Fallen Soldier

[MC Anonymous]

Fallen Soldier.wma - 7.72MB
Mixing by Me, tell me if I did good for my first track

http://www.zshare.net/audio/533169279ffaae71/ MP3 for Kez (Props to C-rizz)

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

wow.....very good for ur 1st track...
practise on ur voice control.....
flow can be improved but was very decent actually

verse are mixed awful ....hook is kinda better but still :/.....oh well we all dont have perfect quality and shit..so its not really a big flaw...but u headin in the right direction man

(about the hook: did u record every hook once...cuz the 1st one seems better to me..but then its like an up and down with hooks lol)

keep practisin...u headin right

[MC Anonymous]

thanks dude.

[Kez]

I can't listen to this because my phone only plays MP3s and MP4As. Can you convert it for me? I need to hear this.

[MC Anonymous]

I can't listen to this because my phone only plays MP3s and MP4As. Can you convert it for me? I need to hear this.

Alright, h.o

[MC Anonymous]

I can't listen to this because my phone only plays MP3s and MP4As. Can you convert it for me? I need to hear this.

Every time I try to convert it it gets shortened to only 2 verses

[MC Anonymous]

nice emotion in it man...maybe a bit too much, but too much is better then none

agree with c-riz about the mixing, but it is your 1st track...just don't have it sound like that forever lol

pretty much on flow for the whole thing

very good first rap

Thanks dude, I think the reverb was unneeded. I'm not gonna use it anymore until I learn how to exactly use it.

[Robbie G]

I loved the beat man, the into was sweet. The actual rapping was good for your first time, plenty of emotion which is usually peoples problem.

And yeah mixing made it sound odd....or maybe it was the mic..

Still great job, better than I could do.

[MC Anonymous]

I loved the beat man, the into was sweet. The actual rapping was good for your first time, plenty of emotion which is usually peoples problem.

And yeah mixing made it sound odd....or maybe it was the mic..

Still great job, better than I could do.

Yeah I added reverb, which was a bad move LOL
but thanks bro!

[Kez]

For a first track it's well above average.

Beat is good, VTZ
The delivery seems a bit over the top, but it's better to be clear than mumble.
The flow is off quite often but it could be much worse, and for a first track it's not bad.
Hook doesn't seem to have much of a "hook" to it, if you get me.
I can hear like spit in your mouth at times..lol, weird way to word it but i think you can guess what i mean. Sometimes it gets a bit hard to hear what you're saying.

It wasn't perfect, but for a first track it's very promising, and we'll just have to see how you progress throughout future tracks.

[MC Anonymous]

For a first track it's well above average.

Beat is good, VTZ
The delivery seems a bit over the top, but it's better to be clear than mumble.
The flow is off quite often but it could be much worse, and for a first track it's not bad.
Hook doesn't seem to have much of a "hook" to it, if you get me.
I can hear like spit in your mouth at times..lol, weird way to word it but i think you can guess what i mean. Sometimes it gets a bit hard to hear what you're saying.

It wasn't perfect, but for a first track it's very promising, and we'll just have to see how you progress throughout future tracks.

Thanks dude!

[randomghost]

mm...used this beat be4..pretty good ..u need to control ur delivery and voice...like ur yelling..and stuff tryna express ur emotions...buts not like that...just be u and feel the beat...flow is ok...chorus aint that good...but its a good shot for a 1st track though...keep it up bro

[<Stiiccy>]

yeah voice control needs to be worked on...but i liked the emotion...

flow needs some work to ...

mixing needs some work...

but this was preety damn good to be your first track

[MC Anonymous]

Thanks both!

[Requiem]

i like the beat's feel, kinda mystical/epic.

for ur first track it's great. lyrics were great, and the flow was pretty good. tho it was somewhat up and down. spitten it really fast, so it was hard to understand sometimes. but i thought it was sick.

chorus was great, tho it didn't fit beat that well.

verse 2 was much better than verse 1, the emotion was there, delivery was somewhat off, but the lyrics and power of the words saved it.

verse 3, wasn't as good as 2, but had much better delivery.

yea, mixing wasn't that great, but hey, ur first track, and none of us are really professionals. so decent. great track tho. 7/10. not relistanable really, but definitely a great start for a great artist. u can only get better.