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[New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 12th, '08, 18:17

Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)
http://www.myspace.com/barthewar

first track on the myspace.

props to mart85 on the sick beat and mixing :worship:

lyrics can be found - http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=43635


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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Mar 12th, '08, 18:23

like i said b4
some pretty dope rhymes...flow was solid
no complains....just didnt understand couple words...maybe its my lack of english or ur pronouncation :)
but overall good track man :y: and good beat aswell :worship:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby Speech » Mar 12th, '08, 18:49

was diggin tha energy on this one...same as chris said some words were hard to understand...guess thatz not a language lack thing...but the shit i understood...hmm not lyrical as fuck but man thatz not shit you can throw on a track like that so you did perfect....liked the first part more..words were clearer rapped....hmm chorus was catchy, and would be even catchier if it wasn mixed a lil weird...idk if its cuz i listened to it on myspace but somehow the chorus sounded not so good as your last choruses mixed by mart...beat was sick..i think thatz a whole nother thing i heard from mart...other beats had all that energy in em...maybe i have to check out your soundclick again to correct my statement...nice shit i liked it...at bar's standards fo sheezy...what to do better hmm...can't tell right now sorry

9 / 10 :y: nice job
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 12th, '08, 19:00

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:like i said b4
some pretty dope rhymes...flow was solid
no complains....just didnt understand couple words...maybe its my lack of english or ur pronouncation :)
but overall good track man :y: and good beat aswell :worship:


thanks man apreciate the feed :worship:

Speech wrote:was diggin tha energy on this one...same as chris said some words were hard to understand...guess thatz not a language lack thing...but the shit i understood...hmm not lyrical as fuck but man thatz not shit you can throw on a track like that so you did perfect....liked the first part more..words were clearer rapped....hmm chorus was catchy, and would be even catchier if it wasn mixed a lil weird...idk if its cuz i listened to it on myspace but somehow the chorus sounded not so good as your last choruses mixed by mart...beat was sick..i think thatz a whole nother thing i heard from mart...other beats had all that energy in em...maybe i have to check out your soundclick again to correct my statement...nice shit i liked it...at bar's standards fo sheezy...what to do better hmm...can't tell right now sorry

9 / 10 :y: nice job


thanx man, apreciate the feed :worship: onyl thing i would say is i tried to balance the lyrical stuff in this track, i think there's a good amount of multi's and stuff in it, i did try to make them less obvious though so that they didnt sound chopped up and non flowing, also my raw recording wasnt at the quality is was when i worked with mart before, coz i aint got a pop filter no more so i got to stand further back to avoid major pops witch means more interfearence in the recording. lol

props again :worship:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby Kez » Mar 12th, '08, 19:11

Lovin the beat
Mart85 as usual :y:!

First i'm glad to finally see a full, nice quality song from you. Been a while.
One of the best i've heard from you in a while
Lyrics are great, the concept is nice
Your quality is nice, which is a welcome change to your past low quality previews :sweating: :y:
You got some great multis n rhymes here, and the flow is hot
The chorus sums up the track perfect :y:

Great stuff, best i've heard from you since Pride
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby SajN » Mar 12th, '08, 19:18

DAMN, DAMN, DAMN!!

THIS WAS A DOPE TRACK!

Good lyrics, and the best I've personally heard from you :worship:
You got great rhymes :y:
I loved the third verse :smoking:

The chorus was fire!
Good work

Dmn, I really like this track :flower: :y:

The beat is also damn good :y: Nice work on it Mart :y:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 12th, '08, 22:28

Kez wrote:Lovin the beat
Mart85 as usual :y:!

First i'm glad to finally see a full, nice quality song from you. Been a while.
One of the best i've heard from you in a while
Lyrics are great, the concept is nice
Your quality is nice, which is a welcome change to your past low quality previews :sweating: :y:
You got some great multis n rhymes here, and the flow is hot
The chorus sums up the track perfect :y:

Great stuff, best i've heard from you since Pride


thanx man :worship: apreciate the feedback n glad you liked it :happy:

The Infection wrote:DAMN, DAMN, DAMN!!

