[NEW] SajN - Blind Ambitions

[SajN]

I've been gone. Now I'm back.
Been practising, and I hope I've improved here and there.
I know that I still have some problems with the accent

I might wanna re-do it, depends on what kinda feed I get lol

Produced by Mart85!

http://www.zshare.net/audio/514959900081e257/

Any feed is appreciated

btw, Ax-D, your album-feed is on the way


[Verse 1]
How you live life is like a deck of cards,
One wrong choice and it’s wrecked apart,
Don't be inept retard, pull yourself together,
'Cos it gets real hard, when you're against the weather
But you can do better, and fix the broken heart
Do what you can, to fix the life’s chosen art.
Do something out of your life, try to be smart.
Don't wait longer, life’s already about to start.
Every another tick can turn out be a big chance
Be quick, and you can learn from the big change
It might be strange, out your range, just don’t faint
You can Fight the rage, you can escape from the cage
and leave your past, leave your place, and you can go far
and you can be praised.
Just follow your heart, do your best,
And you can be blessed to do whatever you want!

[Chorus x 2]
The initiative is surfacing from my Silent Vision
The truth Is that you’re clue less to deal with this Violent Mission
Try open your head and let your Mind just Listen
If you don’t wanna head into a future with Blind Ambitions

The initiative is surfacing from my Silent Vision
The truth Is that you’re clue less to deal with this Violent Mission
Try open your head and let your Mind just Listen
If you don’t wanna head into a future with Blind Ambitions


[Verse 2]
The moon is sinking, the sun is rising.
Pull back the curtains, let the light In.
I don’t wanna hurt 'em, but now I’m fightin’.
against these people, with all I’m writin’
I used to be peaceful, but now I try things.
I don’t wanna be cool, just doin’ my thing.
I like sayin’ what I think, I like bringin’ what I bring
Your mind is igniting, and now I’m lightning the curse.
I’m brighten up the first verse, I followed it.
I’m still not finish to swallow it.
Just trying to look back on all I did.
I rejoiced over my own act, I’m just a big ball of shit.
My own choices were wack, so I wanted to quit,
And admit that I was nothing but a little kid.
But somehow I didn’t regret what I did.
I ignored everything, thought I was perfect,
But the truth laid under the surface

[Chorus x 2]
The initiative is surfacing from my Silent Vision
The truth Is that you’re clue less to deal with this Violent Mission
Try open your head and let your Mind just Listen
If you don’t wanna head into a future with Blind Ambitions

The initiative is surfacing from my Silent Vision
The truth Is that you’re clue less to deal with this Violent Mission
Try open your head and let your Mind just Listen
If you don’t wanna head into a future with Blind Ambitions



[Verse 3]
A decision you make, might be a pissin' mistake
But if you're trickin' the game, you could be kickin' next day
And if you're lickin' the fame, you might sit in the lake
And the time's tickin' away, your mind's hittin' the brakes
It ain't getting so great, better change gear and accelerate
But remember, the fate's all Up to You unless
You wanna suffer through this mess,
or are you gonna be tougher and show who's the best
Like me when I was depressed, the life was a stress
I wanted to be killed, untill, the rap music rescued me
so I used it and fled, it boosted me, so I knew at least
that I could loose the beast inside of my head.
That led to opening my eyes, looking out for my weakness
I tried to seek it, all this in secret, soon I got speechless, of how I was actin'.
Then I reached it, the point where I knew what was happenin'
So I fucked the past, and I started rappin'!

[Chorus x 2]
The initiative is surfacing from my Silent Vision
The truth Is that you’re clue less to deal with this Violent Mission
Try open your head and let your Mind just Listen
If you don’t wanna head into a future with Blind Ambitions

The initiative is surfacing from my Silent Vision
The truth Is that you’re clue less to deal with this Violent Mission
Try open your head and let your Mind just Listen
If you don’t wanna head into a future with Blind Ambitions

[SajN]

there u go

[Jay-19]

Well you improved man, that's for sure.
But you still need work.

Especially your delivery and pronunciation.
Your flow comes and goes in this song. The beginning of each verse is pretty decent. But then it goes downhill.
The delivery, you need to try different styles of rapping. Because it sounds like your just speaking on this you know. Just fuck around with different styles, like try to scream, whisper or whatever, and you'll find your own style.
Pronunciation, got a lot better from the last thing I heard from you. Still need to fix your accent some more.

Lyrics, nothing wrong with the lyrics at all. Really good job on that man!

Hope this helps you improve more than you already have.

