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C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 28th, '08, 13:56

lol...just 16 bars to show that im still alive and rapping :wave: lol
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C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by tash8]
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby Xray » Jul 28th, '08, 14:00

lyrics are pretty good bro. the delivery is dope. flow is crazy just some parts you fall of but still enjoyable.

call it zombie massacre, ripping up your stomach every month like a calender

thats where its at homie :worship:

good shit man really enjoyed it. and tash good beat :shifty:

EDIT: pronunciation is better here i think, so props on that aswell :b:
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby <Stiiccy> » Jul 28th, '08, 14:41

ok number 1 your voice doesnt fit this kind of song
but your delivery was good
flow was crazy
lyrics were preety good
your accent annoyed me at times...but it makes you unique so :y:
overall it was an ok track
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby da/latin/saba/king » Jul 28th, '08, 15:04

this is the first song of yours i've heard, and i'm a fan now, i like it, i think you need beats that help your accent, then it would be sick, but still props, nice track :flower:
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 28th, '08, 15:12

:worship: thank u all three above :worship:
glad ya liked it :y:
hmm...would be nice if someone tells me how to get rid off an accent :( lol
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 28th, '08, 16:50

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote::worship: thank u all three above :worship:
glad ya liked it :y:
hmm...would be nice if someone tells me how to get rid off an accent :( lol




you dont get rid of it, its what makes you you, just try get it clearer thats all. accent get familiar quickly if people take time to listen to it.
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 28th, '08, 16:59

so u mean gettin the accent clearer :unsure: ?!
get what clearer?!
but true with everything else....so i just gotta hope that people will get used to it :unsure:
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 28th, '08, 17:14

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:so u mean gettin the accent clearer :unsure: ?!
get what clearer?!
but true with everything else....so i just gotta hope that people will get used to it :unsure:



just genereally speaking clearer will improve people understanding your accent better
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby Tash8 » Jul 28th, '08, 17:22

,-,'-{Bar}-',-, wrote:
°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:so u mean gettin the accent clearer :unsure: ?!
get what clearer?!
but true with everything else....so i just gotta hope that people will get used to it :unsure:



just genereally speaking clearer will improve people understanding your accent better


not really, he's german so he should either rap in german or get rid of the accent, it's not like he's rapping in his native language.. so it's even harder.
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 28th, '08, 17:27

Tash8 wrote:
,-,'-{Bar}-',-, wrote:
°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:so u mean gettin the accent clearer :unsure: ?!
get what clearer?!
but true with everything else....so i just gotta hope that people will get used to it :unsure:



just genereally speaking clearer will improve people understanding your accent better


not really, he's german so he should either rap in german or get rid of the accent, it's not like he's rapping in his native language.. so it's even harder.



never thought of it that way. guess you got a point
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 28th, '08, 17:36

you sound like ax-d at some parts with the variation on the delivery. beat is ok but dont really like the drums they aint strong enough. flow is real simplecozof the beat buts its on beat so good work, emotion is really strong and the delivery is good, best line is the one sajjad quoted, i could understand most of it aswell, i think your voice would suit the beat, its just your vocals are to loud and to far away from the beat, more level bewtween the beat and vocals would get it to sound alot slicker.


good short track though :y:
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby DelinQuent » Jul 28th, '08, 18:31

good lyrics, good flow but it falls off it some spots. rhymes were good.

overall i liked the flow for the most part. good shit man, youre improving by leaps and bounds :y:
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 28th, '08, 23:14

thx to both :worship:

@bar...yeah actually tash wanted to add somthin afterwards but then i was like fuck it i release it :sweating:

@dq..thx man... :worship: i know its a bit much to ask but could u may tell me where its fallin off :sweating:
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Postby Tornado » Jul 28th, '08, 23:22

dont think the flow goes well on the beat, but lyrically solid though...i think your pronoucaition is better than before though..tho the accent still makes it hard, but with practice it'll be clearer
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Re: C-Riz-16 Bars of Darkness[prod. by Tash8]

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 29th, '08, 00:29

:y: thx for checkin tornado :y:
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