Burn You Down- Epiphany feat. Ice Killa

[Requiem]

This is Epiphany's first attempt at recording a song, and it's going to be on his EP: The Tape, a mixtape consisting of 5 tracks. 'The Tape' is his way of making himself known on TR, so people know he's around and he's a rapper too.
Epiphany handles the hook, and verse 1. Ice Killa (me) handles verse 2, and producing/mixing beat.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/19960980aab2e9cc/

of course, comment, and give suggestions. just don't trash the track

[Solace]

I could barely breath man! When I get better at writing, delivery and breathing, I NEED to re-do this. So dont be too hard guys

PS. Technically, its 3 tracks since Intro+Outro dont really count.
PPS. LYRICS

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[Chorus : Epiphany]
Verbally punish you, I'll burn you down,
Your not a rapper or a gangster, your a clown,
You can't rhyme, and I know that your a biter,
I'll burn you down like a fag and a lighter.

[Verse 1 : Epiphany]
Say your sick, listen to a couple of your tracks,
if you havent noticed, most of them are wack,
Me and Ice Killa, rip your shit through hardcore flows,
we bully you with our style, no need for sticks and stones,
cause all of your bones, are probably made of dough,
and even on the mic, you rap like an 8 year old,
and most of your shit makes people start to doze,
my shit wakes people like a couple cups of joe,
but I don't try to act cocky, it came to me from birth,
same reason why your wack, it's almost like a curse,
im your only enemy, you're everyones bitch,
cause i dont take shit from you, that's your only wish,
to get respected by me, and it aint gunna happen,
so some how you just had to start rappin',
telling me that your gunna start the capping,
(Haha) Man, I gotta stop the laughing,
I dont wanna hurt your feelings little boy, go and start nappin'
while I'm passing the mic to emcee Ice
but he aint as sick as me...uh...what? PHYSCH!

[Chorus x2]

[Verse 2 : Ice Killa]
You gettin' rocked by these beats,
and stomped by these cleats,
but you don't have the guts to walk on these streets,
you nuthin' but fresh meat,
you can't take the heat,
so step away from me,
you don't know the meaning of a real G,
and i don't mean a gangster,
you ain't nothin but a wanksta,
like an everlasting gobstopper,
I don't ever lose my flavor,
and sure I may be hated,
but I'm the G, and the G stands for Greatest.
that means u the weakest link in this chain we call the rap game,
i don't care about club banging, i'll leave u hangin' like saddam hussein,
but my aim is to maintain a flame, no matter how much fame i attain,
i'll always remain the same, good god i'm insane,
words racing in my brain, i'm experiencing pain,
my parachute won't open, i'm falling like rain.....
[Chorus]

[Robbie G]

Aright.

First off you sounded bored, you need to put more emotion into it. Also make sure you memorize the lyrics, instead of reading them.(Not sure if you were or not )

Secondly I didn't really feel like you were going with the beat, just talking over it.

Still keep it up though, good to see you guys working together to make something.

[Solace]

Aright.

First off you sounded bored, you need to put more emotion into it. Also make sure you memorize the lyrics, instead of reading them.(Not sure if you were or not )

Secondly I didn't really feel like you were going with the beat, just talking over it.

Still keep it up though, good to see you guys working together to make something.

Thanks, and the thing is i did accapella and he mixed it so i didnt even know the beat. And yes, i was reading it

But thanks for checking it man!

[Robbie G]

Thanks, and the thing is i did accapella and he mixed it so i didnt even know the beat. And yes, i was reading it

But thanks for checking it man!

Yeah man, that makes it hard to flow.

[Solace]

I'll try not to be 2 hard on you guys

Epiphany sounds like a robot in the chorus I guess it could be the mixing, or just him sounding bored that cause it.

Gotta gotta gotta show some emotions, without them you can't make a good song.

The beat, wasn't one of your best ice, Doesn't stand up to the other ones I've heard from you

Ice you sounded pretty good...but the flow was a shaky thing cause of the beat lol

Just practice and don't quit cause it's taking a while

Thanks man! I was hoping youd comment on this lol. I can easily see my writing improve but since this is my first track you know, I cant really see anything yet haha. And i aint gunna quit, thats for sure. The beat, i only heard it 10 minutes ago so i didnt know. It was alright but just didnt feel like it went with a diss track, so definately will be redone as i said.

[Requiem]

I'll try not to be 2 hard on you guys

Epiphany sounds like a robot in the chorus I guess it could be the mixing, or just him sounding bored that cause it.

Gotta gotta gotta show some emotions, without them you can't make a good song.

The beat, wasn't one of your best ice, Doesn't stand up to the other ones I've heard from you

Ice you sounded pretty good...but the flow was a shaky thing cause of the beat lol

Just practice and don't quit cause it's taking a while

lmao at robot thing. i think it sounds kinda cool, all i did was overlap the chorus. gave it that echo-ish effect. also, i agree wasn't best beat. now that i look back at it, the speed was perfect, but beat didn't match good enough.
we're going to remix it after Epiphany's The Tape comes out.
thx, btw, for the comment on my verse. lmao, with a harder, more controlled beat it would sound better.
thx for commenting chet. will remix it. sooner than anyone thinks

[Solace]

and the remix will have someone named "Starr" on it

if I get a fucking mic

LOL

you could do the chorus !

[Requiem]

and the remix will have someone named "Starr" on it

if I get a fucking mic

u could definitely do a verse. once i get the remix's beat done. i'll pm it to u (after u have a mic), and we can get craking on it.

[<VerbalTouch>]

Hope this gots nothing to do with Verbal Touch

[KDEWolf]

[Tash8]

and even on the mic, you rap like an 8 year old,

^ I wouldn't be talking Epiphany or whatever, cause you sound like ur 6.

[Hadez]

hahahahahahahaha

this Epiphany guy is hilarious!

[Boston]

well no disrespect but you have a lot of work to do.
it is better to memorize your lyrics because you can just close ya eyes and put all you got into it haha even though i read my lyrics and i bet most of yall cant even tell lol. but ya man get into it. write everyday and you would see yourself improve bro.

and icekilla, good looks on reaching out to up and coming rappers

[Solace]

well no disrespect but you have a lot of work to do.
it is better to memorize your lyrics because you can just close ya eyes and put all you got into it haha even though i read my lyrics and i bet most of yall cant even tell lol. but ya man get into it. write everyday and you would see yourself improve bro.

and icekilla, good looks on reaching out to up and coming rappers

Thanks man I know i gotta lot of work to do.

@Tash8, lmao. Well wtf am i supposed to say. I rap like im 6, but you rap like your 8?