably love what you wrote but let it shine in your voice, homie!)
- Adlibs/layers (they're not properly mixed/aligned and it kinda jumbles the main rapping layer)

This is good for a 13 year old. Keep at it, you already got the basics down. Just gotta work on the upper level shit now (mixing, delivery, making sure everything is aesthetically pleasing). :y:
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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby Eedee » Nov 10th, '14, 02:49

True Wiz wrote:
Eedee wrote:This is good for a 13 year old. Keep at it, you already got the basics down. Just gotta work on the upper level shit now (mixing, delivery, making sure everything is aesthetically pleasing). :y:

Definitely this.

I genuinely think you have a gift with this bro. To have that good of a flow at 13 is something you should be proud of.


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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby DetroitSkills » Nov 10th, '14, 02:57

M8 i just heard a demo of roms new shit n it might top yours eedee daaaym.
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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby Eedee » Nov 10th, '14, 03:22

DetroitSkills wrote:M8 i just heard a demo of roms new shit n it might top yours eedee daaaym.


Yeah ROM's on that shit man
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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby SarkingMajor » Nov 10th, '14, 07:20

True Wiz wrote:
Eedee wrote:This is good for a 13 year old. Keep at it, you already got the basics down. Just gotta work on the upper level shit now (mixing, delivery, making sure everything is aesthetically pleasing). :y:

Definitely this.

I genuinely think you have a gift with this bro. To have that good of a flow at 13 is something you should be proud of.


Thanks a lot both of you. Will improve on those areas :y:
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I'd work on your delivery a little though. Your flow was amazing in some parts man :y:

You could be the new Luna C in a few years


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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby Spyder » Nov 10th, '14, 20:48

not bad man, pretty much agree with what everyones said. flow is decent seems to be on point. delivery is a little lackluster. sometimes your a little hard to understand, may be the accent but whatevs. just work on your track presence and enunciate. also some of the overlays were off. keep it up doe
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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby SarkingMajor » Nov 10th, '14, 22:37

Spyder wrote:not bad man, pretty much agree with what everyones said. flow is decent seems to be on point. delivery is a little lackluster. sometimes your a little hard to understand, may be the accent but whatevs. just work on your track presence and enunciate. also some of the overlays were off. keep it up doe

Cheers, and yeah I know what you mean. Will improve :y:
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I'd work on your delivery a little though. Your flow was amazing in some parts man :y:

You could be the new Luna C in a few years


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Re: Freaks and Geeks - Sarking Major

Postby SarkingMajor » Nov 26th, '14, 20:06

bump bitches
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I'd work on your delivery a little though. Your flow was amazing in some parts man :y:

You could be the new Luna C in a few years


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