Tornado- Don't Get It Started

[Tornado]

Ok, this is a more of a practice track recorded a while back but it's the most recent thing i've done so please leave feed

so listen- Tornado- Don't Get It Started
http://www.myspace.com/tornadothestorm
or
http://www.zshare.net/audio/1831975792424595/

Lyrics

1st Verse


Live minimium wagely/them killings daily
those bloods are crazy/ but shit don't faze me
dunno man maybe/ cos i was raised see
where bloods be feisty/ leaves a taste see
people to hasty/ to call each other waste G
they get out the knives/ so people know not to play G
just another case b/ of murdering young babies
but media portray/ of that we untame see
i call it reality/ media say anarchy
madman manically/ go out savagely
there is no sanity/ hope all in the vanity
of the young families/ this shit is calamity
is this how it has to be?/ i call this amity
ville is a tradegy/ same as a travesty
i think can i be/ somebody glad you see
but i get pulled back/ i feel i'm losing my sanity

Chorus (Repeat 4)
Don't Get It Started N****/Cos you'll never go win
The kinda shit that we in/ we just living in sin

2nd Verse
There's no one to talk to/ and no one to pray to
think god's there?/ you dreaming in fables
if your mind is unable/ let me say it out clearly
death is all round/ you see it quite clearly
no matter the place/ no matter the race
no matter the age/ you could still catch a case
of a reaction/ between two factions
over petty shit/ this shit's a distraction
all of politics/ i could talk a lotta shit
bout the shit today/ but i ain't switching topics kid
i'm just a civilian/ dreaming of millions
owning all buildings/ and haters wanna kill him
we ain't giving N****s props/ when he climb to the top
i say good on Soulja Boi/ even though that shit isn't hot
but back on the block/ N****s screwing a lot
dream of living that life
where we left here to rot

Chorus

and i still got my accent so if you dont like it

[B.A.D.]

oh daymnz

myspace ain't workin on me atm, can u zshare it

lyrics are FYA!!!

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

2times lol at me
1st....when your 2nd player kicked in i was like wtf!! haha...needed like 3sec to figure it out
2nd... i listen to the wrong track xD hahaha
okay....ryhmes are damn amazing/great dude...but flow went off at times...like u couldnt catch up sumtime...

[<Stiiccy>]

woah crazy beat bro loved it
again your accent is very strong, i think it makes you sound unique which is good
i liked your voice
flow was off at times
lyrics were the shit dude i loved em
good track bro 7/10

[Jay-19]

Didn't like it. Not my kind of rap, you know?

As said, lyrics were good. But the flow needs improvement. And the beat is awful in my opinion.
And you slur a little bit on some words, but who doesn't.

[Angevilish]

your flow seemed off in some points, as you were running out of breath, & sometimes it was vice versa, you were too fast & due to that you had to make quite long pauses. Lyrics were fire, I liked those inner rhymes, it made your rhyme sceme great. Delivery could be way better if it wasn't for your accent...As for the content I just LOVE it. nicely done
keep doin' your thang bro.

If you got some freetime, I'd appreciate it if you Return The Feed In This Page
Thanx in adavance...

[enjinn]

flow was a lil choppy...but as others have said your rhymes were good...keep doing you

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

defiantly an improvement, just keep an eye on how many sylybles your tryna stick into lines it puts you off flow sometimes and makes you rush a bit. lyrics were good, delivery was strong, prouncation is better just keep up the practice.


your doin everything right with the progress so keep doin what ya doin

[Tornado]

thank yall for the feed

[Boston]

first i read your lyrics, and i think there better than some people on the site (everyones entitled to their opinion lol) but at some points i also think they are forced, like you wanted it to work bad. your flow is off at times, and like most people said in here. count syllables. make sure each line matches, or around the same area.

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something similar. not bad for um 'practice'? haha. keep it up though

my new track: http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=49247 - feed please

[Speech]

damn the lyrics..they were great...hmm i was a lil dissapointed in that flow tho...but for real yo, that beat was underground as shit...luv to hear that good stuff....you rep the block i think thatz one of the main jobs a rappers has to do...wether you represent compton, or disney land, shit man i liked the track, and usually i'm damn annoyed by that accent
it's twice as funny to me, black ppl with british accent haha...had me thinkin of S.A.S. lmao..but i bought their album, i think they fire

keep up the good work
peace