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"Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Emadyville » Nov 7th, '08, 02:26

New song is up at http://www.myspace.com/ddubswinch

Feedback please.
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Robbie G » Nov 7th, '08, 03:35

I liked it.

The beat was a good choice and I thought you fit it. When I first heard the chorus I thought it was kind of corny, but the second time around it grew on me. Overall the verses were nice. There were a few times when I felt like it started to falter but it never turned bad. :y:
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Emadyville » Nov 7th, '08, 03:36

Thanks for the feed
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby ShAdY CaPo 08 » Nov 7th, '08, 05:49

call me shady cause i had a relapse... :y: :b:
see they can trigger me but they'll never figure me out...

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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Xray » Nov 7th, '08, 08:47

ShAdY CaPo 08 wrote:call me shady cause i had a relapse... :y: :b:

Cockiest line I've heard so far.

Chorus was weak, wasn't catchy wasn't enjoyable either. I didn't like it. Emadyville you did a lot better than DQ on this one, cause Im sick of DQ's whispering delivery. Your lyrics was good to, but the mixing didn't make me enjoy the track. Not bad of a song but definitely could of been better with the flowing, delivery & mixing.
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Boston » Nov 7th, '08, 13:47

well i think the 2nd verse has a better flow than the first, as for someone said they were sick of DQ because of his whispering delivery, well i really dont bump you so it doesnt really bother me, right now anyways.. lol

also for the 2nd verse what the hell is moodily, is that even a word (sorry if it is) lol, you cant just put words together to rhyme, 1st/3rd verses had better lyrics but i like how you ended your verse DQ. chorus is straight, could of been way better

ill try to feed more later, im in a rush, have court :[

not a bad track though
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Jay-19 » Nov 7th, '08, 13:52

Not a bad track guys.

Some sick flow from time to time. Pretty tight rhymes and with a nice concept.
Didn't really like the chorus at first, but like Shady Babie said, it really grew on me and the second time I really enjoyed it. I'm not a master at mixing, but I think it could have been a little better.

But overall an enjoyable track.
Good work guys! :y:
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Nov 7th, '08, 14:41

moodily is the adverb form of moody. not a commonly used word so i can see why you thought i might have made it up lol.

thanks to everyone for their feed.

@xray-i know what you mean about the whisper sound, but my voice was just raspy while recording this. normally i dont sound like that, thanks for pointing that out tho, i may decide to rerecord because of that :y:
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Emadyville » Nov 7th, '08, 15:32

Yeah everyone thanks for the feed, it's always appreciated. :y:
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby enjinn » Nov 7th, '08, 23:36

nice beat!...this track has sick flow...yall shined with that...rhymes were on point too...energy and presence were there and hit hard...had some crazy verses...im feeling the lyrics yall dropped...dope shit
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby B.A.D. » Nov 8th, '08, 18:47

beat choice is SICK!

hmm the hook or intro from DQ was wrongly timed, u gotta fix that

D.Dubs verse flow is good, but at the end it gets lost, anyways, lyrics are good, but WAY TOO Eminemish, but the concept is really good, so I liked it, nice style, you gotta keep practicing to not lot lose your flow oftern and to go along with the beat, still this is a great job. second verse is better.

k, hook is better mixed/timed here

DQ comes in SICK! :worship: , the mastering is werid, but still does the job, yo DQ your flow is amazing on this one, u r really really sick on this one, defo DQ owned the track, nice stuff bro

Overall: good track but not something for a single, you should've kept this for later release cuz its good, so... u kno, anyways good track, DQ did amazing job :worship:
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Nov 8th, '08, 19:04

thanks for pointing that out about the first hook ax. i also noticed i messed up the timing on my verse as well lmfao. glad you enjoyed it.

and i just listened again, and sajjad said about a 'whispering' delivery... i definately wasnt whispering. so sajjad if you could explain what you meant that'd be great, thanks.
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Tornado » Nov 8th, '08, 23:32

hook seems a bit off..woah sick flow and lyrics but you could've mixed it better,cos it seemed a little quiet apart from when you did the ad-libs..i can only feed the first verse coz my computers playing up so i try and check it later
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby Emadyville » Nov 9th, '08, 00:16

Thanks Ax, Chett, and Tornado.

But Ax what you mean by "way to eminemish?"
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Re: "Dying" Feat. DelinQuent

Postby randomghost » Nov 9th, '08, 08:39

beat is good....nice flow from both....good delivery...chorus was ok....nice track :y:
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