I'm So Sick

[DelinQuent]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_so ... ID=6425440

A Flip off of 50 Cent's "I'm So Hood"... GIVE ME FEEDBACK!!! lol

Lyrics:
you gotta love this baby, smooth like gravy/
fuck what they say cause they say i'm crazy/
ill with the flow, see i gotta runny nose/
and i'm runnin all you hoes, out the motherfuckin game/
you ain't ready hold steady, this a bomb here baby/
make ladies drop dead, oh no not yet/
gotta drop hot shit, it's in my DNA/
these are fuckin instincts, you should love me like your gay/
like a coke head yeah my lines so straight/
like a hitman man i hit with perfect aim/
king of the jungle, i shall go untame/
delinquent, better know my name/
with some rhymes fittin the beat like mitten/
pneumonia in the old days i'm straight killin/
like a drunk with a cup, my freshness is spillin/
you faggots say ya hot, but shit i'm still chillin

Chorus:i'm so sick, i can't help it/
i'm on fire, i can help it/
love me for bein me, you can't change it/
can't rearrange it, i am what i am/ so now you gotta deal/

i'm so sick, and i'm on fire/
don't try to deny, just bob ya head and tap ya leg/
now youre lookin retarded, i am on the hottest shit/
now way you can stop me kid, i am all on top of this/
no way that i'm comin down, got these hoes runnin round/
got them haters duckin out, lookin like some fuckin clowns/
you know i'm just fuckin round, see i don't give a damn/
love me hate me, i am what i am/
call 50 up, let him know i stole his jam/
and it's slidin like jelly, without the peanut butter/(Jam and jelly are kinda the same thing)
i got em goin crazy, pik you should see these fuckers/
they say my voice is sexy, and they wanna sex me/
cause i am the best thing, comin up yup/
i am like a magazine cause i just got the stuff/(Stuff is a Magazine)
haters hate on baby, it's a shame ain't it tough/
you faggots say ya hot, but shit i call ya bluff/

[B.A.D.]

well, I like the original a lot (prolly cuz its the only 50 cent track I like lol)

but this one is hella sick

the rhymes and words n everything there is great, good good rhymin
quality is ill good on this one, good one there!!

all good

the only thing kinda didn't do for me was the flow, prolly its only me, but I think it was a bit forced

anyway, good track keep em comin bro!

btw: make a fuckin album or mixtape!!!!!!! that'll be sick!!

[DelinQuent]

i don't have the patience to not release tracks, i just love putting shit out for people to hear as soon as it's finished lol.

as for the flow, idk, but thanks for letting me know that you felt it was off.

good lookin out on the feedback

[<Stiiccy>]

some of the lyrics were cheesy exl.)"smooth like gravy"
delivery and your voice takes a second to get used to...
i liked the hook...
nice remake and i liked how you were original
flow was ight wasnt bad wasnt incredible either
i give it 6.5/10..just because it was a remake....say it was an original it be a 7.5/10

[Tash8]

yo dude, ur flow was horrible, u kinda weren't flowing u were just talking till the snare came then u stopped then u rapped again when kick started and u stopped at snare..

flowing means just htat, flowing... u gotta flow..

lyrics were aite..

this diffinatly one of ur worse tracks, i usually like ur stuff, but this one i'll be honest, was horrible.

[DelinQuent]

Damn you guys are harsh lol but I like honesty and it means a lot to me. As for the flow I thought my flow was pretty on point, I hit words on the bass and the snare. If someone could elaborate on exactly what went wrong I'd greatly appreciate it. Thanks for the honest feed guys.

[Tash8]

well idk how to explain cuz well i dont really rap, but ur flow is choppy as hell and it's just not natural.

[Xray]

you need to put some bass in your vocals...and like tash said your flow is choppy man, you need to fix that

[Jay_LP1]

First thing first , this song is really bad . Your flow is not good at all man . What were you thinking while making this song? Didn't you listen to the song before uplaoding it?

And here is something that I would like to point out in your lyrics

'fuck what they say cause they say i'm crazy/'

and this line from second verse
"they say my voice is sexy, and they wanna sex me/"

so tell me my friend , do you see any coordination in ur lyrics? First you say fuck what they say and then you say they're saying that your voice is sexy . That is fucking stupid man . You're trying to praise yourself in the song but you can't even do that properly . Stop being so cocky .

