Untouchablez-Like A Model

[DelinQuent]

brand new, just recorded. All feedback is appreciated
http://www.zshare.net/audio/1900804158776d92/
Intro-Both
Verse 1-PikPocket
Hook-PikPocket
Verse 2-DelinQuent
Lyrics:
Verse 1:dress just like a model
prada shoes gucci purse
n all her clothes designer
baby lookin bad as hell
Ms. Americano
you should be my bridal
i wanna give u my all
you can be the star tonight
imma be your astronot
you can ride the rocket ship
imma take you to the top
take it till ya yellin stop
take it till ya screamin pac
take it like i need it baby
i need tah be seen witcha
i be fly all by my self
but i dont know no body else
that can get me like you got me
got me spittin game all sloppy
still bothered to holla
sed mami you so bootyfull
i .. i mean beautiful
you dont know what id do to you
suhin like bang bang
it was suhin like oy vay
she twist ha body like palatis
now she got me wantin tah sing

Verse 2:hips, like a coke botttttleeee/
beauty so amazin, got me crazy, find myself comittin, she/
dont want comittment, i be the shirt and you,be the pants, this could work if ya give/
it a chance,dont be scared, i be your man,dont want sex, i just want/
a chance, in my hands should be your heart, the way we talk i could feel/
that spark, after one kiss you was all up on, and my heart skipped a beat, thought you/
wanted me, i wanna see where this goooesss/
so go with the flow, cause i'm feelin nice, and this feels right, yeah for once/
in my life, got no worries, feel no fears, baby yeah, i could take/
you there, just say where, but you say no, got me feelin so/
confused, i aint really here to play you out, ima stand up guy lemme lay you down/
girl be the one lemme take you out, got a lotta problems you could save me now

[<Stiiccy>]

hhmmm...
autotune was a lil over used...whatever it sounded cool in some places

flow was flawess on this shit...both of you had great flow

lyrics..ehh nothing was orginal, nothing i havent heard before...and you guys are copying exactly what the mainstream is doing...

delivery was cool...not a problem with it

i liked the hook for some reason,...very catchy

the beat was a bit repetitive for me

6.5/10 - be more orginal

[Raf Remix]

this is real nice.

good work

i like the TI effect and the secondary vocals. it compliments the main pella well. beat is tight.

overall i was feelin this. u shud be pleased with wat u done here

[DelinQuent]

thanks for the feedback.

thanks for the comments on the flow, ive been working on that a lot lately, good to see its paying off.

for this song we werent looking for the most creative, just seeing if we could make a good hit type of song. but i do understand your comment on lack of originality and yes, it's lacking.

thanks for the feed on the hook, pik wrote that.

and raf, glad to hear you liked it

thanks again for the honest feedback sticcy

[Emadyville]

Ok here's my thoughts.

For one, I dislike in general these type of songs, just talking about girls and stuff, not saying I think they suck, I would just never listen to them.

With that aside.

Hook: Loved it, thought it fit, thought the use of autotone was good even though I'm not all for that, you made it work and it worked well.

First Verse: Well done, good lyrics, good verse overall.

Second Verse: more personal type, loved the stand up guy lay you down line, sounded great and fit the beat.

Flow: Amazing.


Overall: 10/10

My only complaint is my personal view on the autotone and this type of song, sounded too commercial, but hey, I'm not going to knock this song because I don't personally like those two things. Great job

[DelinQuent]

thanks for the honesty.

i realize a lot of people here will dislike the mainstream sound of the song but hey, can't please em all lol.

just looking for feedback on flow and lyrics, and i'd like to know what you think of this song versus radio songs.

[B.A.D.]

OH SHIT!!

I loved the autotune on this particular track, excelent use of it, hook is amazing, catchy as fuck

first verse, hmm, is it me or the lyrics didn't matched the verse entirely, very very strange structure but did the job well, nice lyrics, some lines were good, simple but works 100% for the use of this song

couldn't enjoy it that much cuz I kept on being interrupted while listenin hahaha (like 10 times, no joke)

second verse amazing, more like that, flow was str8 fire, lyrics do the job excelent for the track

nice track from both of you, hook amazing, autotune amazing, 10/10

defo has first single value

who made the beat btw?

[DelinQuent]

thanks for the feed axe. I'm glad people are enjoying this track even tho it has a very mainstream sound

[Tornado]

this song is done like you say in a very mainstream way and does really sound up there, especially the hook and your verse, especially the flow DQ but that's my problem with it..why make something that everyone else is doing, if it was just for a mainstream type single but really i wouldn't really give this much of a listen if i hear it on MTV..tho thats just my taste

[DelinQuent]

thanks for the input tornado.

The idea of this song is just to get attention. While you guys dislike the mainstreamness of it, everyone else who doesn't rap has been extremely impressed with it. So far it's doing a good job of getting peoples attention to listen to the more serious tracks that we have and that was the whole plan.

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

sorry guyz didnt like the song at all....pik pocket...ur flow and performance was weak to me
hook was annoying....
DQ started off weak too..but after "gooooess" it was KIND of better..but still not ur usual standard
sry guyz... big downfall from Nike Boots in my opinion

[DelinQuent]

No need to say sorry. Thanks for the honest opinion . I can't expect everyone to like every song.

[Big Proof 4ever]

1st,quality is very very very good i mean insane,buuuut i didnt like song at all,but dont hate,cuz its totaly not my style,i hate songs like that,still good job

[DelinQuent]

nah man, no worries, i completely understand that some people will just hate this song.

not everyone likes love songs, not everyone likes radio songs, and not everyone likes underground songs. people's opinions differ and i completely understand that

thanks for the comment on the quality tho, been fucking around with the EQ a bit more.

[Kez]

Yup, i too hate this song

Sounds just like everything out nowadays
I mean no offense but it annoys me cause pretty much anyone can write a song about a woman's figure

Also, lol @ your line "i don't want sex"; sorry DQ but the whole song before it was basically verbally lusting after this woman.

Lyrics average, concept shit
Flow pretty good
Hook was actually sung pretty well

I don't like the song cause it aint my thing
But to your credit it sounds pretty professional