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Lyricism

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 30th, '08, 21:31

http://www.mediafire.com/?4v1jni34nvm

:o This track I worked hard on flow and delivery, tell me what you think.

Dropping a lyrical menace, while the clock's ticking
followed by the verbal cues and glock tricking
keep sticking my rhythm to the pounds of the drum
as I spit to the sounds of the rounds in my gun
hounds can be fun, when they begin to bark and bite
you just sparked a light, no more controlling the fight
writing with a purpose, anger begins to surface
curtains drop at my feet, then I release heat like a furnace
fabrics burn, the apartment complex explode
emotions rides the flow, rage begins to glow
my heart was ripped out of my chest for good
with a jaw made of diamond but the rest is wood
why am I so misunderstood? I can't take the pain
look up at the sky and strike a cloud to make it rain
acid gains, droplets slide down my skin and burn
a perfect turn of events for a mind that's thin and stern
the noise of raindrops starts to surround my rhymes
as I rip this paper with a saber and fight this time
no more words to read, I close my eyes to see
my memory enlightens me that I'll never be free
trapped in the vortex of false reality, a haunting image
cross my line and get penalized like the line of scrimmage
darkened chimes sound to display a warning
my mind is wicked like Satan, dangerous like storming,
I will live and die on the battlegrounds of legends
cast a spoken bullet from my mouth, without weapons
the bullet rips fabrics, the mind's boundaries and skull
enough to turn your once sharp brain to fuckin' dull
my mind held on the internal magazine of rhymes
and burst them like an AK when I freestyle and shine
time to take what's mine, reject me words and die
burn and fry, or better yet just turn and try
to stop me, I'll pop you quicker then a blister
mister drag queen sister turnin' to an ass kisser
I'm past wishers, my skill shines brighter then sun rays
brighter then nuclear blasts without sun shades
brighter then a scientifically inclined mind
behind my rhymes lies the bright light of prime time
as it shines in the dark with a force greater then death
greater then your ribcage stretching so you can take a breath
even greater then mathematical symbols, I'm quick and nimble
rhymes transformed from complex to pretty simple
smile at me and I'll break your dimples, I'm off the grid
you stepped up, I strike, now you on the floor coughin' spit
I'll make sure the coffin fits, slam the door shut and laugh
you fallin' on the ground was from the my rifle butt to calf
I'll autograph your eulogy with your own blood, recite it and smile
burn it in front of your fam and spit your own freestyles.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Lyricism

Postby Skorp » Dec 30th, '08, 21:51

Lyrics were hot on this shit; props. Work on your quality..that shit was terrible. Your flow wasn't bad..i could tell you read some lines; I dont really hear the confidence. A lot of stumbles too; if you cant one-take it, punch in.
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Re: Lyricism

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 30th, '08, 21:53

Skorp wrote:Lyrics were hot on this shit; props. Work on your quality..that shit was terrible. Your flow wasn't bad..i could tell you read some lines; I dont really hear the confidence. A lot of stumbles too; if you cant one-take it, punch in.

iight thanks for the feed
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Re: Lyricism

Postby Boston » Dec 30th, '08, 22:03

your improving, you started off strong on the flow, but some lines you need to shorten to make sure you flow good to. and i think with you, punching it will help man. it sounds like your rushing and trying to catch your breath (lacking breath as well) when your rapping. once you get more familiar with this shit more youll notice a huge difference. your lyrics are on point as usual.

i cant wait until you get everything down, no homo or n all haha, but youll be amazing.

keep it up

peep my new track dropping tonight, going to the studio, 10pm est!! haha.
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Re: Lyricism

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 30th, '08, 22:05

Boston wrote:your improving, you started off strong on the flow, but some lines you need to shorten to make sure you flow good to. and i think with you, punching it will help man. it sounds like your rushing and trying to catch your breath (lacking breath as well) when your rapping. once you get more familiar with this shit more youll notice a huge difference. your lyrics are on point as usual.

i cant wait until you get everything down, no homo or n all haha, but youll be amazing.

keep it up

peep my new track dropping tonight, going to the studio, 10pm est!! haha.

Thanks for the feed bro, and of course I'll check it! :y:
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Re: Lyricism

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 31st, '08, 00:45

yeah, u do stumble a lot on this, i think it's cuz u have a lot of off rhyming words scattered throughout, maybe reduce em i hope u know what i mean, anyways good lyrics
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Lyricism

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 01:10

Kaotic wrote:yeah, u do stumble a lot on this, i think it's cuz u have a lot of off rhyming words scattered throughout, maybe reduce em i hope u know what i mean, anyways good lyrics

Yeah thanks for the feed :y:
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