Check this my track out

[<Stiiccy>]

This is just a rough draft of a song im workin on and before i move on to the second verse i want to here what you guys think i should do to improve it cuzz there is somthin missin...idk what but there is so please peep this out http://www.megaupload.com/?d=JCDM9ZPQ

[<Stiiccy>]

^^^ ohh and beat by shah bros productions.....YOU GUYS ARE THE SHIT THANKS FOR THE BEAT!!!

[DelinQuent]

i don't mean to be a dick but this shit is.. well it's shit. there's no flow, the lyrics are horrible. i just, i just... fuck idk.
i'd recommend trying to hit some rhymes on some snares or something, structuring bars would be a good start. i hope youre new at this. if so, keep working, skill will improve with practice

[<Stiiccy>]

^^ naw homie i aint new at rappin...its the beat man i cant figure it out....if you gget what im sayin...plus this is just a rough draft man ,,,you need to read what i said before you go off sayin im wack and shit.......http://www.myspace.com/sticcycickstudios313