Dreams-Untouchablez

[DelinQuent]

New track from DQ and Pik called "Dreams"
http://www.zshare.net/audio/539046593802cd09/
Intro-DQ
Hook-DQ
Verse One-Pik
Verse Two-Pik
feedback is appreciated

LYRICS:
Intro:i never had a hope, never had a prayer/
yet to the sky my eyes would stare/
watch my life fail, like life isnt fair/
doin this song with the only one who cared/
i never had a hope, no i never made a wish/
but the time is mine to make my life flip/
and if i do this, then i gotta do it big/
cause now when i dream i see me as a king

Hook:i had dre-eams, where i seen things/
i could be big, if i dream big/
do anything anywhere anytime/
the time is mine, yeah the time is mine
see dreams dreams, and i seen things/
i would be big, if i dreamed big/
did anything anywhere anytime/
the time is mine, yeah the time is mine

Verse One:I never had a moment
dawg i never had a chance
beliefs where in the sky
but i never had a prayer
i never had these fans
was the only one that cared
in my dreams dreams
iz the only person that was there
and no i didnt care
and no i dint share
wit my family but damn it see
i never had a parent
i kno you cannot stand it
even comprehend that
imma make it to the top
ramen ramen like i lost my noodle
me the whole kit and caboodle
amuzin roosters cocka ridin
all like all like cokadoodle
im a dorin dorin the explorin
lookin back and laf atchu
tourin up the longitude'
every season never ceasin
till im layin latitude

Verse Two:feelin like i never stalled a fuckin second for a second
so busy writing this record didnt notice the attention i was gettin
tried to be the realest rhyming recognizin i am utilizin realness as a weapon
formed a formula, and formed intah an obominal animal indescribal cannibal
indestructable hannibal lecture canivore lyrical conniseur mr. enterper
i mean enterpeurneur pocket changed the game jus like a fucking adible
i da bull i da shark i da muh tha fuckin beast got a hunger for more
man this mans gotta eat only meat eater you see i been hungry for weeks
imma pray for my prey kuz i tend to munch on the weak


My lyrics were typed by me, Pik's by him... don't ask lmfao

[Slim Zaddy]

wow man , this is just amazing , i really liked it bro, it sounds sick,, the beat is dope and i like the way you flow wit the beat really nice . rhymes were simple in vere 1 but dope in verse 2 . but that's does''nt matter here ,, they are nice .. lyrics are great man,, the hook is dope and catchy .. it's sounds good .. ... and your delivery is pretty nice, overall dope track 9.5/10.. gd job bro here .. keep it up

[DelinQuent]

thanks a lot for the feedback. glad to hear you liked it

[Slim Zaddy]

thanks a lot for the feedback. glad to hear you liked it

you're welcomed man, and by the way i hve just noticed that you hve some other tracks over here,, i will download them and feed you on them 2morw .

[neversnooze]

it was good man, i can tell you put effort into this song good job both you and pik were good, the beat and mixing was nice . No offense but dont use auto tune, it doesnt go well with your voice.

[Boston]

this is very very good compared to the tracks i seen yall drop lately
dq, the autotune really has to go man, i think that ruined the hook in a way, but overwall it was still a good hook. i mean i can understand if your using the autotune to help place the notes that go out of pitch and all that but doesnt sound good.

for pik, the lyrics are nothing special, but there good and simple and the flow is there.
i like the second verse way more though, i like how you changed up your flow towards the end, but i dont like how you changed your voice at the last few bars (autotune again?) i think you should of left it the same. the beat is straight not bad. keep it up

7/10

[DelinQuent]

thanks for all the feedback.

Boston, autotune was only used on the hook for the words "I had dre-eams" then it was cut from the rest. And the effect on the end of pik's second verse isn't autotune. I wasn't really into that either but he insisted lol. That is again for the in-depth feedback, I honestly appreciate it.

EDIT- auto tune was used thru the words "seen things" my bad. So the first bar of the chorus is autotune then it gets cut.

[B.A.D.]

the beat is an excelent choice

the hook is good, the autotune is sick, but I think the hook is to complex, you could've done something simplier, imo

flow from pic is flawless, amazing lyrics and flow, great delivery, verse 2 =

loved the efect on pic's end at the end



good track, but not my 100% thing

[<Stiiccy>]

this is a fucking awesome track...

the autotune on DQ's shit is great

Pik your delivery is lacking,,,fix that

everything else i loved

great track yall...!!

keep droppin shit like this please

[DelinQuent]

thanks for the feed sticcy, glad you put the childish shit behind you

also thanks ax, glad you were feeling it

[Jay-19]

I loved the last verse, that shit was crazy!

The other verses were alright, not nearly on the same level as the last verse though!
Hook is... nah, didn't like it very much. Not my cup of tea I suppose.
This is better than most your songs, both Pik and DQ. You should absolutely drop more tracks similar to this one.
And no offense, but the autotune does not go well with your voice DQ. I have nothing against people using autotune whatsoever, but it just doesn't fit everyone.
So if you keep away from that, I'd be looking forward to your tracks a lot more man.

Anyways, great job you guys!

[DelinQuent]

Bigggg thanks for the indepth feedback jay. I really appreciate it.

[dbeauluvswomen]

i enjoyed this..intro, and chorus were great. i liked that autotune effect on the dream parts
pik flowed nicely on the track..his second verse was great..rhyming and flow was all there..nice
if i had a complaint it would be that other voice on the second verse, but i can look past that. i like messing around with shit like that myself. but overall, nice track

[DelinQuent]

good lookin out dbeau, thanks for taking the time to listen

[Call Me Pik]

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