Next line
"cause i am the best thing, comin up yup/"

who told you that you are the best thing?

And this one

"can't rearrange it, i am what i am/"

"love me hate me, i am what i am/"

stop copying eminem and 50 dude . You're what you are . So what is the point in saying the same thing again and again?

In short this song doesn't make any sense at all .

0/10 for this one

[Speech]

this wasn all bad flow wise..idk....liked it....hmm....this guy was breakin it down for real..i mean...you gotta be cocky so ppl don jump you on trax....a lil overdone tho...you nice..but not like the nicest..no hate you know i like your shit....hmmmm what else...well beat was cool...nice g-unit beat...uhm...welll since it's a re-make i won't give this a a - / -

another track from you thatz cool

[DelinQuent]

fuck what they say was referring to naysayers who told me i'd never make anything of myself. the sexy voice thing is what i've been told by a few females. as for the "best thing coming up" i'm not being cocky, i'm simply spitting what i feel. you have to believe in your own abilities before anyone else believes in you at all, confidence is key my friend. i'm not copying 50 and eminem, i made a flip off of a 50 song, where does eminem fit into the equation??? and yes, i am what i am, and if you listen to my other songs, you'll see i don't follow trends.

i don't mean to attack about the crititcism, just explaining my views, i do honestly appreciate your feedback and i'll honestly take into consideration all the negatives listed (there's a lot lol). again i wanna thank everyone for taking time to listen and to give feedback.

i think i'm done experimenting now, and i'll go back to making normal songs lol

and thanks spizzy for the feed.

[DelinQuent]

i was gonna say lol, i listened to the one song on his soundclick and it was terrible. and i'm not dissing i'm just saying, he's telling me i had no flow, but then you listen to his song and it's clear he doesnt even know what flow is lol

[DelinQuent]

lmfao, i gotta show that for the ladies, you feel me?

again i wanna thank EVERYONE for their feedback, choppy flow was what i heard most and i'll make sure to be on point in my next song. again, thanks guys

[Xray]

lmfao, i gotta show that for the ladies, you feel me?

again i wanna thank EVERYONE for their feedback, choppy flow was what i heard most and i'll make sure to be on point in my next song. again, thanks guys

and for fucks sake...please make a different concept song

i had enough of your love and songs for the ladies..make some songs for us guys
maybe something street or something btw you down for a colab? i know we didnt end up colabing wen we agreed to colab but this time its for real

[Jay_LP1]

fuck what they say was referring to naysayers who told me i'd never make anything of myself. the sexy voice thing is what i've been told by a few females. as for the "best thing coming up" i'm not being cocky, i'm simply spitting what i feel. you have to believe in your own abilities before anyone else believes in you at all, confidence is key my friend. i'm not copying 50 and eminem, i made a flip off of a 50 song, where does eminem fit into the equation??? and yes, i am what i am, and if you listen to my other songs, you'll see i don't follow trends.

i don't mean to attack about the crititcism, just explaining my views, i do honestly appreciate your feedback and i'll honestly take into consideration all the negatives listed (there's a lot lol). again i wanna thank everyone for taking time to listen and to give feedback.

i think i'm done experimenting now, and i'll go back to making normal songs lol

and thanks spizzy for the feed.

well dude there is a lot of difference between being confident and being cocky . You're just starting and you think are the upcoming best thing . Let me tell you one thing . If someone is giving you 6.5/10 for this track then he would give eminem's 100000/10 . I hope u understand what i'm trying to say.

I don't have anything against you man . I don't even know you . I just want you to show the ground reality . I don't want you to keep in dark by posting some fake reviews . You've the potential and I want you to improve .

As of my song you might want to check out this thread
http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic. ... 33#p516733

As you can see none of them pointed towards my flow . My pronunciation is the problem and i'm working over that . You might also want to check http://music.download.com/obb . Two straight 1000+ listened songs without any promotion of any kind . ANd i've 4.5 rating of 6 votes.

If you think you can do better than this then do it and show me. I'm not being cocky here . This is my confidence . I've proved myself and i'm showing it . I consider myself still a kid in this field and i've lot to learn.


And CHET mind ur own business dude . You might want to check ur mother in the bed . maybe a stream of blood is flowing through her ******