[SajN]

Thanks to both of you

How much could you understand me without lyrics ?






More feed please

[Jay-19]

Thanks to both of you

How much could you understand me without lyrics ?

I could understand a lot of it. Some words were a little blurry though, but hey, that happens to everyone.
So yeah, just some word here and there.

[SajN]

Aaah, that's good
I'm glad I'm showing some improvement

[Slimm]

I listened with lyrics first and it was pretty dope, although i did hear ur lisp, also it sounds like u kinda have ur mouth full food when u rap. I hope thats something u can work on, cause i did like the flow and lyrics. Without lyrics i couldnt understand a whole lot.

[B.A.D.]

wow, that's not the blind ambitions beat I have from mart

this is a masterpiece!!!!1

first thing I notice, your accent is very very hard to understand, but thank God you have ur lyrics there, your flow is real real nice, including the hook, I loved the flow on the hook, and also the general style of the track, your structure is real good, thats a big pro point for ya.

about the lyrics, it shows deepness but not enought, the lyrics are way too simple, u need to make the audience feel more pain into them, I always write in simple lyric scheme with easy lyrics but you have to make a connection to make the listener get more into it.

third verse needs a lot of work, strucutre kinda got lost on here so does the flow, so work on that. but shouldn't be a problem.

best track from you so far, excelent job.. also the mixing and mastering is EXCELENT! , so thats a big shine from you

best things of the track, the beat, the concept and the hook

also be carefull on the timing, third hook wasn't timed well.

[Tash8]

how the hell did you manage to get a hold of this mart beat!

honestly, like no hate or anything but i'm kinda disappointed because this is an amazing beat i could hear Vettori or McMaybe destroy... but yea that was not good, i couldn't understand a word, u can keep ur accent an all but try to work on pronounciation... try to say each letter without slurring it...

that's my main problem with this.. flow was decent, everything else was ok... but seriously mart outshone you on this track by a mile.... damn mart i love this beat...!

[SajN]

Thanks Slimm, Ax-D and Tash

this is a masterpiece!!!!1

I wish this was about my song

I'll take your advices and big thanks for that feed
And yeah, I was actually gonna use the beat Blind Ambitions by Mart, but I thought the beat wouldn't fit for the way I'm rapping the lyrics so I got this one instead. The hook was originally written for the Blind Ambitions beat, and that's why I say Blind Ambitions coz I thought it was a good name and perfect for this concept.

Tash: I asked mart for a beat I got this
I see what you mean, and I'm cool with that.
I'm glad you like the flow and "everything else" though
But thanks



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[mart85]

I just listened to the track, and I would agree with what most people said... the pronounciation/delivery is what needs more work... the flow was mostly good, sometimes it slipped a little tho... and the lyrics were nice, but Ax-D summed it up well, I agree with what he said...

anyways, nice effort on this, keep it up

and about the beat, that's an ooooold beat I made, like more than 2 years ago, it's on my soundclick but I'm glad people liked it

[SajN]

Thank you Mart




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[SajN]

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[Xray]

I don't know if the beat is sampled or not, because the piano sounds sampled, but i love it. Melody is awesome, drums are weak, didn't match at all. I feel it needed that undergroundish drums you know? but cool beat from Mart.

Like I said before, you still sound like you have something in your mouth when your rapping, very boring. You sound like your extremely bored, and you have a tremendous accent. I don't know how you can improve your accent, I mean my parents don't know how to speak English and if they raped they would have a better accent than you, weird example lol.

Lyrics don't mean shit if the spitting is wack, you know? You haven't improved at all from your last audio, and I mean at all. You sound EXACT the same. I told you before quit rapping in English it's not cut out for you, you ignored me and said rapping in Norwegian is boring, yeah like you rapping in English isn't lol

This concept falls in the same group as all your concepts, need to switch it up every now and then. You wanted my feedback so here it is, lol I'm not afraid to tell anyone he sucks or anything so that's why I sound like a dick, but the way I see it, harsh feedback gets to you more than false feedback like the rest of everyone that left you feed, saying it sounded good, or good job when it's a very very shit job.

[Boston]

well your lyrics are not bad in this song, and this is really not a bad song, but let me say that your pronounciation fucks with your flow a lot (sounds a bit choppy) your delivery isn't reallllly bad as some make it out to be haha but i think it can be a lot better and you should get more into it, kind of sounds like your reading at some points, especially when all those multis come in at verse 2 (i believe it is)
keep it up though, you can always get better at practice.

if you need help with anything lemme know