Preview "The Storm" 7 Tracks

[Tornado]

http://myfreefilehosting.com/f/2b418d90d1_27.8MB

Tracks
1. Fuck You
A Eminem style rant about my life and what i have to put up with over "The Way I Am beat"

2. SellOut
A relaxed flow talking serious issues in rap on rappers selling out over "Xzibit's Paparazzi"

3. Hell On Earth
A Sampled Finger Eleven Beat, talking about society and the sitation with the youth with killer beat you'll recognise

4. It's Here (Remix)
My most lyrical song introducing myself to rap bringing a new era

5. My Rule Prod by WHP
A Crunk Beat, which i totally changed to a darker, agressive song about it being my time..think the title song Devil's Night

6. Lyrical Expertese (Incomplete)
Killer guitar over a fast paced beat with me going more lyrical over two verses but thisa track is open for a feat if your intrested

7. Storm Is Coming
The most pumping song, over the Cannon beat..

Overall i've done 17 songs, almost finished the album but wanted feedback before its released, most probably end of next month. Honest feedback needed and suggestions wanted

[B.A.D.]

I'll review your tracks later, gotta go now

but I greatly suggest you leave feed on other rappers before posting a mixtape...

cuz otherwise, you will have a very big lack of feedback

[DelinQuent]

i tried to listen to "fuck You" but you had absolutely no flow on it, and you pronunciation is terrible, i honestly couldn't hardly tell you were speaking english. no offense but i can't even listen to the other tracks. keep working tho, good luck.

[Tornado]

i tried to listen to "fuck You" but you had absolutely no flow on it, and you pronunciation is terrible, i honestly couldn't hardly tell you were speaking english. no offense but i can't even listen to the other tracks. keep working tho, good luck.

ykno i aint gon lie, Fuck You was rushed by me but would appreciate if you check my other tracks
thanks for the honesty

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

i aint being a asshole so dont take offence, but you sound like you have a lisp, maybe its just the way you speak but if you do have a lisp you should take some speech classes to sort it out before you continue rapping, if its just the way you speak you should practicing tounge twisters slowly and very loud like "she sells sea shells by the sea shore" slowly and very loud and just keep practicing till you can do it perfect then speed up and keep practicing till you can do it ten times really fast and clearly, this will help with your pronouncation, also put a pen in your mouth and speak a paragraph, sound stupid but really help, if you can speak a paragraph clearly and loud with a pen in your mouth you can spit it crystal clear, again aint bein a asshole i used both these methods myself to help me.


flow wis your stuff is below average but with practice you defiantly got potential, lyrically you seem to have a understand of it again just need practice turning lyrical ability into dope tracks.

i listen to the tracks on your myspace and downloaded this and listened to a couple so this is just a general view on all the material ive heard from you.

and with rushing tracks dont do it, never rush a track its better to not have the track than have a weak and rushed track, also pracitcie your verses atleast 30 times before you attempt to spit it and when you record make sure you do 7 takes mix them all on beat and listen to see witch is best.

keep it up though

[Tornado]

i aint being a asshole so dont take offence, but you sound like you have a lisp, maybe its just the way you speak but if you do have a lisp you should take some speech classes to sort it out before you continue rapping, if its just the way you speak you should practicing tounge twisters slowly and very loud like "she sells sea shells by the sea shore" slowly and very loud and just keep practicing till you can do it perfect then speed up and keep practicing till you can do it ten times really fast and clearly, this will help with your pronouncation, also put a pen in your mouth and speak a paragraph, sound stupid but really help, if you can speak a paragraph clearly and loud with a pen in your mouth you can spit it crystal clear, again aint bein a asshole i used both these methods myself to help me.


flow wis your stuff is below average but with practice you defiantly got potential, lyrically you seem to have a understand of it again just need practice turning lyrical ability into dope tracks.

i listen to the tracks on your myspace and downloaded this and listened to a couple so this is just a general view on all the material ive heard from you.

and with rushing tracks dont do it, never rush a track its better to not have the track than have a weak and rushed track, also pracitcie your verses atleast 30 times before you attempt to spit it and when you record make sure you do 7 takes mix them all on beat and listen to see witch is best.

keep it up though

I do have a lisp but i try to work my way through that so i guess i'll improve as time goes on. As for Fuck you, i was in a studio where i was paying so i had to finish it off quickly, but next time ill take time
thanks for taking the time

[DelinQuent]

you know, i respect you for not being a dick when people gave you honest feedback. most of the new people come and get feed and get mad because we don't lie to them and say "oh hot shit 10/10" but you were man enough to really understand what feedback is. i respect that, just thought i'd tell you.

[B.A.D.]

k

first of all, about the rushing tracks.... thats a no no... I am a very very fast worker (ask bar lol), but I never rush a track.

I'm gonna go this general about each topic.

pronunciation: maybe I don't think pronunciation is a major issue, but makin your words understandable, its a point in your favour. try the pen thing bar said... It works for me

quality: got no problem with it, 10/10 on this.. just make the reverb a little little bit stronger

flow: fixing your flow is very easy, try the sillable-drum match or fix the structure of the writing. you'll learn this with time and practice

beats: you have a nice choice of beats, but I suggest using non-commecial beats... but its all good

delivery & emotion: perfect

lyrics: that doesn't seems to be a problem for you, although with practice you'll get them way way better... but you have the perfect start for it

overall only thing you really missin is fixing the flow, other than that, I find it with great potential

favourite track:
"lyrical expertese"

keep up the job and you'll do great bro

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

already downloaded 3times...3times download got fucked up...
i'll try later..a 4th time

[Xray]

:angry: already downloaded 3times...3times download got fucked up...
i'll try later..a 4th time

mind uploading each song seperate?

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

^wut he said..or general another server

[<VerbalTouch>]

uh get um on soundclick cause there no way im waitin an hour just to hear this

[Tornado]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default ... tent=music

These are not all the same tracks, but it's a selection of them. You can download it there

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

overall u got an allright flow man...some more emotions wouldnt hurt...
and true about ur lisp problem (no hate) .....wont say anything about the accent thing
just keep practising

[<VerbalTouch>]

oK i took a listen to My Rule it sounds like you reversed the song