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Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 19th, '08, 22:59

This is the 2nd single to my Ice Killa LP. i'm feeling good today, so i thought, might as well release a track. also, i saw big ax posted up a single, so i thought i'd continue the trend.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/50068031dc061e0c/

http://rapidshare.com/files/155650237/G ... a.mp3.html

i did beat, mixed, everything with this one. please comment/criticize, whatever it is u want to do. just no 3 word responses like "i liked it," or "i hated it" cuz that's just spam... :8)
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Solace » Oct 19th, '08, 23:04

It was okay. Definately better than Lime Light. The beat was better definately too. Your improving in those i can see. Flow was good, didnt see many obvious flow fall-offs. I loved the pistol cock before the chorus. The chorus was alright too. You kinda sounded bored, but yeah i have that problem too (as many know ;)) And i liked how it ended with the pistol cocking and then shooting. Overall 7.5/10, for a TRshady artist.

(I dont care about quality cause i know thats what you have to work with, so even with studio quality this would be 7.5)
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 19th, '08, 23:08

^thx man. glad u can see improvement in me. hopefully with a few more tracks i'll be at my peak. :8)
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 19th, '08, 23:20

upload on something else not workin for me
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 19th, '08, 23:28

<VerbalTouch> wrote:upload on something else not workin for me


upped on rapidshare :8)
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Emadyville » Oct 20th, '08, 00:21

Ok i think the beat was decent not great, but fit the tone of the song. Your flow was not bad but def needs improvement. I had this problem in the past and it took time for me, i remember sounding monotoned like this before, so it's something you can def work on. The hook was pretty good, like shady said you sounded bored, but i liked the hook, the way it played off the beat was nice. The rhymes and content were pretty good, just need to improve your emotion and work on the flow. Keep it up though :y:
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 20th, '08, 00:35

^thx :8) i'm definitely going to be working on emotion and delivery for future tracks, cuz i'm still just starting out. but i'm glad this is an improvement over my last few tracks.
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Tash8 » Oct 20th, '08, 01:38

well it's an improvement

you don't sound confident at all... flow was decent

beat was pretty awful, drum pattern was GREAT but the sounds u used seemed to fake or osmething... and the melodies were awful, pattern was fine, but everything else was bad, from the quality sounds to the mixing, i mean there's so much inference, especially in the hook... plus i don't hear a bass... also it seemed with ur change up, u started to use like a different key, which made it sound inconsistent. I also felt the high hat was too loud... i think the way you took out the focus of the snare and made it kick and high hats were unique and when the clap/snare drops it's not too forced whcih is something i haven't much of..

i know i focused more on the beat than everything, and its cuz i can't feed the rapping 2 much since i dont rap.
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 20th, '08, 01:54

^that's the best review i've had from u yet :o an improvement, i'm glad i was able to up the ante a little bit with my tracks right now. cuz i'm still working to reach my peak, it might take a while, but i'm getting there. slowly but surely, every track is practice, right?
glad u commented the beat tho, since ur a beat guru urself. also glad u liked the drums, and the how i did the high hat, kick thing in the hook.
yea, i'm not best with melodies, mainly cuz i don't have a piano to hook up, and i don't have much to work with on my program. i need more instruments and sounds to work with, perhaps u could help me with that.
thx for the in depth review :8)
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Tash8 » Oct 20th, '08, 02:09

IceKilla wrote:^that's the best review i've had from u yet :o an improvement, i'm glad i was able to up the ante a little bit with my tracks right now. cuz i'm still working to reach my peak, it might take a while, but i'm getting there. slowly but surely, every track is practice, right?
glad u commented the beat tho, since ur a beat guru urself. also glad u liked the drums, and the how i did the high hat, kick thing in the hook.
yea, i'm not best with melodies, mainly cuz i don't have a piano to hook up, and i don't have much to work with on my program. i need more instruments and sounds to work with, perhaps u could help me with that.
thx for the in depth review :8)


well u use fl 8 right?
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Solace » Oct 20th, '08, 02:25

Tash8 wrote:
IceKilla wrote:^that's the best review i've had from u yet :o an improvement, i'm glad i was able to up the ante a little bit with my tracks right now. cuz i'm still working to reach my peak, it might take a while, but i'm getting there. slowly but surely, every track is practice, right?
glad u commented the beat tho, since ur a beat guru urself. also glad u liked the drums, and the how i did the high hat, kick thing in the hook.
yea, i'm not best with melodies, mainly cuz i don't have a piano to hook up, and i don't have much to work with on my program. i need more instruments and sounds to work with, perhaps u could help me with that.
thx for the in depth review :8)


well u use fl 8 right?

Since he didnt answer, i will for him. Yes he does ;)
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Tash8 » Oct 20th, '08, 02:28

shadymademe wrote:
Tash8 wrote:
IceKilla wrote:^that's the best review i've had from u yet :o an improvement, i'm glad i was able to up the ante a little bit with my tracks right now. cuz i'm still working to reach my peak, it might take a while, but i'm getting there. slowly but surely, every track is practice, right?
glad u commented the beat tho, since ur a beat guru urself. also glad u liked the drums, and the how i did the high hat, kick thing in the hook.
yea, i'm not best with melodies, mainly cuz i don't have a piano to hook up, and i don't have much to work with on my program. i need more instruments and sounds to work with, perhaps u could help me with that.
thx for the in depth review :8)


well u use fl 8 right?

Since he didnt answer, i will for him. Yes he does ;)


then if you want to start something off, and send it to me... i'm fine to help and show you some things i know with the program.
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 20th, '08, 02:48

Tash8 wrote:then if you want to start something off, and send it to me... i'm fine to help and show you some things i know with the program.


sweet, next beat i start i'll pm u, along with my msn mess. so u could show me the ropes of fl 8. i mean, i've got the basics down, but i don't know how to polish it, u know what i mean?
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby B.A.D. » Oct 20th, '08, 03:08

k, ama be hard on this one

beat is really bad, way too fruity loopish, needs more harmonies n stuff, also the drum loops is weird, not bad, the drums are ok, but I dunno

about the lyrics, those were great, worked perfectly with your flow, so thats a good thing :y:

quality is still need to be fixed, but I can't judge that since I'm not a good mixer myself

delivery can be better, you need to feel it more

overall, good song, defo makes me look forward to your album :y: :worship:
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Re: Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

Postby Requiem » Oct 20th, '08, 03:16

^thx for the feed.

aint no one like the beat :'( i liked it myself, which is why i wrote lyrics for it. but i guess it's people's taste. :sweating:

thx everyone who commented, keep it coming.... :8)
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