My First Rap

[Darkblade44431]

Tell me what you think of it, and i know the beat is a little fucked up.
Link:

http://rapidshare.de/files/39213579/hom ... 2.wav.html

[<VerbalTouch>]

Host it on zshare or soundclick cause rapidshare sucks ass

[Darkblade44431]

lol, ok. for the next song maybe. i think i need to be a member for those though, i'll get that set up later.

[Darkblade44431]

Ok, well then i'll do it later cuz i cant right now.
But damn, is nobody gonna even comment?

[shady45]

Here is the ZSHARE LINK:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/11015531785168d3/

[<VerbalTouch>]

Ight its not all the bad for your first

[Darkblade44431]

Thanks djblue. And thanks a lot for uploading it for me shady45

[DelinQuent]

you sound very young, i'm guessing anywhere from 12-15.

you need to work on flow, seems like all your lines are very random. the rhymes are verrrry weak, but that will get better as you keep doing it. youre delivery was decent, you sounded natural IMO. keep working at it and try to flow better and with time you'll get a lot better.

[Darkblade44431]

Yeah i know. Well i'm workin on a better song commin up soon. it has good flow, better beat, better rhymes, and my voice doesnt sound young like that in the new song. and yeah, i'm 14. but u know what makes me mad about that song and the way i recorded is that i dont sound like a little kid in rl, so w/e, but somehow i tihnk i've managed to get that other song to sound better as far as my voice goes.

[Darkblade44431]

k, thanks man. i'm still workin. gonna be workin in a recording studio soon.

[<VerbalTouch>]

k, thanks man. i'm still workin. gonna be workin in a recording studio soon.

K if you want send me your acpellas and the beat and i can mix it for you cause I just got Adobe auditions

[Darkblade44431]

Alright, cool, thanks djblue. but for the songs that i record in a studio i'll be makin the beat with 2 other people, but for when i dont use it, yeah, that would probably be helpful.