[New] Bar - Kill [Preview]

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

the vocals are mixed awkwardly it was for effect but i dont know if ill keep it, this is a rough mix aswell its just a small preview i want some feedback on


http://www.zshare.net/audio/194770541ea892a6/

verse 1
i fear no evil but the evil i produce
take the blood out your body so its nothing but a juice
you aint rushing to the booth ill leave you gushin thats the truth
i aint a level headed player ill leave the devil dead in prayer
so im the evil leaded sprayer come and test with my anticts
to see if im acting have your eyelids retracting
when you see what your trapped in
i bring death worse than death from a curse
that kills your whole fucking family leaves you driving the herse
who brings the eviliest verse ?
come and test my might ill have you blessed in light
that burns out your eyelids leaves you stressed at night
im ten levels above whatever level you love
i do it all with grace so when i release the dove
i take my shotgun out n shoot the thing tae fuck
promote self harming but never harm myself
its the bars that tell if youve got scars to sell
shit i fell down a drain and landed in hell

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

yeah as u mentioned....vocals were way too hard too understand..badly mixed...
umm...lol at the pronouncation.....sounded kinda funny how u pronounced couple words...no hate on ur accent..im kool wit it...
but the lyrics are sick as fuck..

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

yeah as u mentioned....vocals were way too hard too understand..badly mixed...
umm...lol at the pronouncation.....sounded kinda funny how u pronounced couple words...no hate on ur accent..im kool wit it...
but the lyrics are sick as fuck..

funny ?

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

yeah well to me..cuz i expect a slidly different pronouncation..but that comes somthin like this ..argh nevermind
u got lyrics so yeah good job on that
but i guess u know that im not THE fan of other accent...even i got used to UK accent by now

[Xray]

damn man beat is fucking sick as fuck. delivery/flow/lyrics fucking sick bro

fucking crazy man.

[Robbie G]

I thought it was pretty good, beat was nice and the flow was on.

[Kez]

It was hard to understand some of it, that'll be because of the mixing though.

Beat reminds me of Royce's "Boom"

Flow was absolute sickness though, especially at the end it was right on the drums.
Delivery was decent but could have been more fierce for this type of track. I also think the "Kill, kill, kill" at the end could have been more energised. But lyrics are still sick.

Can't wait till you put out an actually complete song, then you'll take over again
Remember Pride

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

yeah well to me..cuz i expect a slidly different pronouncation..but that comes somthin like this ..argh nevermind
u got lyrics so yeah good job on that
but i guess u know that im not THE fan of other accent...even i got used to UK accent by now

fair enough, but no need to laugh at it lol thanks for the feedback

damn man beat is fucking sick as fuck. delivery/flow/lyrics fucking sick bro

fucking crazy man.

thanks man, appreciate it

I thought it was pretty good, beat was nice and the flow was on.

thanks, appreciate the feedback

It was hard to understand some of it, that'll be because of the mixing though.

Beat reminds me of Royce's "Boom"

Flow was absolute sickness though, especially at the end it was right on the drums.
Delivery was decent but could have been more fierce for this type of track. I also think the "Kill, kill, kill" at the end could have been more energised. But lyrics are still sick.

Can't wait till you put out an actually complete song, then you'll take over again
Remember Pride

yeh it will be re-mixed and re-recorded, i jsut needed feedback to see if it would turn out good coz i was in two minds with the track and the takeover is coming trust me

[<Stiiccy>]

lmao

ill feed it once you learn how to speak englis
or even rap for that matter

[<VerbalTouch>]

you seriously just ripped the beat i was about to use

all i heard was

drgbjdfxhbsikjeghdskjfhbalhbalfuckfuckblahblahaetsegrhrhfbgr

[mart85]

pretty cool, sick lyrics about the mixing, that effect doesn'T really work on all sound system... I can hear it fine on my speakers, but if I put it on a mono system, I can barely hear it so yeah, you would have to tweak the effect a little

but the verse is sick

[Tash8]

wow mixing is awful hahah.. doesn't work on either headphoens or speakers

but from what i heard ur flow is cool, and lyrics are cool man

and just at jab at chris (i wouldn't be saying he pronounces shit funny if i was you)

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

pretty cool, sick lyrics about the mixing, that effect doesn'T really work on all sound system... I can hear it fine on my speakers, but if I put it on a mono system, I can barely hear it so yeah, you would have to tweak the effect a little

but the verse is sick

yeh ill sort it all out when i get my new setup i can never get a balanced sound in cool edit for some reason appreciate the feedback

wow mixing is awful hahah.. doesn't work on either headphoens or speakers

but from what i heard ur flow is cool, and lyrics are cool man

and just at jab at chris (i wouldn't be saying he pronounces shit funny if i was you)

like mart said it sounds different on different systems coz on my headphones it sounds fine just "spooky" like i was goin for, but yeh ill sort it for the actualy track, aprpeciate the feedback

[Tornado]

nice sample at the intro to buildup, though i thought it was a bit loud..your delievery was almost on point all the way through but i thought you coudl've been more aggressive with it but i'm looking forward to hearing the re-mixed version. I dont knw shit about mixing so i'll keep my mouth shut

good work

[Mc Cubz]

I wont comment on the mixing bcos theres ppl here that know alot more about that than me.

Regarding only your performance and delivery I think this is forward progress - your not perfect but I would much rather battle the old bar than have to face an angry scotsman that likes to hit punchlines like he means them. I found the chorus abit simple and repetitive with no catchyness to it so if your still in the process of making this song I would suggest re-thinking it if your planning to do a big track.

safe hope this is somewhat useful.