THIS WAS A DOPE TRACK!

Good lyrics, and the best I've personally heard from you :worship:
You got great rhymes :y:
I loved the third verse :smoking:

The chorus was fire!
Good work

Dmn, I really like this track :flower: :y:

The beat is also damn good :y: Nice work on it Mart :y:


thanx man :worship: really glad you liked it :worship: suprised you prefered the third verse though lol, i feel as if i slacked and used the easy option with the multi's on that verse lol

thanx the feed ya'll :worship:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby Tash8 » Mar 12th, '08, 23:03

Wack
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 12th, '08, 23:05

Tash8 wrote:Wack


you suck donkey dick :smoking:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby jigglinj » Mar 12th, '08, 23:27

Listen Bar, i wont even listen to ur track, cuz u suck donkey dick! U ban my bf: mctworm, and he will kill ur little unimpessive ass! Faggot! :angry:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby Jay-19 » Mar 12th, '08, 23:42

First of all, the beat is just straight awesome! Good work on that Mart85!

And the lyrics, as said before, are crazy! Only thing is I don't really catch up on every word, since I find it a little hard to understand the British accent. i'm, like most of you on here I think, more used to US rap. But anyway, I read the lyrics, and they're really really good! The delivery is good, it's not the best I've heard, but far from worst. I don't think I could do it better since it's the hardest thing for me to get going. The track is really good however. Great work man! :y:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby Kez » Mar 12th, '08, 23:57

KillahGoat wrote:First of all, the beat is just straight awesome! Good work on that Mart85!

And the lyrics, as said before, are crazy! Only thing is I don't really catch up on every word, since I find it a little hard to understand the British accent. i'm, like most of you on here I think, more used to US rap. But anyway, I read the lyrics, and they're really really good! The delivery is good, it's not the best I've heard, but far from worst. I don't think I could do it better since it's the hardest thing for me to get going. The track is really good however. Great work man! :y:


Actually, his accent is Scottish, lol :p

jigglinj wrote:Listen Bar, i wont even listen to ur track, cuz u suck donkey dick! U ban my bf: mctworm, and he will kill ur little unimpessive ass! Faggot! :angry:


Wow, this is a woman?

How ladylike!



























Either a woman or a homo. :shifty:
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby Tash8 » Mar 13th, '08, 00:04

Bar seriously this shit is completely wack, if it wasn't for mart i would rate this 0/10 but because of mart i have to automatically give it a 5/10
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 13th, '08, 00:07

Tash8 wrote:Bar seriously this shit is completely wack, if it wasn't for mart i would rate this 0/10 but because of mart i have to automatically give it a 5/10



*pens the tash diss*

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then id be dead, what the fuck you goni say!!"

lyrical murder biatch :n:

KillahGoat wrote:First of all, the beat is just straight awesome! Good work on that Mart85!

And the lyrics, as said before, are crazy! Only thing is I don't really catch up on every word, since I find it a little hard to understand the British accent. i'm, like most of you on here I think, more used to US rap. But anyway, I read the lyrics, and they're really really good! The delivery is good, it's not the best I've heard, but far from worst. I don't think I could do it better since it's the hardest thing for me to get going. The track is really good however. Great work man! :y:


thanx man :worship: i understand people find it dificult to understand the accent, its hard for me to improve on it unless i had someone there to help me while recording, unforuently i dont, i try my best to speak clearly, i just got to keep practicing :happy: anywae, apreaciate the feedback man :worship:


everyone just ignore the assholes *including tash*
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Re: [New] Bar - Permit Our Sin(Produced By Mart85)

Postby matz » Mar 13th, '08, 00:13

im no expert but i liked it, hot mart85 beat as usual, liked your flow and the chorus has a bit of a meaning to it and is catchy, good stuff
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