Jimmy Crack Corn-D.Dubs Feat. DelinQuent

[DelinQuent]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/1090382067923f0c/

brand new track. D.Dubs (emadyville here on TR) on the 1st and 2nd verses. DQ on the hook and 3rd verse. he's going to the studio soon to put some finishing touches/fixes, so feedback is not only greatly appreciated, but needed. thanks guys.

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my rhyme smust be butter coz im on a roll here, wahahahahahaaahahahahahaha, seriously ROFLMAO i heard of that syaing before coz a 7 year old told me it as a joke like "yo mister my names butter coz im on a roll" but seriously lmao, i had to close the web page there coz i nearly pissed myself laughing ill listen to the rest in a minute lmao

[DelinQuent]

lmfao, i didnt even hear that line. thanks for checking tho, i'm looking forward to your feed.

[B.A.D.]

I listened to it

gotta be honest with you, I hated it

but thats only my opinion, cuz verses was done nice, specially third verse... and lyrics were tight
not gonna judge the quality cuz you said ya gonna fix it

hmm... but if you gonna get on a studio, I suggest tryn a better track

hook is awfull (no offense dq)... but the flow is it is kinda lose... and sounds to pressed up

overall... I finished listenin to it.. and it wasn't bad at all. but d.dubs, you need to work on ya own flow, not imitate eminem's... anyways... lyrics were good, and concept well, guess its ok

[Dark Blue]

DelinQuent was sweet on the 3rd verse great job

[Emadyville]

thanks for the feed and the honesty everyone, much appreciated

[DelinQuent]

thanks everyone for the feedback. Honesty is much appreciated. Thanks for being constructive rather than being douche bags.

[Xray]

you used the beat, and stole the concept of the original, even chorus sounds like the original but worse. my method is if you ever use a beat someone else used, make a different concept and the chorus has to be completely different 4/10 didn't like the original and didn't like this either.

[Kez]

Making a remix of a good official song always backfires on you if you try to copy it.

(I know some will suggest about my Razorblade Salvation shit, but i didn't use the same flow as Jedi Mind Tricks, and i remixed that myself)

Didn't like the verses, too much like Em's, and sometimes i heard some similiar lyrics like the "Go Get 'em", some decent lines but often just the same stuff you hear from most rappers. You need your own unique style, or your own thing that makes you stand out. You need to improve your delivery, cause it sounds too robotic and forced, not much real emotion or accent. Mic quality is fine.

And the hook just doesn't work, first his voice is too low and second you don't hold the notes as long as on the beat, which would make it sound better.

[C-Game]

well except for the chorus it was OK for me .. DQ did a good job on the 3rd verse...

[DelinQuent]

thanks for all the feedback everyone. i'll admit the chorus was weak, i'm not much of a chorus writer, it's my weakness, i gotta work on it. but again, thanks everyone for checking it out.

[Darkblade44431]

i didnt really like it, and yeah, chorus was definately weak. and i think d dubs sounded too much like em on his verses as far as lyrics and flow go. but i liked the last verse with DQ.

[DelinQuent]

feedback was late there, but appreciated, good to hear another opinion, again, i apollogize for that terrible chorus lol

[Darkblade44431]

its all good, i know u guys are decent rappers. nah, never too late, i just talked after u said "thanks everyone"